A Christmas Gift
A rebirth of love and life39 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
I've never been much on the holidays, since childhood I've always felt there are more sad stories than happy ones. And the happiness on TV and family celebrations tend to make the unfortunate even sadder. So, for that reason I'm a sucker for happy endings like yours. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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I've never been much on the holidays, since childhood I've always felt there are more sad stories than happy ones. And the happiness on TV and family celebrations tend to make the unfortunate even sadder. So, for that reason I'm a sucker for happy endings like yours. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, Ric!!!! Your encouraging and exceptional review makes my day so much brighter. I appreciate your sharing your thoughts and wish you the Merriest of Christmases. ann
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Merry Christmas, Ann!
Comment from Terry Broxson
Ann, I think you nailed it. You covered so any bases and did it very skillfully. I loved how you ended the story. A great entry for the contest. Terry.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Ann, I think you nailed it. You covered so any bases and did it very skillfully. I loved how you ended the story. A great entry for the contest. Terry.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Terry, thank you. As always, I appreciate your support and encouragement.
Comment from Sandollar
"We are going an adoption ceremony with a judge and a lot of people watching."
I believe the word to is missing from the above sentence.
The story reads like a Christmas miracle, and I enjoyed experiencing it. All of your characters are richly drawn, each dealing with the ups and downs of life. I was sad that Ben did not live to see the life you've built. All told, this was an excellent read with few grammatical errors. You fooled me. I thought this was a true story.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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"We are going an adoption ceremony with a judge and a lot of people watching."
I believe the word to is missing from the above sentence.
The story reads like a Christmas miracle, and I enjoyed experiencing it. All of your characters are richly drawn, each dealing with the ups and downs of life. I was sad that Ben did not live to see the life you've built. All told, this was an excellent read with few grammatical errors. You fooled me. I thought this was a true story.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much for reading. You are correct about the grammatical errors. I'm afraid I posted too soon -- before the story was completely edited. I will be correcting that! Merry Christmas. ann
Comment from LJbutterfly
You did quite well with this fiction piece. Your story has a realistic feel as you describe a heartwarming relationship between a lonely woman and an unwanted fearful young child. Your story progresses smoothly and has a satisfying ending. Best wishes in the contest.
We are going an adoption ceremony (to) an adoption ceremony
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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You did quite well with this fiction piece. Your story has a realistic feel as you describe a heartwarming relationship between a lonely woman and an unwanted fearful young child. Your story progresses smoothly and has a satisfying ending. Best wishes in the contest.
We are going an adoption ceremony (to) an adoption ceremony
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much for reading and for the good luck wishes in the contest. I appreciate you. ann
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a wonderful story of love and compassion. You gave so many good details, I thought it was true. The love of a child and a gramma is a special gift for Christmas. Best wishes in the contest. Carol
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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This is a wonderful story of love and compassion. You gave so many good details, I thought it was true. The love of a child and a gramma is a special gift for Christmas. Best wishes in the contest. Carol
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Carol, thanks so much for reading and for commenting. There grammatical errors that I am just seeing now. They will be corrected. Merry Christmas. ann
Comment from Austin Yu
This gets me in so much Christmas spirit. I love it! Sarah reminds me of when I was a bit younger in elementary school, always ushering my parents to go places. Great story! I would create more imagery next time with some parts of your story, but the ending was solid. It summarizes the whole point of Christmas and its creed. Good luck
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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This gets me in so much Christmas spirit. I love it! Sarah reminds me of when I was a bit younger in elementary school, always ushering my parents to go places. Great story! I would create more imagery next time with some parts of your story, but the ending was solid. It summarizes the whole point of Christmas and its creed. Good luck
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Austin, I appreciate your review and am wondering what I could have done to receive 5 stars. I always want my reviewers to point out my mistakes or where I missed boat. What should I have done to get that 5th star? thanks. ann
Comment from tfawcus
A fine story. You depict the relationship between Sarah and her foster mother in a way that really tugs at the heartstrings. The gradual building of trust is written with great sensitivity.
I noticed in your profile that you say your writing does not make your living, but makes your living more pleasant. Today, it has made my life more pleasant, too.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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A fine story. You depict the relationship between Sarah and her foster mother in a way that really tugs at the heartstrings. The gradual building of trust is written with great sensitivity.
I noticed in your profile that you say your writing does not make your living, but makes your living more pleasant. Today, it has made my life more pleasant, too.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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What a nice thing to say!! thanks so much for reading and commenting. ann
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent Christmas story. I really enjoyed it. For a while I believed it was a true story but then I looked and it wa listed as fiction. I would imagine this is the kind of Christmas story that would do well in the contest.
It was a fortuitous day in Auguest .....August
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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This is an excellent Christmas story. I really enjoyed it. For a while I believed it was a true story but then I looked and it wa listed as fiction. I would imagine this is the kind of Christmas story that would do well in the contest.
It was a fortuitous day in Auguest .....August
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Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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I have a number of typos that I totally missed!!! Thanks for pointing this one out; it ill be immediately corrected. I appreciate you. ann
Comment from Thesis
Wow, what an impactful story. It's the kind of story that the reader wishes would happen more often. It had all the emotions of love, sadness, wonder, and fear. Both main characters needed each other to fill a major void in their lives. I enjoyed how the relationship evolved. Nice job.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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Wow, what an impactful story. It's the kind of story that the reader wishes would happen more often. It had all the emotions of love, sadness, wonder, and fear. Both main characters needed each other to fill a major void in their lives. I enjoyed how the relationship evolved. Nice job.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2023
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6 stars - exceptional rating --- wow, am I blessed!! thanks so much for reading and for your very generous review. ann