Death by Cliche
Let the truth be not told!29 total reviews
Comment from equestrik
This is well done. As I read I couldn't help but wonder at the truth of a person's life that is rarely if ever really told at their passing. You chose a good picture and good writing.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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This is well done. As I read I couldn't help but wonder at the truth of a person's life that is rarely if ever really told at their passing. You chose a good picture and good writing.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2020
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Hello again! I had fun with this, though there is indeed darkness amidst the light side.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the fast forward plot development, ends with a mystic ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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I like and have enjoyed the read, the taletelling, the fast forward plot development, ends with a mystic ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thanks!
Comment from royowen
I'm so glad it's actually fiction Liz, serves him right, (I'm sure there are a few like this around) I couldn't help admiring your sardonic wit. You have a unique way of looking at the world at large dear girl, great literary work though, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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I'm so glad it's actually fiction Liz, serves him right, (I'm sure there are a few like this around) I couldn't help admiring your sardonic wit. You have a unique way of looking at the world at large dear girl, great literary work though, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2020
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Thank you Roy. I had a ball conjuring this character!
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Well done
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Death By Cliché, seems to give the readers the cleaned up obituary followed by the rough copy which seemed to over-share the reality of having a dysfunctional family.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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This story, Death By Cliché, seems to give the readers the cleaned up obituary followed by the rough copy which seemed to over-share the reality of having a dysfunctional family.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2020
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Thanks for stopping by, Bill!
Comment from lyenochka
Your humor is good but on the dark side. I now feel rather depressed. I think I'd prefer the sanitized cliches that don't show us the sad things that this poor woman suffered in life.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Your humor is good but on the dark side. I now feel rather depressed. I think I'd prefer the sanitized cliches that don't show us the sad things that this poor woman suffered in life.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Sorry this spoof brought you down--indeed, clichés bring much comfort! Cheers. LIZ
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Clichés can be empty but the final memorials can be full of them and it's okay. 😊
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
A sad scenario that is true for many unfortunately. You did a great job with the 'real' scene and the 'wish it were true' scene. What a contrast. Family can hide what is really on their minds many times until they just go berserk and it's me, me, me. Your art choice pairs nicely with your tale. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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A sad scenario that is true for many unfortunately. You did a great job with the 'real' scene and the 'wish it were true' scene. What a contrast. Family can hide what is really on their minds many times until they just go berserk and it's me, me, me. Your art choice pairs nicely with your tale. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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Jan--you must have bitten the very moment I tossed the bait! So glad you liked this piece. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from LisaMay
I love the tongue-in-cheek humour disguising the sad reality of what may well be true of many families. The 'real' story would have cost a fortune to put in the paper, so it may be a sad fact that embroidered truth costs less.
I hope Sandra is happier now she is dead. You are a true friend to her to set the record straight.
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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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I love the tongue-in-cheek humour disguising the sad reality of what may well be true of many families. The 'real' story would have cost a fortune to put in the paper, so it may be a sad fact that embroidered truth costs less.
I hope Sandra is happier now she is dead. You are a true friend to her to set the record straight.
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Hey, Lisa--I think I just got a bonus review on this one! I already got my 2 comps last week, and the piece is normally deleted forthwith if not promoted. Wonder how you found this! Must have slipped the axe. I've learned the hard way not to bother promoting a piece unless I'm prepared to pump at least six 5-pt levels after the initial 9.95 just to get (maybe) 5 more reviews with 82 cents per as enticement. So that's $37.65--money ain't so funny anymore. So--I take my two and scoot--then promote selected pieces when I've $$$$aved up. A couple of times I did get three--even once four--freebies. I promoted one of those "three-bies" thereafter to po$$$$$$ition 10 and only got 4 more reviews. Thanks for your interest (in my work, that is--I fear this ramble may have invoked the opposite). Cheers. LIZ
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I went looking at your portfolio and cherry-picked based on subject.
The money aspect of fanstory is a bit tough; some of those ones at the first page must have paid a fortune to be there. I see you are a recent member - it will probably take a few months for other members to notice your work, become a fan, then more reviews will happen. I have been on site for 14 months and get about 6 to 14 reviews for the initial $9.95. I only add extras when i post a poem, but only 2 or 3 pumps max. I will 'fan' you, then I can see whatever you write as soon as you post it.
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Thank you, LisaMay, for your thoughtful response to my ramble. Indeed, the people on page one are paying a fortune! It's 6 pumps to get from 52 to 82 at 5 cents per (total $28.65), then 9 pumps to get from 82 to 100 at 2 cents per (total $54.20) then then one pump per penny thereafter! I see some guys up there at the 1.14 level--sometimes with 2 poems at once! So..let's tally that up... we had 6, plus 9, plus 14 pumps..equals 29 pumps X 2.95 plus the 9.95 equals...YIKES! 95.50!
...After all that, supposing all the reviewers say the poem sucks!
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I think with offering all that money to review their work, those rich members seem to have 'bought' the reviewer's gushy praise (however insincere). I can't remember ever seeing a low rating for a high rewarding posting, and some very clearly don't deserve the merit.
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Ya think?
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Tongue in cheek is making my face bulge.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Elizabeth
A very funny and clever piece. I have always held that words are a terrible form of communication as people (present company excluded, of course) lie, and so there's always a 50/50 chance that what you hear or read is not true.
This is witty and you should not let the idea go: it is recyclable and would lead to a great collection: "The Devil's Obits"
I wish you well with your continued writing - thank you for posting this.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hello Elizabeth
A very funny and clever piece. I have always held that words are a terrible form of communication as people (present company excluded, of course) lie, and so there's always a 50/50 chance that what you hear or read is not true.
This is witty and you should not let the idea go: it is recyclable and would lead to a great collection: "The Devil's Obits"
I wish you well with your continued writing - thank you for posting this.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Thanks Phil! I figured I'd follow up with something light after the heavy script I posted earlier. (Open House, Closed Doors) Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!! Okay, so somebody was really feeling devious this morning with the pen... but it was definitely worth some chuckles over here. Funny how those obits are always so formal and perfect sounding when we know there's a story back there some where, yeah?! :) Yvette
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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LOL!! Okay, so somebody was really feeling devious this morning with the pen... but it was definitely worth some chuckles over here. Funny how those obits are always so formal and perfect sounding when we know there's a story back there some where, yeah?! :) Yvette
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Thanks Yvette! I figured I'd follow up with something light after the heavy script I posted earlier. (Open House, Closed Doors) Cheers. LIZ
