Comment from
zanya
The story certainly has a ring of authenticity to it as it builds towards that 'alone' moment - it can be so scary to feel isolated, despite trojan efforts to engage -excellent-wish I had 6!
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
Thank you Zanya, I really appreciate the review and comments. I'm pleased you consider it worthy of a six.
Beth
Comment from
Katherine M. (k-11)
This brought tears to my eyes. It obviously did happen, you said it did. But I could see it playing out in front of me. your pace was perfectly executed, and the understatement added to the realism. There were just a few unfortunate typos, but I'm sure someone will point those out? Well done kay
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2023
Thank you Kay, I'm appreciate you reviewing this. I glad you felt the pace seemed realistic. I'll check it again for typos.
Beth