Breaking Up with You
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You have used your 15 words well.
-You describe the nature of this relationship
very well as lack of communication seems to be a big issue.
-A good reason not to pursue it, as indicated in your last line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You have used your 15 words well.
-You describe the nature of this relationship
very well as lack of communication seems to be a big issue.
-A good reason not to pursue it, as indicated in your last line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
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You are welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
This gets to the point very directly, no words minced in this mixed meter poem. I like how the last line gives some ambiguity of whether it's the relationship or the signals which being broken. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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This gets to the point very directly, no words minced in this mixed meter poem. I like how the last line gives some ambiguity of whether it's the relationship or the signals which being broken. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from Chelsey Johanson
If anyone has ever broken up with someone, they felt that same feeling while reading this. Love the simplicity of it and the picture takes it a long way as well. Would of been cool to throw a more dramatic word in the mix.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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If anyone has ever broken up with someone, they felt that same feeling while reading this. Love the simplicity of it and the picture takes it a long way as well. Would of been cool to throw a more dramatic word in the mix.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from lancellot
Our relationship isn't working.
You send me the wrong signals.
I am breaking it off!
I the read this several times. And while there are 15 words, this reads like three simple sentences. More a declaration than poetry. I would add some flow, cadence or rhyme, or metaphors.
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Our relationship isn't working.
You send me the wrong signals.
I am breaking it off!
I the read this several times. And while there are 15 words, this reads like three simple sentences. More a declaration than poetry. I would add some flow, cadence or rhyme, or metaphors.
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written short poem and you stayed within the word limit. You used very good descriptive words and very neat imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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This is a very well written short poem and you stayed within the word limit. You used very good descriptive words and very neat imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you for your kind review!
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a situation that should be occurring much more often - then, perhaps, the 50% divorce rate would decrease. Write is fully compliant with the prompt - best wishes in the contest...
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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In my opinion, a situation that should be occurring much more often - then, perhaps, the 50% divorce rate would decrease. Write is fully compliant with the prompt - best wishes in the contest...
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much!
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Duplicate response...
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a situation that should be occurring much more often - then, perhaps, the 50% divorce rate would decrease. Write is fully compliant with the prompt - best wishes in the contest...
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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In my opinion, a situation that should be occurring much more often - then, perhaps, the 50% divorce rate would decrease. Write is fully compliant with the prompt - best wishes in the contest...
Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you very much!
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You are very welcome indeed...Eve
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You are very welcome indeed...Eve
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You are very welcome indeed...Eve
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good short poem entry. The text can be read but could be a bit larger. Your message is clear. I like that your presentation is colorful. The visual fits well. There are numerous photos of Shaq smiling on the internet. That is his typical pose. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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This is a good short poem entry. The text can be read but could be a bit larger. Your message is clear. I like that your presentation is colorful. The visual fits well. There are numerous photos of Shaq smiling on the internet. That is his typical pose. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2022
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Thank you so much!
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You are welcome.
