Love Long Distance
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 " The Premonition - Chapter 16"A Wartime Romance
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Comment from Therese Caron
Excellent story, grabbed me right at the beginning and held me until the end. The clips were great, and added a lot to the story. Listening to Pres. Johnson speak was amazing. Good description and development of characters. I am very anxious to see the next installment.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Excellent story, grabbed me right at the beginning and held me until the end. The clips were great, and added a lot to the story. Listening to Pres. Johnson speak was amazing. Good description and development of characters. I am very anxious to see the next installment.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hi Therese! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. So glad it held your interest from beginning to end, and you felt it was excellent. Thank you also for mentioning the clips. Chapter 17 is already in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a wonderful holiday week and a Happy New Year. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
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Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you too.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed this well-written chapter, Cathy and Bill. It is presented wonderfully from the start to the finish. I like how it begins with great action and continues throughout.
Grandpa's way of discussing his thoughts on the premonition/precognitive dreams was eerie the way Bill later had that nightmare and Cathy the same one after speaking with Bill following the US becoming involved in the Vietnam confrontation. I like how that dream was near the beginning and repeated at the end. You left readers with a great cliff hanger, too.
The events of the time are well-incorporated. Who doesn't remember Walter Cronkite on CBS with news of Vietnam? I believe his kind of reporting about it was the first time it was being broadcast in the living rooms of Americans nightly on tv. The inclusion of Jim Reeves death and how Grandpa and Grandma remembered him keeps readers abreast of the social/political atmosphere in the states in 1964. Great job with that facet.
Readers get a feel for how Bill's team bonded through the dream sequence. As a team they had to work together at all times. The bonding is evident in the alligator incident and the aftermath of the mortar attack.
Grandpa is such an endearing character. Readers love him and his down to earth wisdom and how Bill draws on his strength. Bill meeting the dog as he went to make that call shows stress from many 'things'--his separation from Cathy, his knowledge of what could be ahead for him and his family, and the demands of the intense training.
I like how Cathy felt the baby--fluttering soft as butterfly wings.' Bill's plan for his vacation after graduation sounded romantic. I hope Cathy agrees to it.
The questions at the end will keep readers wondering and returning to find out their answers. AWESOME job with this collaboration. Each POV is identifiable AND cohesive to the story at the same time.
Thanks for sharing. I look forward to chapter 17.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Laura Jan
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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I enjoyed this well-written chapter, Cathy and Bill. It is presented wonderfully from the start to the finish. I like how it begins with great action and continues throughout.
Grandpa's way of discussing his thoughts on the premonition/precognitive dreams was eerie the way Bill later had that nightmare and Cathy the same one after speaking with Bill following the US becoming involved in the Vietnam confrontation. I like how that dream was near the beginning and repeated at the end. You left readers with a great cliff hanger, too.
The events of the time are well-incorporated. Who doesn't remember Walter Cronkite on CBS with news of Vietnam? I believe his kind of reporting about it was the first time it was being broadcast in the living rooms of Americans nightly on tv. The inclusion of Jim Reeves death and how Grandpa and Grandma remembered him keeps readers abreast of the social/political atmosphere in the states in 1964. Great job with that facet.
Readers get a feel for how Bill's team bonded through the dream sequence. As a team they had to work together at all times. The bonding is evident in the alligator incident and the aftermath of the mortar attack.
Grandpa is such an endearing character. Readers love him and his down to earth wisdom and how Bill draws on his strength. Bill meeting the dog as he went to make that call shows stress from many 'things'--his separation from Cathy, his knowledge of what could be ahead for him and his family, and the demands of the intense training.
I like how Cathy felt the baby--fluttering soft as butterfly wings.' Bill's plan for his vacation after graduation sounded romantic. I hope Cathy agrees to it.
The questions at the end will keep readers wondering and returning to find out their answers. AWESOME job with this collaboration. Each POV is identifiable AND cohesive to the story at the same time.
