Love Long Distance
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This chapter in your story started off with a giggle, and ended with a knotted tummy. I had to laugh at Grandma telling Grandpa off after she heard what he'd said about flirting, so funny! There is lots going on in this part, Cathy, I really lovely the proposal on the carousel, how romantic was that! I was clapping, too! But all good things come to an end, and Cathy goes home on the bus in one direction, and Bill on the train in the other to go back to the war. Well done, this was excellent! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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This chapter in your story started off with a giggle, and ended with a knotted tummy. I had to laugh at Grandma telling Grandpa off after she heard what he'd said about flirting, so funny! There is lots going on in this part, Cathy, I really lovely the proposal on the carousel, how romantic was that! I was clapping, too! But all good things come to an end, and Cathy goes home on the bus in one direction, and Bill on the train in the other to go back to the war. Well done, this was excellent! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Hi Sandra, You made us smile when you said you clapped about the proposal. Yes, so romantic! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. Great comments! Also, for your continued support and encouragement. So glad you found this chapter "well done" and "excellent." HURRAH! Chapter 25 is in the works and coming soon. Wishing you all the best. Take care and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "Rat-a-tat-tat--Kaboom--Kaboom! Walking along, we stumbled, fell, bled; yet, some lived to fight another day. Thank God I was among the living. Raising my eyes to the sky, I whispered, 'Please, Jesus! Bring me home to Cathy, our baby and family.'", because of the use of onomatopoeia it helped add to the action, and because you left the reader in suspense as to what will happen with their relationship!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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My favorite part was, "Rat-a-tat-tat--Kaboom--Kaboom! Walking along, we stumbled, fell, bled; yet, some lived to fight another day. Thank God I was among the living. Raising my eyes to the sky, I whispered, 'Please, Jesus! Bring me home to Cathy, our baby and family.'", because of the use of onomatopoeia it helped add to the action, and because you left the reader in suspense as to what will happen with their relationship!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Hi There, Friend! We are so glad you enjoyed this chapter. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing it. Also, for your support and encouragement. We really appreciate you sharing your favorite part (all accolades go to Bill for that!). Chapter 25 is already in the works and coming soon. Take care and God Bless. Have a wonderful weekend.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Vietnam such a horrible war. My cousin fought, he drove a tank, he has never been the same. But I am grateful for those willing to do what I cannot, go to war and defend our country.
So now Bill and Cathy are engaged. I have a feeling he will make it home for the wedding. Well done, looking forward to the next chapter. Rox
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Vietnam such a horrible war. My cousin fought, he drove a tank, he has never been the same. But I am grateful for those willing to do what I cannot, go to war and defend our country.
So now Bill and Cathy are engaged. I have a feeling he will make it home for the wedding. Well done, looking forward to the next chapter. Rox
Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Hi Rox, Your continued support means so much to us. Thank you for reading and reviewing this chapter. Also, for sharing about your cousin. Very sad. We hope you are right about Bill making it through and coming home to Cathy and the baby. We will see... Chapter 25 is already in the works and coming soon. Take care and have a nice weekend. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Benshu-bookgai
One of the things I especially like about this section--not having familiarized myself with the other chapters, as of yet--is that the jump cuts feel very quick and chaotic, which is very much a real thing that happens to the mind when large contrasting events overlap. In light of the impending horrors of Vietnam, the nested, almost dream-like quality of the peacetime events works very well.
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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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One of the things I especially like about this section--not having familiarized myself with the other chapters, as of yet--is that the jump cuts feel very quick and chaotic, which is very much a real thing that happens to the mind when large contrasting events overlap. In light of the impending horrors of Vietnam, the nested, almost dream-like quality of the peacetime events works very well.
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Comment Written 25-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Hi There! Thanks so much for stopping by to read and review this chapter. We are so glad you enjoyed it, and hope you will continue to follow along. Your comments are detailed and much appreciated. Chapter 25 is in the works and coming soon. Be well, take care and have a nice weekend. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
