Time has but one goal
A swap quatrain sonnet40 total reviews
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written poem it has a nice flow and rhyme scheme. Beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Nicely put together. Nice overall presentation.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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This is a beautifully written poem it has a nice flow and rhyme scheme. Beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Nicely put together. Nice overall presentation.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Thanks Joanne, for these amazing comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from GWHARGIS
My oldest son and I were just talking about the passage of time yesterday. He was saying that no matter the age you pass at, you've lived a full life. Your full life. I think differently. I feel it's the good deeds you've done that constitute a full life. This is an age old question. Are we anointed by God to do specific things or are we just one of billions of life forms taking up space. I know which one I prefer. This was a very thought provoking and beautifully written poem.
Gretchen
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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My oldest son and I were just talking about the passage of time yesterday. He was saying that no matter the age you pass at, you've lived a full life. Your full life. I think differently. I feel it's the good deeds you've done that constitute a full life. This is an age old question. Are we anointed by God to do specific things or are we just one of billions of life forms taking up space. I know which one I prefer. This was a very thought provoking and beautifully written poem.
Gretchen
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Thanks Gretchen, for these splendid comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from BethShelby
This is a well crafted poem. I've never thought of time goal as death but it is true that is the way our time on earth ends. To think of it as a testing place leading to a higher plane makes more sense. That doesn't mean we shouldn't enjoy all the wonders of life while we are here as long as they are in keeping with God's plan.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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This is a well crafted poem. I've never thought of time goal as death but it is true that is the way our time on earth ends. To think of it as a testing place leading to a higher plane makes more sense. That doesn't mean we shouldn't enjoy all the wonders of life while we are here as long as they are in keeping with God's plan.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2022
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Thanks Beth, for these splendid comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a glorious swap quatrain sonnet. As you knew I would, I love the form, particularly the fully rhyming third stanza. But I also love the subject, as I spend my whole life tussling with time, which I never have enough of, even though I try to use it wisely and not waste it. So what has pushed your poem up to six stars for me is the final couplet, which has made it's way to my thought board this morning:
Time is a test, it's not a jest,
it's not a jest, time is a test.
Thank you. And I'm really sorry you don't like contests. I would have loved to see this in the sonnet one. Kate xx
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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This is a glorious swap quatrain sonnet. As you knew I would, I love the form, particularly the fully rhyming third stanza. But I also love the subject, as I spend my whole life tussling with time, which I never have enough of, even though I try to use it wisely and not waste it. So what has pushed your poem up to six stars for me is the final couplet, which has made it's way to my thought board this morning:
Time is a test, it's not a jest,
it's not a jest, time is a test.
Thank you. And I'm really sorry you don't like contests. I would have loved to see this in the sonnet one. Kate xx
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Kate, for these wonderful comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Time is the only constant in man's pitiful existence. We can and must always depend upon time to be there and to travel forward regardless of what we do or what we want.
Nicely worded.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Time is the only constant in man's pitiful existence. We can and must always depend upon time to be there and to travel forward regardless of what we do or what we want.
Nicely worded.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thanks Gary, for these terrific comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from lyenochka
A beautiful swap quatrain sonnet with a spiritual understanding of Time! Yes, although we are marching to death through time, we can keep holding on to His Hand to guide us Home.
One comment:
This shell is leant, time takes its toll, (lent?) past passive of lend?
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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A beautiful swap quatrain sonnet with a spiritual understanding of Time! Yes, although we are marching to death through time, we can keep holding on to His Hand to guide us Home.
One comment:
This shell is leant, time takes its toll, (lent?) past passive of lend?
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Helen for these wonderful comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Spitfire
I like what you do with the swap quatrain. The secret and one you have mastered is to make the twisted repeat last line double the impact of the first three lines. AT least that's my guess. Thought provoking lines:
What have I sold, what have I bought?
Is life a plan, is life a joke
Time is a test.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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I like what you do with the swap quatrain. The secret and one you have mastered is to make the twisted repeat last line double the impact of the first three lines. AT least that's my guess. Thought provoking lines:
What have I sold, what have I bought?
Is life a plan, is life a joke
Time is a test.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much for these wonderful comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this poetry form, as it is unique in formatting.
The topic is relatable but quite somber.
You explore the provocative sentiment of " time has one goal., it leads to death."
This begs one to explore their existence and what they are doing with their time here in earth.
Interesting write.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed this poetry form, as it is unique in formatting.
The topic is relatable but quite somber.
You explore the provocative sentiment of " time has one goal., it leads to death."
This begs one to explore their existence and what they are doing with their time here in earth.
Interesting write.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much for these wonderful comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from harmony13
I enjoyed the read of this poem. The author's words are thought provoking. I found time is a test as the author states. I pondered on the these words! Thank you for the author's notes - they are clear and comforting. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed the read of this poem. The author's words are thought provoking. I found time is a test as the author states. I pondered on the these words! Thank you for the author's notes - they are clear and comforting. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is awesome!
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Maria, for these wonderful comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Raul1
I think that time is a test, and it can be your enemy sometimes. It is well written. I like the message you brought up of time. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!
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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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I think that time is a test, and it can be your enemy sometimes. It is well written. I like the message you brought up of time. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing!
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2022
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Thanks so much Raul, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
