Murmurations of the Heart
You...inside and out59 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I like your poem, the presentation is beautiful and I love what you did with the font. I know that takes a long time. The syllables count is correct.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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I like your poem, the presentation is beautiful and I love what you did with the font. I know that takes a long time. The syllables count is correct.
Gypsy
Comment Written 18-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thanx, Gypsy -- glad you enjoyed this one! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week! ;) Yvette
Comment from lauralumummu
What a lovely poem and presentation. A perfect entry for the contest. I hope you win. I am back from vacation. Hope to write something soon. All the best, Laura.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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What a lovely poem and presentation. A perfect entry for the contest. I hope you win. I am back from vacation. Hope to write something soon. All the best, Laura.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Wow, Laural - thank you!! Your comments and those lovely stars are certainly a bright spot to all the gray that seems to hover around here these days...sigh. :) ;) Seriously, though, I am truly glad you enjoyed this one... we do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) Thanx again, my lady -- and may sunshine and solace find you this week... you need a WHOLE lot after that 'vacation'! ;) Yvette
Comment from DeborahWrite
Dear Author,
Your poem is excellent and your wonderful words enchant me! I love your flow and use of imagery!
My best of luck in the 5 line poem contest!
Deborah
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Dear Author,
Your poem is excellent and your wonderful words enchant me! I love your flow and use of imagery!
My best of luck in the 5 line poem contest!
Deborah
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Thanx, Deborah -- glad you enjoyed this one! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes and even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week over there! ;) Yvette
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Your writings wonderful!
Comment from juliaSjames
Beautiful, Yvette. I love the feel of this write. Reminds me of the Pointer Sisters singing "Slow Hand". Your phrases are exquisite. Both the words and the soft, soothing alliteration.
And that title, just sufficiently over the top to grab the reader's attention. The committee's too, one hopes.
Good luck.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Beautiful, Yvette. I love the feel of this write. Reminds me of the Pointer Sisters singing "Slow Hand". Your phrases are exquisite. Both the words and the soft, soothing alliteration.
And that title, just sufficiently over the top to grab the reader's attention. The committee's too, one hopes.
Good luck.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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LOL!! You are so right about that... oh my goodness, lady!! I haven't thought about that song in years... and now? It's like right here, in my ear!! ;) Thank you for the smile and the 'smack upside the head' of memories - lol!! ;) Glad this one moved you sloooowly... :) Yvette
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Beautiful! How did you accomplish the letters fading into different shades like that? So cool! And it matches the picture perfectly! Incredible!
Thank you for sharing such a lovely poem! xoxo
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Beautiful! How did you accomplish the letters fading into different shades like that? So cool! And it matches the picture perfectly! Incredible!
Thank you for sharing such a lovely poem! xoxo
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2020
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Just use the Advanced Editor and the 'More Colors' option when you're altering your text colors... :) :) Thanx, my lady!! ;) Yvette
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So you go letter by letter changing it to fade into the next color? That?s a lot of freakin? work! Wow!
Comment from JP Writer
Some poems seem opaque, at least for my feeble brain to understand. This poem sort of fits that, yet there's something about it, even though I don't quite understand its meaning, that feels deeply spiritual and calming. Maybe its the lovely image of "silken whispers," or concept of "jaded soul." It makes me want to read more of your work, which I shall do right away!
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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Some poems seem opaque, at least for my feeble brain to understand. This poem sort of fits that, yet there's something about it, even though I don't quite understand its meaning, that feels deeply spiritual and calming. Maybe its the lovely image of "silken whispers," or concept of "jaded soul." It makes me want to read more of your work, which I shall do right away!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2020
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Thank you. According to the ratings, a four-star rating means that "adjustments are needed", however, you list no corrections that need to be made here. So that I may improve my technique, could you please tell me what changes/corrections need to be made that would bring it up to the five-star that does not need corrections? Thank you so very much!
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For me (and this is very subjective and personal) poems that work well convey very specific thoughts or feelings. Your poem, as lovely as it sounds, would be more relatable if you specified what was being whispered (show me how it is silken, don't tell me it is?) and by whom (I want to know that person!), why you need solace and why you believe your soul is jaded (I want to know this person, too!). I hope this helps.
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It's a 21 syllable contest.... how exactly are you to give that much detail...? Thank you for your explanation as impossible as it would be to implement.
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I didn't realize that was the prompt criteria. I still think you have a nice way with words. I will check out more of your work!
Comment from karenina
Yes....a softly whispered affirmation that what you've written is indeed what the soul needs. So beautifully presented! If I saw this framed in a gallery I would want to purchase it for my bedroom wall!--Karenina
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Yes....a softly whispered affirmation that what you've written is indeed what the soul needs. So beautifully presented! If I saw this framed in a gallery I would want to purchase it for my bedroom wall!--Karenina
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Wow, Karenina -- you just put the sunshine in a gray day with those lovely comments! :) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes... even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week, my lady! ;) Yvette
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Thank you for your kind wishes. The very same to you!--Karenina
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Really like this poem and the message contained therein. Sometimes it is indeed the softness of a whisper that provides the most solace. Could easily see this win the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Really like this poem and the message contained therein. Sometimes it is indeed the softness of a whisper that provides the most solace. Could easily see this win the contest.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Wow, Brett - thank you!! Your comments and those lovely stars are certainly a bright spot to all the gray that seems to hover around here these days...ugh (make it go away - lol!). :) ;) Seriously, though, I am truly glad you enjoyed this one... we do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes.... even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) Thanx again, sir -- and may sunshine and solace find you this week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Sometimes we just have to stop talking, withdraw from all others, and give those "silken whispers" of solace an opportunity to soothe us. The choice of artwork is fitting for this lovely poem.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Sometimes we just have to stop talking, withdraw from all others, and give those "silken whispers" of solace an opportunity to soothe us. The choice of artwork is fitting for this lovely poem.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Thanx so much, Janice! :) You're right: we do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes... even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you this week, my lady! ;) Yvette
Comment from aryr
Good luck in the contest, Yvette. This was simple yet very informative. I do so agree that we all indeed need shelter and these words captured that essence.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Good luck in the contest, Yvette. This was simple yet very informative. I do so agree that we all indeed need shelter and these words captured that essence.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2020
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Yes!! ;) We do all need a place of shelter from the comments and the harshness that life can be sometimes... even if that's just silence and another's breathing, that's good, too. :) :) May sunshine and solace find you out there this week, Alie! ;) Yvette
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And may sunshine and solace bless you Yvette.
