Sleep, Little One
a children's poem40 total reviews
Comment from Carol Clark2
Lovely poem for the contest. A child would like to hear this poem before going to bed or down for a nap. Good descriptions with the lilac tinted skies and Sandman sprinkling fairy dust. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Lovely poem for the contest. A child would like to hear this poem before going to bed or down for a nap. Good descriptions with the lilac tinted skies and Sandman sprinkling fairy dust. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Hi Carol. Good morning :). Thank you for your lovely words. I hope to read them to my granddaughter one day :)
Melissa
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Your granddaughter will love them!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a gentle lullaby and you obviously have your own Grandchild in mind here as you are inspired by rocking the baby to sleep Melissa, a wonderful word choice, excellent rhymes and flow, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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This is a gentle lullaby and you obviously have your own Grandchild in mind here as you are inspired by rocking the baby to sleep Melissa, a wonderful word choice, excellent rhymes and flow, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly. I was very much thinking of my baby girl :). Perhaps, I will read it to her some day.
Melissa
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Awwww, This is lovely Melissa. I love it! Your meter and rhyme are well done and the picture is just beautiful. It deserves a six but I have not one to offer. I'm sorry . Best wishes in the contest. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Awwww, This is lovely Melissa. I love it! Your meter and rhyme are well done and the picture is just beautiful. It deserves a six but I have not one to offer. I'm sorry . Best wishes in the contest. Nancy:)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, Nancy. I am delighted that you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from Mrs. KT
Wishing I had six stars to give you exquisite poem, Melissa!
What a soothing and peaceful offering complete with excellent rhyming and a beautiful message filled with keen visual and emotive imagery.
Nothing more precious than to experience a baby fall asleep in one's arms.
We surely are blessed, Melissa.
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Wishing I had six stars to give you exquisite poem, Melissa!
What a soothing and peaceful offering complete with excellent rhyming and a beautiful message filled with keen visual and emotive imagery.
Nothing more precious than to experience a baby fall asleep in one's arms.
We surely are blessed, Melissa.
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you Diane... your sentiments are mine ~ exactly. So appreciate you, my friend... we see things much the same.
Mleissa
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We surely do, Melissa!
But darn it! Your poem and the one about Rosie deserve six stars, and I am, sadly, out of them!
Wouldn't it be fun if we could "purchase" extra "six stars?" Bucket List!
:)
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That is so true. I do feel constrained on this site, but I love it too. Mention it to Tom...
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love the whole poem, Melissa, but the first two lines of the last stanza deserve a six star rating all by themselves. This poem reminds me of one of my favorite childhood poems where Wynken, Blynken, and Nod sail off in a wooden shoe. It's sets the mood for sleep for both the child and the adult reader.
As always. So well crafted.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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I love the whole poem, Melissa, but the first two lines of the last stanza deserve a six star rating all by themselves. This poem reminds me of one of my favorite childhood poems where Wynken, Blynken, and Nod sail off in a wooden shoe. It's sets the mood for sleep for both the child and the adult reader.
As always. So well crafted.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Aaah, Debbie, you are so sweet to bless me with such words. I love writing for children and I had just finished a FaceTime with my son and little Rosalie, so all of it was fresh and I thought of her. I was fond of that nursery rhyme too :). Thanks sweet friend.
Melissa
Comment from jmdg1954
I saw/read nothing wrong. Your rhyme was perfect, your cadence was spot on, The flow of words was manageable,
The contest is yours, Rock-on!
Very enjoyable read. Reminded me when my wife and I put ours to bed nightly.
Cheers to the young ones.
John
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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I saw/read nothing wrong. Your rhyme was perfect, your cadence was spot on, The flow of words was manageable,
The contest is yours, Rock-on!
Very enjoyable read. Reminded me when my wife and I put ours to bed nightly.
Cheers to the young ones.
John
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Hello John! Thank you for your lovely words. My son and new granddaughter (she's 1 yr. old) FaceTimed me this morning, so my thoughts were on her as I wrote :). So appreciate your review!!
Melissa
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Good thing for FaceTime. Keeps everyone close!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is sweet and I loved the picture with a cuddly child nestled in a mother's lap. One suggestion would be to add on the last line of the fourth stanza a too instead of to.
I love this and I hope you win the contest for the children's poetry.
Jesse
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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This is sweet and I loved the picture with a cuddly child nestled in a mother's lap. One suggestion would be to add on the last line of the fourth stanza a too instead of to.
I love this and I hope you win the contest for the children's poetry.
Jesse
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much Jesse for the thoughts and suggestion. I will rush to edit :)
Melissa
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Glad I could help.
Jesse
Comment from June Sargent
You sound like a very contented and loving grandma! This is a beautiful poem for the contest. As you rock to and fro, you sail through lilac tinted skies. And - you have the perfect artwork to highlight this. Just lovely...
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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You sound like a very contented and loving grandma! This is a beautiful poem for the contest. As you rock to and fro, you sail through lilac tinted skies. And - you have the perfect artwork to highlight this. Just lovely...
Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you so much, June!! I do love being Rosalie's Nana :)
Melissa
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Ain't that the truth. Good times not gone but stored forever away where we can recollect as needed these very precious days. ................................................
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Ain't that the truth. Good times not gone but stored forever away where we can recollect as needed these very precious days. ................................................
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Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much, Tom!
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
Virtual six, my friend. How sweet is this, and tender as a lullaby. I see you are inspired by Rosie. A delightful poem and contest entry. A winner here!
Sending you my best today as always and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Virtual six, my friend. How sweet is this, and tender as a lullaby. I see you are inspired by Rosie. A delightful poem and contest entry. A winner here!
Sending you my best today as always and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
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Comment Written 07-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2023
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Thank you Sally. I do love our little Rosalie and was thinking about her as I was writing this. They did FaceTime with me this morning, so I am freshly inspired. LOL. Thanks again.
Melissa
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I can tell. How wonderful! Blessings,
Sal XOs