Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Haiku (unrelenting heat)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
37 total reviews
Comment from BOO ghost
What a breath taken spiritualistic scene. The sun provides the thermal heat for this solar system to exist. Is true, the scorching heat is a killer here in the south. SOL, abbreviation for solar? Solar bursts can warm the atmosphere up when it arrives. Nice take on this theme. Good luck, gypsy queen! BOO-outrageous!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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What a breath taken spiritualistic scene. The sun provides the thermal heat for this solar system to exist. Is true, the scorching heat is a killer here in the south. SOL, abbreviation for solar? Solar bursts can warm the atmosphere up when it arrives. Nice take on this theme. Good luck, gypsy queen! BOO-outrageous!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Sol means Sun in Spanish and in Latin.
Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy hugs
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OK, Senorita.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very clever play on words. You couldn't have written this better. The picture of the setting sun looks exactly like one of our Florida sunsets. I start to sweat just looking at it and reading your poem.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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A very clever play on words. You couldn't have written this better. The picture of the setting sun looks exactly like one of our Florida sunsets. I start to sweat just looking at it and reading your poem.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I like the play on words here with isolation as the Satori. Lovely haiku, Gypsy, with a stunning picture. I am really enjoying the haiku challenges and I hope this one is as big a success as the first one, Giddy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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I like the play on words here with isolation as the Satori. Lovely haiku, Gypsy, with a stunning picture. I am really enjoying the haiku challenges and I hope this one is as big a success as the first one, Giddy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Gypsy;
-what a particularly inventive and creative way of monitoring that he and explaining it so well is in your satori by italicizing the letters SOL in the word isolation. This makes an excellent satori which gives your haiku that aha moment and that excitement of spontaneity and also is reflective of the conceptual theme of your haiku.
-Of course, your first two lines are grammatically interconnected which sets up the satori perfectly as they both go hand-in-hand.
-The picture used is supportive and appropriate in defining the conceptual theme of your poem and also creating an image that is relative to your idea.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Cheers, Gypsy;
-what a particularly inventive and creative way of monitoring that he and explaining it so well is in your satori by italicizing the letters SOL in the word isolation. This makes an excellent satori which gives your haiku that aha moment and that excitement of spontaneity and also is reflective of the conceptual theme of your haiku.
-Of course, your first two lines are grammatically interconnected which sets up the satori perfectly as they both go hand-in-hand.
-The picture used is supportive and appropriate in defining the conceptual theme of your poem and also creating an image that is relative to your idea.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Like being in solitary confinement I have found. Excellent season-summer, excellent interconnecting lines of what it does and why, then the last line of 'Yes!".Love it
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Like being in solitary confinement I have found. Excellent season-summer, excellent interconnecting lines of what it does and why, then the last line of 'Yes!".Love it
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from DR DIP
Cute little play on isolating those letters to either infer the sun as in solar or sole as in alone either way its a fine little write thank you for sharing your Sun haiku Gypsy in your very own challenge
dip
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Cute little play on isolating those letters to either infer the sun as in solar or sole as in alone either way its a fine little write thank you for sharing your Sun haiku Gypsy in your very own challenge
dip
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
What a marvellous look at the short form haiku, the condensation suits it very well, I like the ambiguity of thought, keeping from the discomfort, and relief that the indoors brings, well done, Gypsy, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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What a marvellous look at the short form haiku, the condensation suits it very well, I like the ambiguity of thought, keeping from the discomfort, and relief that the indoors brings, well done, Gypsy, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words my friend.
Gypsy
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Most welcome Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Gypsy really good,
like how you said in your haiku about summer heat that' not letting up, finally we end up isolated in our own home.
Gert
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Hello Gypsy really good,
like how you said in your haiku about summer heat that' not letting up, finally we end up isolated in our own home.
Gert
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you very much, my friend :) have a nice day
gypsy
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Hi Gypsy you are welcome
Gert
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
You've penned a good one!
The words of this poem speak the absolute truth. I'm in Mississippi, and it is HOT!
Great artwork. The words of this poem describe the picture. The background selected goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
Thanks for sharing your Haiku.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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You've penned a good one!
The words of this poem speak the absolute truth. I'm in Mississippi, and it is HOT!
Great artwork. The words of this poem describe the picture. The background selected goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
Thanks for sharing your Haiku.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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thank you very much, my friend :) have a nice day
gypsy
Comment from Sasha
EXcellent work with this and one I can personally relate to. I don't go outside between the hours of 11 and 5 because of the horrific heat. Very clever satori using the word Sol. I enjoyed this one immensely and congratulations on the book. A lot of work went into it and I wish you all, all the best with it too.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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EXcellent work with this and one I can personally relate to. I don't go outside between the hours of 11 and 5 because of the horrific heat. Very clever satori using the word Sol. I enjoyed this one immensely and congratulations on the book. A lot of work went into it and I wish you all, all the best with it too.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Sasha, I appreciate your kind review.
gypsy
