The Backyard
An Ubi Sunt Contest Entry33 total reviews
Comment from royowen
There is something mystic between nature, God and the human being that becomes the conduit for this wonderful transaction that passes between them. This is beautifully written my friend, I love your fre verse, although it's good to use a smattering of rhyme, metaphor and alliteration. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : (slight) of hand, sleight?
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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There is something mystic between nature, God and the human being that becomes the conduit for this wonderful transaction that passes between them. This is beautifully written my friend, I love your fre verse, although it's good to use a smattering of rhyme, metaphor and alliteration. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : (slight) of hand, sleight?
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thanks Roy. And thanks for catching the typo. I just made the correction!
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M pleasure
Comment from Fleedleflump
I adore how you personify the plants around the garden and use these small flashes of imagery to tell a tale of life and loss, glory and (yes) entropy. There's something wise and timeless about this, and I love it.
Mike
One tiny spag (unless it's intentional, being poetry):
'some quantum slight-of-hand' - I believe 'slight' should be 'sleight'
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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I adore how you personify the plants around the garden and use these small flashes of imagery to tell a tale of life and loss, glory and (yes) entropy. There's something wise and timeless about this, and I love it.
Mike
One tiny spag (unless it's intentional, being poetry):
'some quantum slight-of-hand' - I believe 'slight' should be 'sleight'
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Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Mike,
Thank you?I just corrected the misspelling! Thank you for the feedback and catching the typo! Glad you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
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Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and for your kind review.
