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Erotic Turmoil

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Comment from Annette R.
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I didn't see any errors but may have been too caught up in the love making you wrote so well that I may have missed something. :-) Looking forward to the apply cart being upset.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
    Thank you so much for reading this part, Annette, that was so good of you. That you thought I wrote it so well has really put a smile on my face, thank you, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from lancellot
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A well crafted chapter. I do wonder if Margot was a bit too unknowing about things. Yes, it may be her first time, but she comes from a time of TV, movies, novel, magazines, internet and soap operas, right?

Good writing. You may not need two warnings.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
    Thank you so much for another wonderful review, Lance. Your thoughts have given me pause for thought. I think most women use their imaginations when they are virgins, even with reading all the books and watching them on the television. But in most cases, it's nothing like the real thing. You can read, but until you experience the act, only then do you know. Many women are disappointed when they do have their first experience, especially after reading those books!! And many never have a climax. ( I can't believe I'm saying all this to you, lol) Thank you so much for the lovely review and the golden sixth star!! Warm hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Ulla
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Aw, that was beautifully written, Sandra. How on earth will poor Margot be be able to be deal with this? I can see a lot of complications creeping up. I so enjoy this story, and I can't wait for the next chapter. A big hug, Ulla xxx

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
    Thank you so much, Ulla, for this lovely review and the golden star! I was really nervous posting this part, but it seems to be going well. I hope the rain hasn't returned and all is well with you, my friend? Warm hugs, Sandra xxxx
reply by Ulla on 25-Apr-2022
    Hi Sandra, at the moment we have beautiful weather, but don't hold your breath. The rain returns on Wednesday and last to Friday. It's coming from Sahara so everything will turn red. We can't win 🥰🥰
Comment from BethShelby
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You did an wonderful job with the sexual part of this story. I wonder if the real Meg would be as passionate as Margot or if she would be inhibited by the mores of the times. I'm glad Bessie has found what she needs to upset the apple cart as she puts it. Silly question, but since Margot is using Meg's body does this mean when she goes back into her own body, she will still be a virgin. LOL Not in her mind, I'm sure.

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 Comment Written 24-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
    In one of Miles' thoughts, he told us that Meg was a very passionate woman and wondered why she hadn't already been pregnant. I have changed the amount of children Meg has, from three to one, mainly because of her age. She will be 29 soon, and back in those days many women of her age and upwards died in childbirith. Well Margot still be a virgin? I'd not thought about that, lol. But even if she was't, not many men expect their future wives to still be untouched before they get married. Some never do! Thank you so much for the lovely review, Beth, I really appreciated your thoughts, warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Oh yes, a great job of writing. I am wondering what this experience Margot just had is going to do to her. Will it make it harder for her to be Meg? I can't wait to find out. You're doing a good job writing this.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
    I'm zo pleased you enjoyed this part, I was really nervous about posting it. But I thought the plot wouldn't be plausable if it hadn't happened. Thank you for the golden star, Barbara, you really have made my day. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from John Ciarmello
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Oh, my, goodness gracious, me! That sex scene ran like an X-rated movie, lol. Not that I've ever watched any of those, only Meg's and Miles to date. :)
Anyway, sensational, as usual, my friend. Bessie seems to be on a (roll) of her own. Take care, Sandra.

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 Comment Written 24-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
    LOL! I did have a warning on it! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part, John, and that I've not put you off reading. It had to come to this, or the plot wouldn't have worked. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from blondie560
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Phew! Someone give me a fan! Sandra this is a new side of you! It was written so well without a lot of detail, but just enough to paint the mental picture and know what is exactly happening. I did chuckle when I read the description of the dress. Who could even spend an hour, let alone a whole day wearing a cage. I guess bring s couch potato wasn't something ladies had the luxury of then. I often thought that fashions of that time with the bustled and hoops were a good way to hide things you didn't want anyone to see. You could tie up a forbidden book you wanted to read and slip out to the garden and no one would know. Now I can't wait to find out Bessie's new information. Have a great week! Hugs:) Sally

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
    Hi Sally, I hope you had a great Easter. Thank you so much for this lovely review, and the golden star! I was a bit nervous posting this part, but it had to happen. Lol. I'm glad you thought it was well written, it's hard to judge sometimes.

    Googled for descriptions of the dresses, did you know over 3000 women burned to death when they wore those hooped dresses, they would catch them alight on the fire in the grate, and from candles. They couldn't get out of the dresses fast enough. What a way to die, the fashion wasn't so nice. Thanks again, my dear friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx