Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Raindrops Crescendo"Musings of an old man -2020
28 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Terrific job with your kyrielle poem! I liked how you set a mood with the repeated line and we can all relate to the dreariness of a winter "lingering longer" and the "bane of stiffness."
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
  |
Terrific job with your kyrielle poem! I liked how you set a mood with the repeated line and we can all relate to the dreariness of a winter "lingering longer" and the "bane of stiffness."
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
-
Thank you!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
It looks like this bird was standing firm and resolute about not being move despite the rain pelting it. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
|
It looks like this bird was standing firm and resolute about not being move despite the rain pelting it. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
-
Jeffrey, thank you!
Comment from Fonda Little
I love the repeating line in this poem, "raindrops crescendo off the pane," it brings a peace to this poem that I really enjoyed! Also your rhyme scheme was on point and I liked your word usage! Great job!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
|
I love the repeating line in this poem, "raindrops crescendo off the pane," it brings a peace to this poem that I really enjoyed! Also your rhyme scheme was on point and I liked your word usage! Great job!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
-
Thanks a bunch, Fonda, have grand weekend!
Comment from Minglement
You've used a lovely poem for your beautiful thought on rain, one of my favorite things ever. I love your repeated line and the repeat creates impact. I really enjoyed it :)
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
|
You've used a lovely poem for your beautiful thought on rain, one of my favorite things ever. I love your repeated line and the repeat creates impact. I really enjoyed it :)
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
-
Thank you for your very kind comments. It pleases me that really enjoyed the poem.
-
You're very welcome.
Comment from Sugarray77
I enjoyed reading your Kyrielle, J... well done on the choice of rain as your topic and an excellent repetitive line. You definitely transported us into your rainy day with this verse. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
|
I enjoyed reading your Kyrielle, J... well done on the choice of rain as your topic and an excellent repetitive line. You definitely transported us into your rainy day with this verse. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
-
Melissa, thank you so much for the good comments.
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is wonderful. As someone who loves repetitive lines, I found this one to be perfect in every way. The repetitive line was my favourite. It worked so well with each stanza.
Drew
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
|
This is wonderful. As someone who loves repetitive lines, I found this one to be perfect in every way. The repetitive line was my favourite. It worked so well with each stanza.
Drew
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
-
Drew,I enjoy the poetic style very much, thank you for the kind comments.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a really good, well written poem. I had the added benefit of reading this as that annoying rain was playing its tune on MY window pain!
I enjoyed reading your poem, and loved the descriptive words and occasional alliteration that ran through your lines. Well done, a lovely entry for the potlatch challenge. :)) Sandra xx
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
|
That was a really good, well written poem. I had the added benefit of reading this as that annoying rain was playing its tune on MY window pain!
I enjoyed reading your poem, and loved the descriptive words and occasional alliteration that ran through your lines. Well done, a lovely entry for the potlatch challenge. :)) Sandra xx
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
-
Sandra, I delight that it touched you at such a timely time. Stay dry and enjoy a hot chai tea latte today.
-
Hmm, what a good idea! :))
Comment from susand3022
Hello JLR, I really liked your Potlatch Poem, it's so sweet! Your refrain is just screaming 'Springtime!!!' and I love that!
I do have one suggestion for your last stanza: I find the second line to be a little awkward, you may want to try, "to let the sun's rays dance again" I think it will read much more smoothly.
It's a lovely spring poem. :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
|
Hello JLR, I really liked your Potlatch Poem, it's so sweet! Your refrain is just screaming 'Springtime!!!' and I love that!
I do have one suggestion for your last stanza: I find the second line to be a little awkward, you may want to try, "to let the sun's rays dance again" I think it will read much more smoothly.
It's a lovely spring poem. :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2020
-
Susan, I will look at that I am grateful for your wise comments.
-
I'm not so sure about wise, but I give it a shot now and then. I'm due for a Kyrielle myself. Now, what to write about! :)