This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "The Beginnings Of A Plan"Third book in the time travel trilogy
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Comment from Mistydawn
This driving her husband insane plan is a great idea. I imagine it's going to be quite funny too, lol. The chapter is well-written, interesting, moves the plot along. Your characters dialogue seems real, relatable. Nice job as always.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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This driving her husband insane plan is a great idea. I imagine it's going to be quite funny too, lol. The chapter is well-written, interesting, moves the plot along. Your characters dialogue seems real, relatable. Nice job as always.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Hi, Misty, I've just looked at this chapter and something went very wrong, all the paragraphs jumped around. It was a mess, I'm just glad you got the gist of it. Thank you for reading, my friend, Sandra xx
Comment from tfawcus
Some great scheming going on here! I have a feeling that the next chapter is going to be highly entertaining! It's a while since I've heard 'toe rag' - great word! You'll need to have a look at things from the part where Mildred has her head being attended to. Some of the text has got out of order with accidental cutting and pasting.
Another six-worthy chapter. If I could time travel I'd nip into the future and get one!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Some great scheming going on here! I have a feeling that the next chapter is going to be highly entertaining! It's a while since I've heard 'toe rag' - great word! You'll need to have a look at things from the part where Mildred has her head being attended to. Some of the text has got out of order with accidental cutting and pasting.
Another six-worthy chapter. If I could time travel I'd nip into the future and get one!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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It was a mess, Tony, I don't know how that happened it was fine for the first three reviews, and I don't know what happened,but you were right. It was fine for the first three reviews, and then it decided to go haywire. It's all back together now. Total nightmare. Thanks for pointing it out. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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Comment from Rhonda Skinner
I love the idea of driving the vice admiral insane. Can't wait to see the plan in action. Noticed a few things:
your coats and satchels(.)"
as he took out (a) pair of surgical gloves
Not sure what happened with this chapter. Formatting gremlins? I were thinkin' I could move me (something missing here) Mildred was not a lady to take a compliment easily. (I found the missing piece further down in the story.)
hair about t' cover it."How do we get outta here?" she said, abruptly changing the subject.
Gladys (was there) sat opposite her husband in the sitting room.
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I love the idea of driving the vice admiral insane. Can't wait to see the plan in action. Noticed a few things:
your coats and satchels(.)"
as he took out (a) pair of surgical gloves
Not sure what happened with this chapter. Formatting gremlins? I were thinkin' I could move me (something missing here) Mildred was not a lady to take a compliment easily. (I found the missing piece further down in the story.)
hair about t' cover it."How do we get outta here?" she said, abruptly changing the subject.
Gladys (was there) sat opposite her husband in the sitting room.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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HI Rhonda, yes, I've just had a look, it's a shambles! Goodness knows how that happened. No one could possibly make sense out of it. I've removed the whole thing and replaced it with my MS Copy, so it reads properly now. I'm so cross, it was perfect for the first three reviews, and then it decided to jump around. Sorry about that. Sandra xxx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Good Veronica and Gladys met up. Now the plan can be put in motion. I'm glad.
The following morning, I walked (YEAH!!!!!!)
"S'possin' I's don't have the bandage? I were thinkin' I could move me Mildred was not a lady to take a compliment easily. She turned away, but not before I saw the colour creep into her face. " (This confused me. Is some thing missing or am just not reading right?)
"Mildred! There you are, I've been worried. Are you alright?" Tommy rushed over as we walked out of the second corridor and into the draper's shop. He grabbed hold of Mildred's arm and immediately held the oxygen mask over her mouth and nose for a moment, and even though she didn't need it and struggled against it, he held it there until he was sure she was alright. "Come along, let's get out of here."
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We spent the next half an hour telling James our ghosting ideas, and then to our absolute astonishment and surprise, he came up with a few ideas of his own. Now we had a viable plan, I couldn't wait to get started.
A few minutes later, no one would know anything had happened to Mildred. A few hairgrips held her hair nicely in place. She stood in front of the mirror and smiled. "Lookin' good!"
James frowned as he considered it. Chewing his bottom lip, with his eyes set squarely on Mildred's head, we watched his expression change as he suddenly came to a decision. "I'll spray a strong antiseptic over the area. Then once it's dry, you can rearrange your hair."
hair about t' cover it."How do we get outta here?" she said, abruptly changing the subject. (back and forth here??? Are we in the past or present???)
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Good Veronica and Gladys met up. Now the plan can be put in motion. I'm glad.
The following morning, I walked (YEAH!!!!!!)
"S'possin' I's don't have the bandage? I were thinkin' I could move me Mildred was not a lady to take a compliment easily. She turned away, but not before I saw the colour creep into her face. " (This confused me. Is some thing missing or am just not reading right?)
"Mildred! There you are, I've been worried. Are you alright?" Tommy rushed over as we walked out of the second corridor and into the draper's shop. He grabbed hold of Mildred's arm and immediately held the oxygen mask over her mouth and nose for a moment, and even though she didn't need it and struggled against it, he held it there until he was sure she was alright. "Come along, let's get out of here."
*****
We spent the next half an hour telling James our ghosting ideas, and then to our absolute astonishment and surprise, he came up with a few ideas of his own. Now we had a viable plan, I couldn't wait to get started.
A few minutes later, no one would know anything had happened to Mildred. A few hairgrips held her hair nicely in place. She stood in front of the mirror and smiled. "Lookin' good!"
