Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Sugarray77
An excellent response to the Pix Challenge J... this one is so good and appropriately identifies and labels the problems... drug kings, handouts, poverty and darkness. A really good write.
Melissa
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2020
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An excellent response to the Pix Challenge J... this one is so good and appropriately identifies and labels the problems... drug kings, handouts, poverty and darkness. A really good write.
Melissa
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
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Sugarray, thank you!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This sounds very sad and unfortunate. It is reality though that many of us have to walk out on a daily basis. The only help or hope that I can see in this darkness is the light of Almighty God changing people's hearts. I like the message of this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
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This sounds very sad and unfortunate. It is reality though that many of us have to walk out on a daily basis. The only help or hope that I can see in this darkness is the light of Almighty God changing people's hearts. I like the message of this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
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Jeffrey, thank you!
Comment from Drew Delaney
You have done a great job in writing this poem. The last half is exceptional.
I have a couple of suggestions to help with the flow in my point of view. I hope you don't
where all on earth seems right.... where all on earth seems to be alright ... more syllables are required for flow.
I feel the stress of yet another killing ... here I think yet should be removed
aware of people who feel the defeat. ... aware of people who've succumbed to defeat
Just a couple of ideas I am throwing out there.
Drew Delaney
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You have done a great job in writing this poem. The last half is exceptional.
I have a couple of suggestions to help with the flow in my point of view. I hope you don't
where all on earth seems right.... where all on earth seems to be alright ... more syllables are required for flow.
I feel the stress of yet another killing ... here I think yet should be removed
aware of people who feel the defeat. ... aware of people who've succumbed to defeat
Just a couple of ideas I am throwing out there.
Drew Delaney
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
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Drew, I am very appreciative of your honest and kind insights.
Comment from RShipp
I have enjoyed the read for your club entry for the "Night In The City" event in "Pix This Challenge Group"
I could easily see these thoughts going through the detectives head as he patrolled the streets.
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I have enjoyed the read for your club entry for the "Night In The City" event in "Pix This Challenge Group"
I could easily see these thoughts going through the detectives head as he patrolled the streets.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Jim. Your city poem is well rhymed and speaks to some social issues. To dare to walk the streets at night is not the best idea no matter where you go. Marilyn
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Hi Jim. Your city poem is well rhymed and speaks to some social issues. To dare to walk the streets at night is not the best idea no matter where you go. Marilyn
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
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Marilyn it is so true how so many cities night life is simply not the "walk in the park: of yesteryear.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a well written and well rhymed verse telling of the dark side of the city at night.
Well written, the story is clear.
I think you've met the "Pix This Challenge" quite nicely.
Well done.
Sharon
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I think this is a well written and well rhymed verse telling of the dark side of the city at night.
Well written, the story is clear.
I think you've met the "Pix This Challenge" quite nicely.
Well done.
Sharon
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
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Sharon, thank you.
Comment from Sally Law
This was as chilling as a murder mystery. A wonderful side to this pix challenge. I thought he reminded me a bit of Dick Tracy. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the poetry prompt.
Sally :))
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This was as chilling as a murder mystery. A wonderful side to this pix challenge. I thought he reminded me a bit of Dick Tracy. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the poetry prompt.
Sally :))
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
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Sally, Good to see your review as always. And off we go into another year of words dancing in the cosmos to be grabbed onto and shared again and again.
Comment from Raul1
This poem is definitely the provider of all choices. I have enjoyed reading this poem. It's entertaining and interesting. Excellent work! No grammatical errors.
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This poem is definitely the provider of all choices. I have enjoyed reading this poem. It's entertaining and interesting. Excellent work! No grammatical errors.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
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Thank you Raul!
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You're welcome
Comment from Tina Crute
The plight of the homeless seems too big of a problem to fix. All we can do is support the programs that help them, but you're right...there needs to be a more choices. I like true poetry.
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The plight of the homeless seems too big of a problem to fix. All we can do is support the programs that help them, but you're right...there needs to be a more choices. I like true poetry.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
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Tina, yes in many ways more can be achieved.
Comment from royowen
Well done with this poem. Oh yes indeed, the western world is alight with drugs, our country is not immune to its danger either. I don't the eastern nations escape. Beautifully written my friend, you've done an excellent job with this pentametric poem, and it's aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
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Well done with this poem. Oh yes indeed, the western world is alight with drugs, our country is not immune to its danger either. I don't the eastern nations escape. Beautifully written my friend, you've done an excellent job with this pentametric poem, and it's aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 07-Jan-2020
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Roy, thank you for your acknowledgement
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Welcome
