Pain
Living with Lupus53 total reviews
Comment from Terry Broxson
Debi, here's the deal. You write this good poem. Short good for the contest, great message. Worth every bit of a five. But then, in your notes, you throw in some prose that starts to explain the short poem in a way everyone can understand, and the prose part makes it a six.
So now I am wondering. How effective would a prose story be if it coupled this short poem as an introduction and the notes expanded into a story that a lot of people would relate to? Good stuff. Terry.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Debi, here's the deal. You write this good poem. Short good for the contest, great message. Worth every bit of a five. But then, in your notes, you throw in some prose that starts to explain the short poem in a way everyone can understand, and the prose part makes it a six.
So now I am wondering. How effective would a prose story be if it coupled this short poem as an introduction and the notes expanded into a story that a lot of people would relate to? Good stuff. Terry.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Thanks so much, Terry. It was hard for me to write, to admit that that is my life. I hope God always allows me to look on the bright side, but as I saw the disease taking more and more, I needed to write this to get it out and as always, it did help some. Writing here and interacting with you and others is a godsend. Thank you for being part of that for me. You are such a special friend. But then you knew that. So as far as your question, I will answer back in a question. Do you dare me? Lol....
Thanks too for the gift of six stars! . Haha
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You bet, kiddo, go get?em.
Comment from Paul McFarland
That's a very good poem, describing your ordeal with lupus, Debi. I am glad that are opioid free. This will give you a clearer mind which will help in writing your poetry. Good luck in the contest. You should do well.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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That's a very good poem, describing your ordeal with lupus, Debi. I am glad that are opioid free. This will give you a clearer mind which will help in writing your poetry. Good luck in the contest. You should do well.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Hi Paul, I know this is a few days late, but cannot thank you enough for this lovely review and comments for my Pain Poem. I am so appreciative. Thanks so very much, my dear friend.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Debi, it's commendable that you've gone of the medicine and trying to treat it through other means. Thanks a lot for sharing this with us. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Hi Debi, it's commendable that you've gone of the medicine and trying to treat it through other means. Thanks a lot for sharing this with us. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Hi Ulla, I know this is a few days late, but cannot thank you enough for this lovely review and comments for my Pain Poem. I am so appreciative. Thanks so very much, my dear friend.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
My dear I am sorry for the pain you've endure, but your beautiful spirit is itself like the rainbow after the rain. I beauty of your expression in poetry here is outstanding.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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My dear I am sorry for the pain you've endure, but your beautiful spirit is itself like the rainbow after the rain. I beauty of your expression in poetry here is outstanding.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Verna, I cannot thank you enough for this lovely review and comments. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. And then for you to honor me also with your six stars, I am so appreciative for it all. Thanks so very much, my lovely and dear friend
Comment from Julie Lau
You poor thing!
I have known a lovely girl with the same ailment and it caused her to lose her job, her boyfriend, and her gorgeous figure, but she retained her beautiful nature and found a new living selling quality handbags online.
All the best in your efforts to deal with this horrible disease.
Love, Juliexx
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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You poor thing!
I have known a lovely girl with the same ailment and it caused her to lose her job, her boyfriend, and her gorgeous figure, but she retained her beautiful nature and found a new living selling quality handbags online.
All the best in your efforts to deal with this horrible disease.
Love, Juliexx
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Julie, you are so very sweet. I believe your friend needed something satisfying like online work helped her just as it does me to write with you and so many others. I cannot thank you enough for this lovely review and comments. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. And then for you to honor me also with your six stars, I am so appreciative for it all. Thanks so very much, my dear friend
Comment from Sally Law
A beautiful poem of your positive outlook, my friend. I admire so many things about you and the way you keep a sunny outlook and heart of praise. Marvelous offering in this unique form.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Love,
BBB XOs
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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A beautiful poem of your positive outlook, my friend. I admire so many things about you and the way you keep a sunny outlook and heart of praise. Marvelous offering in this unique form.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Love,
BBB XOs
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Oh Sally, you are always so very sweet!! I cannot thank you enough for this lovely review and comments. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. And then for you to honor me also with your six stars, I am so appreciative for it all. Thanks so very much, my very dear friend
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You are most welcome, my sweet and dear friend. I admire you for sharing this and how you overcome with positivity and in faith. Love & Blessings, Sal XOs
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
True. Without rain there would be no rainbows. Prisms, perhaps. But not rainbows. And pain can be a positive thing. It keeps us safe. Imagine what would happen if you put your hand on a hot stove without noticing and the pain didn't tell you to remove it. Yuck!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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True. Without rain there would be no rainbows. Prisms, perhaps. But not rainbows. And pain can be a positive thing. It keeps us safe. Imagine what would happen if you put your hand on a hot stove without noticing and the pain didn't tell you to remove it. Yuck!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Hi there Imaginos, I know this is a few days late, but cannot thank you enough for this lovely review and comments for my Pain poem. I am so appreciative. Thanks so very much, my dear friend.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Debi.
-Thanks for sharing the notes, and I
am glad to hear you have found natural
ways to deal with this, and finding FS has helped.
-I agree that it is a great outlet for sharing.
-You wrote a very good poem about it
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-An excellent closing line with
"rainbows instead of the rain."
-Good luck in the contest, and here's to more rainbows!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Debi.
-Thanks for sharing the notes, and I
am glad to hear you have found natural
ways to deal with this, and finding FS has helped.
-I agree that it is a great outlet for sharing.
-You wrote a very good poem about it
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-An excellent closing line with
"rainbows instead of the rain."
-Good luck in the contest, and here's to more rainbows!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Thanks so much Pam. I had never written a poem with these requirements before, and couldn't think of what to do. Then I felt a little nudge from God, as yesterday I admitted about the eyes, and so many other things have gone wrong lately or flaring. Tomorrow having blood transfusions. I have come to expect what lupus does for a body, but when I started to feel an urge to complain and feel sorry for myself. I decided that I am writing it and show that I am bigger than my pain and the lupus, severe anemia, kidney disease, etc..and I thought no, I am not having a pity party. I have fought worse demons than these before. So I wrote it cause I knew somehow when people like you respond with such compassion, it diminishes some of that pain and suffering. And also I found that I am not alone and that right there hel You are so special and I thank you.
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You are very welcome, Debi. Maybe you should try a few more of the short forms. You can also do a suite of 5-7-5 poems and get a point across very well. One of the special things about this site is letting us know we are not alone. I am sorry you are going through so much, but you are in my thoughts and prayers.
Comment from GWHARGIS
There is a patient that comes into our pharmacy where I work. She has lupus. Her description is ninja pain. You never see it coming until it strikes. I thought that was a fabulous description. I'm sorry it is something you have to deal with. But you are right about using writing as therapy. It's a coping mechanism that doesn't involve drugs or alcohol. Here's to pain free days. Gretchen
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There is a patient that comes into our pharmacy where I work. She has lupus. Her description is ninja pain. You never see it coming until it strikes. I thought that was a fabulous description. I'm sorry it is something you have to deal with. But you are right about using writing as therapy. It's a coping mechanism that doesn't involve drugs or alcohol. Here's to pain free days. Gretchen
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
Comment from Lisasview
Good for you dearest Debi, to have given up on those hard drugs.
My husband and I are big believers in a healthy life style.
Eating the right organic foods. Organic as much as possible.
We have not eaten meat of chicken in 40 years, because of the horrible hormones...but, we do eat some fish.
Taking certain natural products like Curcumin and CoQ10 are just two of the products we take daily.
Curcumin really helps with pain. Especially with black pepper.
I also take MSM, Glucosamine and Chondroitin, in one pill...twice a day.
Been doing all this and more for years...
Of course ones outlook is ultra important.
Lisa
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Good for you dearest Debi, to have given up on those hard drugs.
My husband and I are big believers in a healthy life style.
Eating the right organic foods. Organic as much as possible.
We have not eaten meat of chicken in 40 years, because of the horrible hormones...but, we do eat some fish.
Taking certain natural products like Curcumin and CoQ10 are just two of the products we take daily.
Curcumin really helps with pain. Especially with black pepper.
I also take MSM, Glucosamine and Chondroitin, in one pill...twice a day.
Been doing all this and more for years...
Of course ones outlook is ultra important.
Lisa
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Lisa, you are so incredibly sweet. And I can't thank you enough for your suggestions. Some I have tried, some I do already but others I have never heard of and am always willing to do anything for the pain.
Unfortunately I need the meat and protein for my severe chronic anemia. In fact I had two blood transfusions again yesterday. But then there are times I have to watch my protein intake for my stage four kidney disease. So it is quite the deal trying to stay ahead of the game.
I cannot thank you enough for this lovely review and comments. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. And then for you to honor me also with your six stars, I am so appreciative for it all. Thanks so very much, my dear friend
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Yes, staying ahead of the game is such a challenge..
You are so welcome... I am always here to help if you need me...
Oh, and by the way, what a mess it was yesterday...But that got cleared up. Thank goodness...
AND, I suggested to TOM, that there be a deadline on poems... For example on the Alteration poem, instead of saying 17 hours (because how would one know when that started?) he could give a Deadline like DEADLINE, the date and time..EST....
He might get more writers entering the contest... I wanted to but by the time I say it it was too late...
I have a feeling he would listen to you rather than me with that suggestion...
Lisa
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Hi Babe, regarding this message, I had the same feelings in the beginning. But as you are on here longer and longer, you get used to the ways. The ones like this that tell it in hours. Those are always due by 6AM. So that is the deadline of all of the fast ones like this. Where ever it is announced that day, just keep in mind to have it in by then. Also the longer ones will go by the day and none of them tell a time. I think that is because of so many time zones. After all we have people who are already in tomorrow, LOL. Does that help you out at all?
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YES, thank you so much... now I know that when they say 17 hours or.... that it ends at 6am the next morning... EST...
Thank you so much,
Lisa
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You are so welcome Sweetie. Lol, I made such a pest of myself the first six months bugging Tom, it's funny he doesn't run the other way when he gets a PM from me now. So I am here for you if I have an answer. Since then I relied so much on Jan. She taught me so much about this place and how to do things in the editing and posting area. She was such a great friend. And I just miss her so much for many reasons.
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Always, good to know someone that is available to help ... if need be...
So I am very grateful to you!
Going to sleepy bye byes now..
I was on the computer all day...writing and I plan to do the same tomorrow...
Hugs, Lisa
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Sweet Dreams
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I know you are sleeping so don't expect a response too soon, but I just remembered something about the contests that I should tell you. Whenever it is one of those that are due by 6:00 AM, that booth will close almost exactly 24 hours after it opens. All the other ones that are farther off are the ones that stay open for 2-3 days. Just in case you were ever wondering why they are so different.