Football - A Novel
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with this overview of your newest novel, Barbara. You gave readers many details to entice them to read it as you post it. I believe it will 'fly' if it isn't a rehash of what is already out there. I'm not criticizing since I have not seen any of the novel. Please don't be offended. Your characters must be strong and the situations unique that your main one finds herself in.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
she received and (an) education degree
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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You did a good job with this overview of your newest novel, Barbara. You gave readers many details to entice them to read it as you post it. I believe it will 'fly' if it isn't a rehash of what is already out there. I'm not criticizing since I have not seen any of the novel. Please don't be offended. Your characters must be strong and the situations unique that your main one finds herself in.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
she received and (an) education degree
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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I will make that correction. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Tpa
It appears your at the start of another supreme novel. I have your work previously and was much entertained by your talent. How many words do you write per day? Do you outline your stories?
GOOD LUCK I will sure to read your chapters.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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It appears your at the start of another supreme novel. I have your work previously and was much entertained by your talent. How many words do you write per day? Do you outline your stories?
GOOD LUCK I will sure to read your chapters.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2020
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I outline my stories and write until I'm tired or stuck. Sometimes I need to let it rest. I can only write when I'm out of school. Teacher first grade takes all my time. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
When you suggested the title as being "The football novel, I immediately thought of "The football locker" which is what footballers store their street clothes and personal items, but it could be secrets. Well done, looking forward, blessings, Roy
Typo : A large (cooperation) corporation?
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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When you suggested the title as being "The football novel, I immediately thought of "The football locker" which is what footballers store their street clothes and personal items, but it could be secrets. Well done, looking forward, blessings, Roy
Typo : A large (cooperation) corporation?
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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I will make that correction. I always do silly things with my typing. Thank you for the support.
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You don?t often make mistakes, I love your writing
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Hm you are right the title is not very appealing, how about The cradle of life, the rise and fall Karherine Riley? Anyway seems like a good novel that I can't wait to read.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Hm you are right the title is not very appealing, how about The cradle of life, the rise and fall Karherine Riley? Anyway seems like a good novel that I can't wait to read.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the suggestion. I will ponder that one. I am horrible at coming up with titles. I like 'The Cradle of Life.' It has a nice ring to it.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image for this
introduction, Barbara.
-You did a good job giving the
basics, and Katherine sounds like
an interesting character who will
have a lot to deal with.
-I like how you said the cat
said too many dogs!
-I am not an experienced prose writer,
but finding titles for anything is hard.
-I find they come from what you write.
-Sometimes they might not come
until it's finished.
-I will do my best to follow along,
and I wish you all the best with the project.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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-A good image for this
introduction, Barbara.
-You did a good job giving the
basics, and Katherine sounds like
an interesting character who will
have a lot to deal with.
-I like how you said the cat
said too many dogs!
-I am not an experienced prose writer,
but finding titles for anything is hard.
-I find they come from what you write.
-Sometimes they might not come
until it's finished.
-I will do my best to follow along,
and I wish you all the best with the project.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Please feel free to chime in at any time. I appreciate your encouragement.
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You are welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb ( barbara.wilkey)
I read your interesting kick off your new upcoming new novel. I know you are going to do well from the previous novels you posted here on fanstory. I will start searching in my bucket of titles for your new novel.
Gert
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Hello Barb ( barbara.wilkey)
I read your interesting kick off your new upcoming new novel. I know you are going to do well from the previous novels you posted here on fanstory. I will start searching in my bucket of titles for your new novel.
Gert
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement. It's always a joy hearing from you.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from judiverse
This sounds like a great idea. I'd not include football in you book title. The characters sound interesting. Katherine is surely the heroine. If she was left with a lot of money, I can see her being wary of people, thinking they might be after her money. Starting a career as a teacher will have its own challenges. I can see some kind of scandal revolving around the family, and she will need to fight to keep her job and her reputation. You have a lot of possibilities. This is not a young woman just starting out, so this will be a bit different for you. You've presented some fascinating possibilities, so best of luck. judi
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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This sounds like a great idea. I'd not include football in you book title. The characters sound interesting. Katherine is surely the heroine. If she was left with a lot of money, I can see her being wary of people, thinking they might be after her money. Starting a career as a teacher will have its own challenges. I can see some kind of scandal revolving around the family, and she will need to fight to keep her job and her reputation. You have a lot of possibilities. This is not a young woman just starting out, so this will be a bit different for you. You've presented some fascinating possibilities, so best of luck. judi
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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A reviewer suggested the title, 'Against All Odds' and I like it. It hit the nail on the head. I will keep it for a while and see how it feels. Thank you for the encouragement.
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You're welcome. I can see the endless conflicts this woman might have. :Against All Odds may say what your story is about. But it's also a bit trite and there are probably many other books out there with that title. judi
Comment from Tom Herndon
Well, you're onto something here, Barbara. Trust your instincts. You've written this kind of protagonist before. Perhaps this one starts like normal life in a small town with a mother who has some money so she's not fending off creditors, but she's single and has four kids and is trying to gain independence, and then something unusual, even a little dangerous happens to upset the normalcy. Maybe she runs a hugely successful Fantasy Football club that attracts the attention of a local racketeer. Or the local football coach is sweet on her and he has four kids of his own. So many directions to go, but there needs to be some conflict, I would think, that she gets to overcome. You've done this before, you can do it again.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Well, you're onto something here, Barbara. Trust your instincts. You've written this kind of protagonist before. Perhaps this one starts like normal life in a small town with a mother who has some money so she's not fending off creditors, but she's single and has four kids and is trying to gain independence, and then something unusual, even a little dangerous happens to upset the normalcy. Maybe she runs a hugely successful Fantasy Football club that attracts the attention of a local racketeer. Or the local football coach is sweet on her and he has four kids of his own. So many directions to go, but there needs to be some conflict, I would think, that she gets to overcome. You've done this before, you can do it again.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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You have partially nailed it, just tweaked a little. Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, Hooray you are already posting a new novel. That's great and I'm looking forward to where it takes us. Can't wait. Happens to me all the time. The characters take you on for a ride.
I found this:
It's finished, but as with my many of my novels, my characters took it places, I had no intentions of going. = It's finished, but as with so many of my novels, my characters took it to places, I had no intention of going. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Hi Barbara, Hooray you are already posting a new novel. That's great and I'm looking forward to where it takes us. Can't wait. Happens to me all the time. The characters take you on for a ride.
I found this:
It's finished, but as with my many of my novels, my characters took it places, I had no intentions of going. = It's finished, but as with so many of my novels, my characters took it to places, I had no intention of going. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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I add that little word. I tend to read over them thinking they are there. LOL Thank you.
Comment from A. Fortier
I'd be excited to read what you've written. I love the premise already. I also enjoy that, like a good author, you let the character dictate the story. Good luck with your novel!
Cheers,
-A.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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I'd be excited to read what you've written. I love the premise already. I also enjoy that, like a good author, you let the character dictate the story. Good luck with your novel!
Cheers,
-A.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.