Comment from equestrik

Exceptional

I think this is an important message that needs to be put out into the world in as many ways possible. We need to hear this as we sometimes stumble along. Well done!

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020

equestrik, I am very honored to receive your validation of this sonnet.
thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this club challenge.

Comment from Cogitator

Excellent

There are many elements in this poem that create a vision of regret and/or failures. I question the need for forgiveness, because sin is an idea that has long festered in undeveloped minds. We are always in the scenarios we create for ourselves. We have to forgive ourselves only if we stop trying to understand. John

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020

This could well be so, however, free will can certainly garner untold calamity if nor contained.

reply by Cogitator on 03-Dec-2020

reply by Cogitator on 08-Dec-2020

If we believe absurdities
We fail to use our Common Sense
We then commit atrocities
It's time to drop all the pretense

If we dig deep within our soul
We will find love that unites all
The truth is not in some dead scroll
Faulty beliefs cause our downfall

We're Avatars of our Spirit
It works the same for all of us
The uninformed tend to fear it
Once acquiesced, life has begun

Our bodies are temporary
Our ego is the transgressor
The past goes to cemetery
Our brain is just word processor

We project scenes from Here and Now
Thought?s the Big Bang of our MindSpace
We can change them using know-how
To see heaven, Truth we must face

No experience is ever lost
That must be true to have memory
Spirit records without exhaust
We're only forms of energy

Our lives are like moving pictures
Each frame depicts a frozen thought
They are not meant to be fixtures
Many are just what we've been taught

If we take role of director
We can edit final version
Gather the truth as collector
To then begin our conversion

Cutting room floor for every lie
Discard the pains of ignorance
Behold Heaven with inner eye
That's what creates Deliverance

The question is who will attend
The world premiere of Honesty
It makes a path we can ascend
Ignoring it is travesty

Once we accept we're here to grow
Our projections become boundless
Our minds blossom by letting go
Reject the chains to make progress

Eventually we come to know
Our Holy Grail can run over
Truth sets us free to overflow
Excess will cause the changeover

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This poem does well with the strict form of the potlatch. I also reminds us the living with blame for mistakes makes your life harder than it has to be.
Forgiving yourself is a hard thing to do but is important for you to go on with life and live it the way it should be lived.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

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 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020

Thanks very much Joan, this was full of dynamic challenges.

reply by dragonpoet on 03-Dec-2020

You are most kindlhy welcome, JLR
Joan