Thanks for sharing. I look forward to chapter 17.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Laura Jan
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hi Laura Jan! Thank you SO MUCH for the AWESOME 6 star rating and review! A "DOUBLE SALUTE!" As always, you have given such a thorough synopsis of this chapter here. We really appreciate and admire you! Thank you also for your continued support. It means a great deal to both of us. Wish we had a review vote to give you, but know how very much your words mean to us. Chapter 17 is in the works and coming soon. Have a wonderful Christmas and Happy New Year! God Bless.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Sasha
This is well written and the thought of Bill's death upset me. Hopefully, having a premonition of what may come, he will take care to not be so heroic if the time comes. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter. You are doing a great job with this.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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This is well written and the thought of Bill's death upset me. Hopefully, having a premonition of what may come, he will take care to not be so heroic if the time comes. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter. You are doing a great job with this.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hi Sasha! So sorry the thought of Bill's death upset you! Dry your eyes and please don't cry! Right now, he's okay and about to find out some happy news! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this story. We really appreciate your continued support. Your kind words here mean so much to us. You won't have to wait too long for Chapter 17. It is already in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a wonderful Christmas and a very Happy New Year. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Mistydawn
What a well written chapter. It's very interesting, realistic. Bill's death scene made me cry. I'm so glad it's only a dream and sure hope it doesn't happen. I hope she'll be able to tell him her news soon. I enjoyed the little extras you put at the end. It brought back a lot of pleasant memories. Thanks for sharing them with us. As I was listening to Walter Cronkite Paul Harvey came to mind, how he'd end his segment. Thank you for the journey down memory lane.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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What a well written chapter. It's very interesting, realistic. Bill's death scene made me cry. I'm so glad it's only a dream and sure hope it doesn't happen. I hope she'll be able to tell him her news soon. I enjoyed the little extras you put at the end. It brought back a lot of pleasant memories. Thanks for sharing them with us. As I was listening to Walter Cronkite Paul Harvey came to mind, how he'd end his segment. Thank you for the journey down memory lane.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hi Mistydawn! WOW! THANK YOU SO MUCH for the AWESOME six star rating and review. We're happy we were able to bring you down memory lane. Sorry we made you cry! Dry those eyes 'cause a baby's coming! Hopefully, Bill will survive to see their little boy or girl! Great comments here! We really appreciate your continued support. Chapter 17 is already in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a wonderful Christmas and a Happy New Year! God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from LeannaP
I thought it was interesting when the mortar round exploded.
Normally, i don't like to read publishing's of chapters but this one caught my attention.
This was nicely written.
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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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I thought it was interesting when the mortar round exploded.
Normally, i don't like to read publishing's of chapters but this one caught my attention.
This was nicely written.
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Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hi Leanna! Glad this chapter caught your attention! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing it. We appreciate you saying it was nicely written and pointing out what you found most interesting. We hope you continue to follow along. Chapter 17 is already in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a wonderful upcoming holiday and Happy New Year. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Commando
Hi, Cathy! I'm "EXTREMELY HAPPY" being the first to review Chapter 16, "The Premonition," of "Love Long Distance!" My knowing, writing at your side, sharing your expertise, and having your support is a "PRESTIGIOUS HONOR!" A "SALUTE" to you, CO-AUTHOR! The "Walter Cronkite, Jim Reeves, Roger Miller, and President Johnson Video's are "AWESOME!" Lot's of research and I commend you. Are we ready to start Chapter 17? Silly question, huh? Why? Cause you already have--"HURRAH!" Best wishes, Merry Christmas and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration and Love, Bill.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hi, Cathy! I'm "EXTREMELY HAPPY" being the first to review Chapter 16, "The Premonition," of "Love Long Distance!" My knowing, writing at your side, sharing your expertise, and having your support is a "PRESTIGIOUS HONOR!" A "SALUTE" to you, CO-AUTHOR! The "Walter Cronkite, Jim Reeves, Roger Miller, and President Johnson Video's are "AWESOME!" Lot's of research and I commend you. Are we ready to start Chapter 17? Silly question, huh? Why? Cause you already have--"HURRAH!" Best wishes, Merry Christmas and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration and Love, Bill.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hi Bill! Guess what? I am also "EXTREMELY HAPPY!" Why? Because I get to write and co-author with such an AWESOME writer--YOU!!! As you know, Chapter 17 is coming along. HURRAH!! I "SALUTE" you for all you do. Your expert writing, imagination, determination, and commitment are all an inspiration to me! Thank you for giving US an AWESOME six star rating! As you also know, I couldn't do any of this without you! Thank you also for the holiday wishes and blessing. Merry Christmas and God Bless You, too! You are the BEST OF THE BEST!
Respectfully with Admiration and Love,
Cathy
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A "SALUTE," CO-AUTHOR! In three words..."YOU ARE AWESOME!" Best wishes, Merry Christmas and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration and Love, Bill.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That would be awful if that dream came true. Perhaps if Bill knows about the baby coming, he'll take a bit more care not to fall on that bomb. This was a really exciting part, both of you. I can't wait for the next part! Big hugs, and have a wonderful Christmas! :)) Sandra xxx
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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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That would be awful if that dream came true. Perhaps if Bill knows about the baby coming, he'll take a bit more care not to fall on that bomb. This was a really exciting part, both of you. I can't wait for the next part! Big hugs, and have a wonderful Christmas! :)) Sandra xxx
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Comment Written 17-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2019
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Hi Sandra! We really appreciate your continued support and comments. Thank you so much for reading Chapter 16 of Love Long Distance! Chapter 17 is being worked on now. Thank you also for the hugs and wishes. Wishing you, as well, a wonderful Christmas! :)) Big hugs from both of us! God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
