Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I love your writing and I can't wait to read the rest of this
novella. This is a great chapter entry and it's caught my attention. Good luck with the contest.

The next morning Ayesha was in a foul mood. (The following morning)

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023

Always good to hear from you, Barbara, and thank you for the suggestion.
I'm delighted you enjoyed the opening to this new story.
All good wishes, Tony.

Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Cool start. You have developed a few endearing characters and the semblance of a plot, I think.
Is the husband dead? Does Ayesha learn to make real music? What role does Abharamu play?
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023

Thank you for taking the time to read and respond to this opening chapter, Wayne. I appreciate your encouraging comments.
Rather than addressing your three questions now, I assure you that answers will be revealed as the plot unfolds.
All good wishes, Tony.

reply by Wayne Fowler on 04-Dec-2023

smiley face here

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

It is good to see you writing stories again. This is the beginning of one I think I will enjoy reading. Your stories seem to be centered in interesting part of the world. It sounds as though Ayesha may have left her husband to die.or many he was already dead?

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023

Thank you very much for your review, Beth. I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed this first chapter. I think Ayesha fled the scene in a panic, without due regard for the possible consequences. Time will tell what these might be.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

It is good to see you writing stories again. This is the beginning of one I think I will enjoy reading. Your stories seem to be centered in interesting part of the world. It sounds as though Ayesha may have left her husband to die.or many he was already dead?

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023

Thank you very much for your review, Beth. I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed this first chapter. I think Ayesha fled the scene in a panic, without due regard for the possible consequences. Time will tell what these might be.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I love reading your stories Tony, you have a deep understanding of the collectible psyche of the foreign cultures, the unfortunate circumstance of the struggling local poor, the empty, emotionally impoverished, relatively rich western tourist, but now you've created a reversal in fortune, well done My friend, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023

Thanks so much for this review, Roy. Kind words indeed. I'm glad you enjoyed this opening chapter. All good wishes, Tony.

reply by royowen on 04-Dec-2023

Well done