Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from TommyWrites
This is a lovely rhyming poem that makes me want to curl up on a chair, with tea and a book and just enjoy the feeling of fall.
Your rhymes all fit beautifully, and I liked how the first two lines didn't rhyme because it almost acted like a story starter. Because your poem in a neat way tells a story of the process of fall.
I think this is truly excellent!
Good luck in the contest,
TommyWrites~
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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This is a lovely rhyming poem that makes me want to curl up on a chair, with tea and a book and just enjoy the feeling of fall.
Your rhymes all fit beautifully, and I liked how the first two lines didn't rhyme because it almost acted like a story starter. Because your poem in a neat way tells a story of the process of fall.
I think this is truly excellent!
Good luck in the contest,
TommyWrites~
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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TommyWrites, thanks for the good thoughts and encouragement.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Transitions, presented in seven rhyming couplets, makes note of the many changes that subtly appear as the season moves from the freedom (in any other year) of summer to the closer movements of autumn and winter. Nice.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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This poem, Transitions, presented in seven rhyming couplets, makes note of the many changes that subtly appear as the season moves from the freedom (in any other year) of summer to the closer movements of autumn and winter. Nice.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Bill, thank you a bunch!
Comment from royowen
That is a divine piece of artwork you've chosen Jim. The symbol of autumn to me has been the signification of the glorious death of Christ, which is really looking forward to the resurrection in spring, winter being the regeneration of life in spring. This is beautifully written my friend, in rhyming couplets, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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That is a divine piece of artwork you've chosen Jim. The symbol of autumn to me has been the signification of the glorious death of Christ, which is really looking forward to the resurrection in spring, winter being the regeneration of life in spring. This is beautifully written my friend, in rhyming couplets, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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I do so appreciate your positivity on my work..
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Well done
Comment from Cindy Decker
JLR,
This is a nice change is seasons poem. You portray fall well: colorful birds say chirp their goodbyes , grey skies.
Your photo is nice and the bold colors are characteristic of Autumn.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes(,
Cindy
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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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JLR,
This is a nice change is seasons poem. You portray fall well: colorful birds say chirp their goodbyes , grey skies.
Your photo is nice and the bold colors are characteristic of Autumn.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes(,
Cindy
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Hi Cindy, I am grateful for your thoughts and review
Comment from dmt1967
Everything gels apart from the first two lines, for me. They don't rhyme at all and this puts the beat off by a few metres. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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Everything gels apart from the first two lines, for me. They don't rhyme at all and this puts the beat off by a few metres. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing. Stay safe.
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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dmt, thanks, me as well, I changed it after your review.
