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Heart Cafted Poems - 2020

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Musings of an old man -2020

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Comment from dragonpoet
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I like the way you interpreted this. It seems you feel protected and thus those around you are too. Everyone needs this feeling in today's world.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
    Joan, thank you, yes being intune with my nighttime messengers seeking what is trying to be revealed.
reply by dragonpoet on 07-Jul-2020
    Don't mention it, JLR.

    Joan
Comment from jake cosmos aller
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nicely done poem about the guardians of a tomb standing watch over the buried people buried in sacred grounds good images, nice rhymes and formal verse

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 Comment Written 07-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
    Jake thanks
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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A good interpretation of these statues for the Pix this club challenge JLR. I like the way you've described the four protectors and he, smiling in the middle, seeing all. Nicely done,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
    Vlada, I appreciaite your review.
Comment from sherrygreywolf
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You've written a very interesting poem for the "A Stony Smile" free verse challenge. I especially loved the alliteration here - "with sure-footed sparkling stardust paths, thus, I smile so assuredly I travel safe." Great job.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
    I appreciate your review and comments
Comment from royowen
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I love to see the results of interpretations of this wonderful post you've, I sort f had to forget these Easter Island statues, although when they vanished it was almost like a supernatural tale, they cut down all the trees and that somehow led to their demise, beautifully written free verse, well done, Blessings Roy

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
    Thank you Roy,
reply by royowen on 07-Jul-2020
    Pleasure
Comment from Suzanna Ray
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Dear JLR, your escorts on this journey certainly qualify with the stoney smile but the eyes are so deep set That I could not tell if they were looking up or down. and as for looking forward and backwards, I could not see from the illustration, if they had eyes in the back of their heads. They looked a little stiff necked to me. But it sounds like you had a successful journey waking on those sparkling stardust paths (your most interesting image)

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
    Suzanna, the beauty of dreams is we are just aren't exactly sure where reality starts and the unknowing ends.
Comment from Earl Corp
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I had to look up what magenta meant. I learned something by reading your poem I don't know why you didn't enter this in the free verse poetry contest on the sight. It's as good as any free verse poem I've read. Very nice job.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
    Eral thanks, I had already submitted a free verse, my preferred style of poetic voice. I appreciate your strong validation.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
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Creative way to go on the pic challenge!
EXCELLENT poem! I like your twist on the five guards;-)

I'd consider, however changing the background color and possibly the font size and color as well;-) I would play with the colors and see what you come up with;-) The white is quite cold and unwelcoming, it's screaming for something warm and inviting!

I appreciate you and thank you for sharing;-)
May God bless you and your family;-)

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
    Melodie, You are quite right thanks
reply by Melodie Michelle on 07-Jul-2020
    ;-)
Comment from joycetreasures
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Hello JLR,
I pray you are doing well today. I like your poem of the sentinels standing guard. It's descriptively written and a lovely story of the five guards. I especially loved the guard in the middle with his stoney smile. He seems like he knows something, maybe the others don't know. I really like your message of the team of sentinels traveling together, especially the leader in all his confidence. This was a very enjoyable read. Well done. Happy writing:-)

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
    Joyce my dear lady, thank you. It was such a delight to make your acquaintance a real event at Jim's birthday celebration. You exude a depth of peace and harmony that wa palpable and your smile would light the entry of any room
reply by joycetreasures on 07-Jul-2020
    Awe. Thank you, JLR. It was also a pleasure for me to meet Jim's friends. God bless your, richly.
Comment from lyenochka
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Really imaginative take on the picture challenge. My favorite lines were:
"or past dark bottomless
crevices of life's daytime burdens."
It makes sense that the centerstage one who has the confidence is able to smile!

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
    Thank you for your review and comments