James frowned as he considered it. Chewing his bottom lip, with his eyes set squarely on Mildred's head, we watched his expression change as he suddenly came to a decision. "I'll spray a strong antiseptic over the area. Then once it's dry, you can rearrange your hair."
hair about t' cover it."How do we get outta here?" she said, abruptly changing the subject. (back and forth here??? Are we in the past or present???)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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what an absolute mess, Barbara, somehow it jumped all over the place after I made one correction. Saved it and didn't check it again. I had to take it all off and put a new MS Word copy on. It read fine now, or at least it did when I just looked at it. I'm going to be paranoid now. Thanks for pointing it all out and for at least trying to read it. :( Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Shirley McLain
Very good chapter. Kept me reading until the end with all the activity. I like that you seem to be able to move you time travelers very smoothly. I didn't see a thing to change. Have a great evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Very good chapter. Kept me reading until the end with all the activity. I like that you seem to be able to move you time travelers very smoothly. I didn't see a thing to change. Have a great evening. Shirley
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much, Shirley, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xx
Comment from royowen
After successfully covering up Mildred's wound, with its sutures, he gives it a spray with strong antiseptic, and before ypu know it, they're transported back to the WW1 hospital, and after searching for Gladys in the hospital, she goes to the Admiral's home, and there she Veronica will tell her the plan for driving the admiral potty. Well done, Sandra, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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After successfully covering up Mildred's wound, with its sutures, he gives it a spray with strong antiseptic, and before ypu know it, they're transported back to the WW1 hospital, and after searching for Gladys in the hospital, she goes to the Admiral's home, and there she Veronica will tell her the plan for driving the admiral potty. Well done, Sandra, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much, Roy, for another lovely review. I hope it was readable when you looked at it, because something went very wrong and all the paragraphs moved all over the place. I'm so upset about it. But I've put it right now. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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I did notice that Sandra, I though that someone had pointed it out
Comment from SLMorrical
Them spooking the Vice Admiral at home and about would be a wonderful thing to do. The thing with the bandage and trying to hide it because of past/present or future. The problem with time travel. Gladys should agree to help them spooking the Vice Admiral. He is mean. This is a wonderful addition to the story. Look forward to see what Galdys says about the spooking of her husband. Good job. I am enjoying the story even with the time traveling which at times does confuse me. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Them spooking the Vice Admiral at home and about would be a wonderful thing to do. The thing with the bandage and trying to hide it because of past/present or future. The problem with time travel. Gladys should agree to help them spooking the Vice Admiral. He is mean. This is a wonderful addition to the story. Look forward to see what Galdys says about the spooking of her husband. Good job. I am enjoying the story even with the time traveling which at times does confuse me. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much, Sandra, for the lovely review. I don't know if you found any gremlins when you read it, because later reviews found the text had jumped all over the page and it was unreadable. I have no idea what happened. If it was alright when you read it, I'll be very relieved to hear it. Big hugs, my friend, Sandra. xx
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, another wonderful chapter and the plot thickens. I hope Gladys will go along with the plan.But I cannot see why not. Just found some minor things.
I took a tentative sip of thescolding liquid, = I took a tentative sip of the scolding liquid,
She'll know when toe-rag of a husband will be working at home." = She'll know when her toe-rag of a ....
"I've been usingme noddle, as well. = "I've been using me noddle. as well.
"There's gotta be somethin' in that hole inme head after all!" "... in that hole in me head after all"
Anymore chat was put on hold as Michael chargedin to the kitchen, = ... as Michael charged in to the kitchen,
A big hug. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Hi Sandra, another wonderful chapter and the plot thickens. I hope Gladys will go along with the plan.But I cannot see why not. Just found some minor things.
I took a tentative sip of thescolding liquid, = I took a tentative sip of the scolding liquid,
She'll know when toe-rag of a husband will be working at home." = She'll know when her toe-rag of a ....
"I've been usingme noddle, as well. = "I've been using me noddle. as well.
"There's gotta be somethin' in that hole inme head after all!" "... in that hole in me head after all"
Anymore chat was put on hold as Michael chargedin to the kitchen, = ... as Michael charged in to the kitchen,
A big hug. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Hi Ulla, what can I say, that bloody gremlin messed it up again! Thank you so much for letting me know, I've put them all right now. I think it happened when I changed the font size from 12 to 14. I'll remember to double check in future. Thank you so very much for the six stars, I didn't expect one today! That was so kind of you, my friend. Yes, Gladys is bound to agree, (she has to do as I tell her!!) lol. Thank you again, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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Of course you deseved a six,!! Those were minor things. Typing errors. xxx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Oh, that would be such fun to drive him insane. Makes me almost wish I were a ghost. When I am a ghost, I'm going to fly over to England and haunt you. I'll need your address so I can find you. :)
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Oh, that would be such fun to drive him insane. Makes me almost wish I were a ghost. When I am a ghost, I'm going to fly over to England and haunt you. I'll need your address so I can find you. :)
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Yes, I'm going to have fun with that part, I do like to spook people, I know after I've passed over, there are a few I'll be coming back to spook! I don't think you will be able to upset me, Phyllis, I'll probably tell you to wait there till I can join you, this is if you go before me!! You never know these things. lol. Thank you for the lovely, threatening review, my friend. :)) xxxx