No Rules?
Rule vs. no rules.34 total reviews
Comment from NataliyaS
Nice poem, great statements and a good rhythm. However, throughout reading it, I felt like the rhythm of the poem would flow smoother if the contractions were not used e.g. from "but I'm afraid without them we'd die." to "but I am afraid without them we would die."
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
Nice poem, great statements and a good rhythm. However, throughout reading it, I felt like the rhythm of the poem would flow smoother if the contractions were not used e.g. from "but I'm afraid without them we'd die." to "but I am afraid without them we would die."
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the review and comments. I had noticed on that line I was a syllable short and I'd changed it to read: However, without them we'd likely die. I like contractons because it sounds more natural the way we normally talk.
Comment from Wendyanne
Lol yes your entry "will do". I enjoyed reading your well written piece of no rules poetry Beth. You have expressed your thoughts and feelings well and I wish you good luck.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
Lol yes your entry "will do". I enjoyed reading your well written piece of no rules poetry Beth. You have expressed your thoughts and feelings well and I wish you good luck.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you Wendyanne. I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was fun to write.
Beth
Comment from Chuck Keller
Very well done. You followed the "no rules" perfectly.
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You're absolutely right about the consequences of our current situation in politics.
When one of the two parties has no rules or makes up their own set, chaos is the result.
American people MUST pay attention and VOTE
Thanks for sharing this one with us and good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
Very well done. You followed the "no rules" perfectly.
And
You're absolutely right about the consequences of our current situation in politics.
When one of the two parties has no rules or makes up their own set, chaos is the result.
American people MUST pay attention and VOTE
Thanks for sharing this one with us and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you Chuck, I appreciate the review and comments. I'm glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from patcelaw
If I had a six for this, I would definitely give it to you. But I am all out of sixes for today. I wish you the very best with all of your writing, and I wish you the best in the contest. Have a good weekend, and God bless. Patricia.
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
If I had a six for this, I would definitely give it to you. But I am all out of sixes for today. I wish you the very best with all of your writing, and I wish you the best in the contest. Have a good weekend, and God bless. Patricia.
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you Patricia, I glad you liked this and would have given in a six if you had one. I'm out of them too. Most people are by this time of the week. I hope you have a nice weekend too.