Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "haiku (sugar cotton clouds)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
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Comment from Sis Cat
Gypsy, this is a sweet cloud haiku that reminds me of one by Billy Collins:
In the summer sky
a cloud with its mouth open
eats a smaller cloud.
Clouds have been the subjects of inspiration for poets for ages, and you have done an exceptional job here. Your poem is imaginative and dream-like. Alliteration of S, C, and M enhanced the smoothness of the read. Your poem refreshes me on a cloudless day. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Gypsy, this is a sweet cloud haiku that reminds me of one by Billy Collins:
In the summer sky
a cloud with its mouth open
eats a smaller cloud.
Clouds have been the subjects of inspiration for poets for ages, and you have done an exceptional job here. Your poem is imaginative and dream-like. Alliteration of S, C, and M enhanced the smoothness of the read. Your poem refreshes me on a cloudless day. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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thank you very much for your review and kind words
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
You always write the nicest poems.
This one is wonderful to read.
I'm sorry for your depression.
I'll pray for you that it will end.
Kat
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
You always write the nicest poems.
This one is wonderful to read.
I'm sorry for your depression.
I'll pray for you that it will end.
Kat
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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thank you very much for your review and kind words
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You're very welcome. I'll be watching for more of your work. Kat
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Gypsy
This Haiku poem was truly wonderful, a sweet density of sound, flowered with gorgeous imagery, and an earthly connection that marries heart and mind.
The voice is soft and peaceful and just pulls me in with my arms wide open.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Hi Gypsy
This Haiku poem was truly wonderful, a sweet density of sound, flowered with gorgeous imagery, and an earthly connection that marries heart and mind.
The voice is soft and peaceful and just pulls me in with my arms wide open.
Mitchell
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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thank you very much for your review and kind words
Comment from TAB_that's me
I love the imagery in those slow moving sugar cotton clouds:) The use of sojourn in the last line is also good. Nice satori and overall picture painted.
teresa
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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I love the imagery in those slow moving sugar cotton clouds:) The use of sojourn in the last line is also good. Nice satori and overall picture painted.
teresa
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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thank you very much for your review and kind words
Comment from Hitcher
This is a cool little haiku friend, the visuals conjured up in the mind's eye are delightful... you know New Zealand's Maori name it Aotearoa which means - The land of the long white cloud.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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This is a cool little haiku friend, the visuals conjured up in the mind's eye are delightful... you know New Zealand's Maori name it Aotearoa which means - The land of the long white cloud.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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thank you very much for your review and kind words
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm sorry you are feeling depressed, Gypsy, it's the worst feeling in the world. I've only had a serious bout once, and that was enough. I love your haiku, my friend, I love the sweet cotton clouds and the molasses, they make for a wonderful haiku. I hope you feel better soon. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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I'm sorry you are feeling depressed, Gypsy, it's the worst feeling in the world. I've only had a serious bout once, and that was enough. I love your haiku, my friend, I love the sweet cotton clouds and the molasses, they make for a wonderful haiku. I hope you feel better soon. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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thank you very much for your review and kind words
Comment from apky
Just my luck here - I just read Tom Bowling's whatsommacallit with gravity and the universe, so my head is still working out how stupid I am. Then the next post in my inbox is yours, MariVal. A haiku.
Clouds and sweet sojourn, when Tom just gave me some travelling universe with gravity? I think I'll rest my case for this evening, dearest.
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Just my luck here - I just read Tom Bowling's whatsommacallit with gravity and the universe, so my head is still working out how stupid I am. Then the next post in my inbox is yours, MariVal. A haiku.
Clouds and sweet sojourn, when Tom just gave me some travelling universe with gravity? I think I'll rest my case for this evening, dearest.
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh yes, perfectly done and I can imagine the clouds that you describe. With the words of descripton and the words of action, making them the slow moving fantasy
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Oh yes, perfectly done and I can imagine the clouds that you describe. With the words of descripton and the words of action, making them the slow moving fantasy
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
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thank you very much for your review and kind words
