Revival
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Comment from Ginda Simpson
Your free verse creates a realustic scene that is filled with nostalgia and longing. And then, with one musical note, hope fills the air. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Your free verse creates a realustic scene that is filled with nostalgia and longing. And then, with one musical note, hope fills the air. Nicely done.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Ginda!
Xoxo
Comment from Jim Wile
This was really good, Jess. You know my main focus is rhyme and meter, but I do enjoy a well written free verse poem. This one had a nice pattern and rhythm to it.
I loved the way the old piano sat there anticipating someone coming along to release its beauty again. Is that someone you, by any chance? What a marvelous use of the dust theme.
Very well done! - Jim
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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This was really good, Jess. You know my main focus is rhyme and meter, but I do enjoy a well written free verse poem. This one had a nice pattern and rhythm to it.
I loved the way the old piano sat there anticipating someone coming along to release its beauty again. Is that someone you, by any chance? What a marvelous use of the dust theme.
Very well done! - Jim
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you, MM, a six on a free verse from you is an absolute honor! I?m thrilled you enjoyed the rhythm and pattern.
Xo
Jess
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When it's good, it's good, Jess--rhyme or no rhyme.
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Revival, creates a scene of rediscovery of the silent furniture which has waited for the touch of a new diviner to dig through the layered negligence and find the spring of joy. Nice.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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This free verse, Revival, creates a scene of rediscovery of the silent furniture which has waited for the touch of a new diviner to dig through the layered negligence and find the spring of joy. Nice.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Bill
Comment from Eric Langford1
Bring again to life with just one touch. I would think anyone would understand this appealing attempt to resurrect any musical instrument. Did a good job here Jessica. Something within everyone's capabilities. Good write.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Bring again to life with just one touch. I would think anyone would understand this appealing attempt to resurrect any musical instrument. Did a good job here Jessica. Something within everyone's capabilities. Good write.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Eric!
Jessica
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My pleasure.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Superb, Jessica and deserving of a six of which sadly I have none (why are these so scarcely supplied?). I can almost smell that dust sitting there. And the whole verse sings evocatively and meaningfully as the pianist strikes those chords and stirs up music and memories. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Superb, Jessica and deserving of a six of which sadly I have none (why are these so scarcely supplied?). I can almost smell that dust sitting there. And the whole verse sings evocatively and meaningfully as the pianist strikes those chords and stirs up music and memories. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you, my friend! Your encouraging words mean so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from JSD
My sort of poem. Excellent free verse. Can't you put this in for the competition? Love the imagery and the careful choice of language, and the way it tells a story. Have a look at my 'Fire' on the front page of FanStory to see if you like my attempt at free verse.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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My sort of poem. Excellent free verse. Can't you put this in for the competition? Love the imagery and the careful choice of language, and the way it tells a story. Have a look at my 'Fire' on the front page of FanStory to see if you like my attempt at free verse.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, I truly appreciate your feedback! I look forward to reading your free verse!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is beautiful, an excellent poem on a Friday that would be an exceptional poem on a Sunday. My favorite line was difficult to choose. I chose, "a note emerges
resonating
a declaration of resilience."
This was familiar to me as my husband is attempting to reconnect with piano playing himself and, I am. trying to renew my fine art talents.
It's put aside but feels so great when you realize it is part of whom you are so you are whole again. Best wishes!
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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This is beautiful, an excellent poem on a Friday that would be an exceptional poem on a Sunday. My favorite line was difficult to choose. I chose, "a note emerges
resonating
a declaration of resilience."
This was familiar to me as my husband is attempting to reconnect with piano playing himself and, I am. trying to renew my fine art talents.
It's put aside but feels so great when you realize it is part of whom you are so you are whole again. Best wishes!
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Alex, thank you so much! I love that you and your husband are reconnecting with talents.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Delightful.Sentimental. Longing. Nostalgia.
Need. Want. Rebirth.Heart Warming. Illuminating.Joyful. Wondering. You pluckked these feeling and more from me.I hope you write more.
Karen
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Delightful.Sentimental. Longing. Nostalgia.
Need. Want. Rebirth.Heart Warming. Illuminating.Joyful. Wondering. You pluckked these feeling and more from me.I hope you write more.
Karen
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Karen, thank you so much! I appreciate your kind words and encouragement.
Xo
Jessica
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you are welcome . write more. Karen