Comment from RGstar

Excellent

I guess I am not much help to you here, Sandra, being away so much and not in the motion of following, but I always enjoy whatever you write, especially the brains behind the first book of this, in which this follows, and as far as I can see, your writing holds quality, for such can one not lose.
Keep on.
My best wishes, dear author.
RG

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

Aww, thank you so much, RG, that is so nice of you to say that. I'm not sure about the brains, though! But I always value anything you say, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from rwilliam

Exceptional

"Dad! Yer back!" Daveth came running up to his father and threw his arms around his waist. --should it be 'Da' or "Dad"? I ask only because a few sentences later he says 'da'. :-)

Great chapter. I was curious, when she came back this time what form was she in? Was she a child or adult? Sorry if I missed something. :-)

This is a fun read and I am enjoying it very much! Thank you for sharing your creativity with us. :-)

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

I've read that line a dozen or more times and still it didn't register! Thank you so much, I've changed it to Da.

She's herself but in a spirit form of sorts. She's just been sent back again, but for some reason, she doesn't know about, Daveth and Joe, and the albino boy can somehow see her. I had to make this book very different to the last one. So, the reason this is happening is that 'the powers that be' messed up big time and they need Veronica to put it right even though they really shouldn't get a mortal involved. I'm having a lot of fun with this one. She has a lot to sort out but it will all become a lot clearer soon. :)

Thank you so very much, Rebecca, for the wonderful 6 stars, and for all the support you are giving me. I really apprecate it. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Exceptional

I thought that so funny, the image of her puckering up to kiss her son and seeing Joe there in his place. (Cute picture!)Now that she is back with Joe and Daveth maybe they can get something done. After Joe's wife stops ragging him! LOL Can't blame her though. Well done dear. Nancy

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

Thank you so very much, my dear friend, for the lovely 6 stars!! I'm glad you liked that. I've been told to try and get a visual picture of what you want to happen, and then try and write it. That scenario wasn't hard to picture, it's the type of thing that might happen in everyday life. Not that your child would change into a man! LOL, but puckering up to get a kiss and the person moves away not realising the lips were waiting! LOL. did that explanation come across right??? LOL :) Oh, dear, I'm having fun with this one, it takes me right out of the real world and puts me in a fun place.

Your western has stopped again, you should bring it out and dust it off and continue it. You must be quite a way through it now.

Thanks again, my friend. It's nearly my bedtime, so I'll say good night. Big hugs. Sandra xxxx

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

I've somehow missed this entire story I guess. It has quite a unique ending so I may have to cull out some time to skim through the story that led to this.

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

Hi Bill, thank you for dropping in, I like it when I get people intrigued! You have to know, this story is going to be one of the all time greats!!! LOL! Nice to see you, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Very nice instalment.

It was then that Joe saw me and backed away. "Can me da' see yeh?" he whispered - should this be Daveth rather than Joe?

"She's givin' me da' wot-for. - not totally sure here but this could be wot-fer as they don't pronounce for as such.

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

Hi G, thank you so much, my friend. I changed Joe to Daveth last night, I'd better go and see whats happened and change the for to fer, well spotted! So glad you liked this part. Thanks again! :) sandra xx

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hello, :) (Almost called you Veronica, LOL!)

Good writing:
He towered over me, so I guessed him to be at least as tall as my James, and his rugged looks certainly weren't unappealing.

I found a typo:
I smiled when I saw he still had on the same clothes he'd worn the last time we met, but they were clean, and he'd (he) washed his face.

Take care

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

Thank you so much, Rasmine, for your lovely review and for finding the error. I liked that you were going to call me Veronica, she must come through real enough for you to have thought that! LOL. I wish I could time travel I'd have loads of fun! :) Sandra xxxx

Comment from write hand blue

Exceptional

Hi Sandra, hope your brother is well and that you have enjoyed your holiday in spite of the scare.

A fluent introduction as the reader gets back into the next episode. It may be of interest to note that it took just two lines. Written in your own natural and engaging style. The reader feels there, in that Victorian environment watching a family in strange circumstances.

I wonder if Lancashire dialect is any different because we would say something like:- "We're off t' wreck t' play." But I guess we have to consider the wider audience when we write and you do a fine job, my friend.

Best wishes. ~Mel~ xxxx

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

Thank you so very much, Mel, for the 6 stars! That is so nice of you.

I think with dialect, most written down dialects look the same, but the different counties pronounce them differently. My mother-in-law was real London cockney, and if I wrote it the way she spoke, it would look the same as my Cornish Mildred and your Lancashire dialect. My own is very sing-song, I was born and grew up in Suffolk. I've almost lost the accent now though. I do love to listen to how people speak, it's fascinating to try and guess where they're from. The only accent I cannot understand and wouldn't even try to write down is the northern dialect.

You really made my day by saying I'm doing a good job, thank you so very much, my friend. :) Sandra xxxx

reply by write hand blue on 05-Oct-2017

My pleasure. XX

Comment from apky

Exceptional

Great to have the two meet at last.
Which also made me happy that Joe at last came back to Daveth and his mother.

"It's not me mam I'm thinkin' of, it's me da'. He's in fer it good'n proper." ~ this made me laugh so hard!

All in all, Sandra, a beautifully written and wonderful story.

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

Thank you so very much for the lovely review and the 6 wonderful stars, my friend. I'm so pleased you are enjoying my story. I have been to look at your profile and see you have written loads of books. The series you have been writing for a while now, have you published any? If you have, I'd like to start reading them. I like to start from the beginning when the same characters are in them. I'm hoping to do the same with Veronica and Mildred. Although Mildred is getting on a bit now! If you haven't published them, you will have to tell me where to start in your profile. I whizz through books once I get my teeth in them. :) Thank you again, my friend, for reading mine. I feel so honoured. :) Sandra x

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

As I don't get to read as often as I would like, and have no
catch-up time to spare, I have to admit, the story has enough
past in to keep me in the know... I love the time travel and the
characters involved in the making of the story...
Keep em coming... I will read when I can, its always a delight.
:-) Carolyn

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

Thank you so much, Carolyn, for stopping by again and reading my book. I really appreciate it. I'm so glad you like it. :) Sandra xx

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Sandra

= Great chapter. Really enjoyed the read.
= I love reading dialect. It makes the story more authentic, and you do it very well.
= Poor Veronica, she has to get tired with all her traveling here, there, and yonder!

Cheers, J (*<*)

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

Aw, thanks Jackie, that is so nice of you to say so. I'm so pleased you are back and writing again, you've had a hard time of it. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx