Sweet Dance
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Comment from evilynne
Six lovely words, romantic overtones. There is much to be imagined. The picture adds to the mood expressed in your poem. best of luck in the contest. Evi
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Six lovely words, romantic overtones. There is much to be imagined. The picture adds to the mood expressed in your poem. best of luck in the contest. Evi
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent entry for the six word poem contest.
The flickering image of by the candle flame can be memorizing
as it dances on the walls and ceiling.
It stirs the imagination.
Nicely done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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This is an excellent entry for the six word poem contest.
The flickering image of by the candle flame can be memorizing
as it dances on the walls and ceiling.
It stirs the imagination.
Nicely done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Fleedleflump
I think light and shadow are the fundamental aspects of imagery. Great personification of the shadows with the dance - there are artists and responders, and you represent both here. Beautifully done!
Mike
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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I think light and shadow are the fundamental aspects of imagery. Great personification of the shadows with the dance - there are artists and responders, and you represent both here. Beautifully done!
Mike
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from JLR
Dear Poet Six-word poems are quite dicey to deliver with a punch. While your work is literal, to me, that punch is missing with the use of "The" as 33% of the poem. You are gramatically correct in that "The" is used correctly as defined as: an article, which is a word used to define a noun.
But the punch is missing
something as: Candle delicately flickering
have shadows dancing
just my honest input sent with respect
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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Dear Poet Six-word poems are quite dicey to deliver with a punch. While your work is literal, to me, that punch is missing with the use of "The" as 33% of the poem. You are gramatically correct in that "The" is used correctly as defined as: an article, which is a word used to define a noun.
But the punch is missing
something as: Candle delicately flickering
have shadows dancing
just my honest input sent with respect
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thanks!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good six-word poetry entry. It has a clear, concrete message. The visual fits well. However, the text needs to be presented with color, bold lettering or some decorative manner to make the presentation better. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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This is a good six-word poetry entry. It has a clear, concrete message. The visual fits well. However, the text needs to be presented with color, bold lettering or some decorative manner to make the presentation better. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
As the shadow of the flame dances, the smoke clears the air. Without air freshener, it is a great replacement. Without electricity, you have light. That candle has many uses. For general purposes or romantic dinners. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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As the shadow of the flame dances, the smoke clears the air. Without air freshener, it is a great replacement. Without electricity, you have light. That candle has many uses. For general purposes or romantic dinners. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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WOW!! THANK YOU!!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
Hm I like this six-world poem. Short to the point, packs a punch, these short poem forms are hard to write. but you nailed it. I am submitting my own later today.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Hm I like this six-world poem. Short to the point, packs a punch, these short poem forms are hard to write. but you nailed it. I am submitting my own later today.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written six word poem. It's very difficult to write a poem with so few words. But you did and did it well. Beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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This is a beautifully written six word poem. It's very difficult to write a poem with so few words. But you did and did it well. Beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, you really put volumes in these 6 words. A very nice poem with good imagery and visuals, and I love your artistic presentation and picture.
Good luck in the contest, and I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Oh, you really put volumes in these 6 words. A very nice poem with good imagery and visuals, and I love your artistic presentation and picture.
Good luck in the contest, and I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from June Sargent
In just six words you have provided a blank canvas for our imagination! Who is dancing? Are they madly in love? Is it their first dance - or perhaps, their last? Very creative and original. Should do well in the contest,
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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In just six words you have provided a blank canvas for our imagination! Who is dancing? Are they madly in love? Is it their first dance - or perhaps, their last? Very creative and original. Should do well in the contest,
Comment Written 31-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2022
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Thank you!
