At Home in Mississippi
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The Doll"Growing up in the 40 and 50 in MIssissippi
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Comment from lyenochka
I love your story - it's like a psychological drama and you tell it with your grown-up voice, helping us, the readers, to completely understand your motives. But it's startling how you set your plan in motion. I wondered if you got a chance to hold the doll before covering it. I thought you might have brought it into the car. Lol. Best wishes in the contest!
still clutchedtightly in her arms. (clutched tightly)
I keep Linda involved in an exciting (kept)
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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I love your story - it's like a psychological drama and you tell it with your grown-up voice, helping us, the readers, to completely understand your motives. But it's startling how you set your plan in motion. I wondered if you got a chance to hold the doll before covering it. I thought you might have brought it into the car. Lol. Best wishes in the contest!
still clutchedtightly in her arms. (clutched tightly)
I keep Linda involved in an exciting (kept)
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank you Helen, I never held the doll. I don't think at that point I was as interested in the doll, as I was making sure she wasn't going home with that doll. She had made me angry and I wanted her to pay. I can't believe how vindictive I was at that age.
Beth
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But a vindictive genius! It took a lot of planning and forethought for a child that age!
Comment from royowen
I think girls can sometimes be that mean, boys are naughty too, but in a different way I seem to remember the feminists said that boys and girls were conditioned that way. But in my memory, mum or my dad didn't condition me to be sport mad, but I was, neither of them gambled, but I did, mmmh. My kids were completely different from one another. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : part of (the) time 2: Rubbed me (the) wrong way
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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I think girls can sometimes be that mean, boys are naughty too, but in a different way I seem to remember the feminists said that boys and girls were conditioned that way. But in my memory, mum or my dad didn't condition me to be sport mad, but I was, neither of them gambled, but I did, mmmh. My kids were completely different from one another. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : part of (the) time 2: Rubbed me (the) wrong way
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank your Roy. I think it might have been something I didn't have a lot of control over. I knew better but I just did it anyway. I was too good at getting away with things like that without people realizing I'd done anything. I had to fight the urge. I think it is a girl thing.
Boys are more physical with there bad behavior.
Beth
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As they say, ?boys will be boys? I love they way my granddaughter looks at boys at school, like they?re from another planet, but dads and granddads are different?not boys.
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She knows how to stay on right side of the people who really matter in her life. Tell her by the time they have gotten old enough to be parents, they have adjusted to life on his planet.
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She knows how to stay on right side of the people who really matter in her life. Tell her by the time they have gotten old enough to be parents, they have adjusted to life on his planet.
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She?ll see it differently at fourteen too, heh heh. I?m going to have to fight them off.
Comment from cat frenette
What a truly delightful story!
I loved your description of life with those who were "twice as tall and way older" and your day with your newly-discovered relatives.
Poor Linda! I feel bad for her, but enjoyed your story very much!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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What a truly delightful story!
I loved your description of life with those who were "twice as tall and way older" and your day with your newly-discovered relatives.
Poor Linda! I feel bad for her, but enjoyed your story very much!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm so glad you liked my story. I often wondered how Linda turned out. It took me years to learn how we were related but I finally learned. It was too late to get in touch. She had passed on.
Beth
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I like this story. It has a beginning, the middle and a very versed character development in the end. I saw a movie recently on Netflix which about an adult stole a doll from a kid because she had a lot of guilt from breaking a doll of her own daughter many years ago.
Well done and good luck. I don't have any six stars left :(.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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I like this story. It has a beginning, the middle and a very versed character development in the end. I saw a movie recently on Netflix which about an adult stole a doll from a kid because she had a lot of guilt from breaking a doll of her own daughter many years ago.
Well done and good luck. I don't have any six stars left :(.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank you for a great review. I enjoyed your comments. I'm glad you like the story.
Beth
Comment from Anne Johnston
Thank you for sharing this story of your childhood. I am sure you have thought of it many times and wished you could go back and do differently. I was expecting the story to be that you picked up the doll, maybe dropped it and broke somethings, so the fact that you just covered it and kept quiet was a surprise turn.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank you for sharing this story of your childhood. I am sure you have thought of it many times and wished you could go back and do differently. I was expecting the story to be that you picked up the doll, maybe dropped it and broke somethings, so the fact that you just covered it and kept quiet was a surprise turn.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank you Anne, I did wish many times I hadn't done that. I appreciate your reviewing my story.
Beth
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You are welcome, Beth. We all have things we wish we had handled differently.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think we are all guilty of that in one way or another, Beth, but it's good to remember it so we don't do it again. That cousin of yours would not have suffered had she agreed to let you hold the doll for a while, but she selfishly held on to it. She also learned a lesson, even though she doesn't know what you did. This is a story with a good lesson to it, well done, my friend. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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I think we are all guilty of that in one way or another, Beth, but it's good to remember it so we don't do it again. That cousin of yours would not have suffered had she agreed to let you hold the doll for a while, but she selfishly held on to it. She also learned a lesson, even though she doesn't know what you did. This is a story with a good lesson to it, well done, my friend. Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Sandra. I thought I was teaching her a lesson, but I doubt if she connected the fact she lost her job with her act of selfishness. Only recently I learned how we were related and thought about contacting her, but I learned she'd passed away. Beth
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I am positive that the lady I know is not devious. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
It would have been a really special day under different
circumstances. (It would've been, there's a few other places that read better with a contraction.)
I'd remember the doll and realize that I was very capable of a burning desire to get even when I felt wronged. & but I'm thankful to say that I've not felt that urge in years. (in both sentences you can remove 'that')
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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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I enjoyed reading your contest entry. I am positive that the lady I know is not devious. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
It would have been a really special day under different
circumstances. (It would've been, there's a few other places that read better with a contraction.)
I'd remember the doll and realize that I was very capable of a burning desire to get even when I felt wronged. & but I'm thankful to say that I've not felt that urge in years. (in both sentences you can remove 'that')
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much Barbara. I glad you enjoyed this and don't think of me as devious. I also thank you for the helpful suggestions. It is hard to learn when to let go of the "thats."