My Babies
free verse love poem65 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
Ahhh. . .love of children.
As babies they enchant us
as toddlers delight and amaze us -
All too soon the progress
coalesce
... becoming their destiny's vessel
In leaps and bounds
comes the distance -
culmination -
empty nest and memories
of wiggling toes
fledglings first steps
pubescent giggling
and bitter sweet tears.
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A truly love submission for the Love Poetry Contest Teresa :-)
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Ahhh. . .love of children.
As babies they enchant us
as toddlers delight and amaze us -
All too soon the progress
coalesce
... becoming their destiny's vessel
In leaps and bounds
comes the distance -
culmination -
empty nest and memories
of wiggling toes
fledglings first steps
pubescent giggling
and bitter sweet tears.
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A truly love submission for the Love Poetry Contest Teresa :-)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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A lovely poetic review:) - thanks.
Comment from Janet Foor
This is an adorable picture Teresa.
Beautiful poem.
They do grow up fast and soon they have babies of there own.
Each line made me smile.
Well down.
Janet
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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This is an adorable picture Teresa.
Beautiful poem.
They do grow up fast and soon they have babies of there own.
Each line made me smile.
Well down.
Janet
Comment Written 19-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Thank you Janet:)
Comment from mfowler
For some reason, I found it hard to imagine being a grandparent even when my kids were grown. The cycle of family expansion just seemed to go too fast for it too be real. Your sweetly nostalgic free verse expresses that cycle of growth so very well by making it really personal and highlighting the small things, the wriggling toes, and the quick phases of growth, the sports. Really touched a nostalgic nerve with me.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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For some reason, I found it hard to imagine being a grandparent even when my kids were grown. The cycle of family expansion just seemed to go too fast for it too be real. Your sweetly nostalgic free verse expresses that cycle of growth so very well by making it really personal and highlighting the small things, the wriggling toes, and the quick phases of growth, the sports. Really touched a nostalgic nerve with me.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Life does cycle around quickly. Thank you Mark for the great review.
Comment from BOO ghost
Hum... love poem contest? What can more lovable than twin babies, unless? They are puppies, guppies or kittens. Better watch out for them. 6 years old, oh no! Now they can get around and grab things. BOO may coo, this don't make me baby blue. Watch out for that poop poop. yep, charming poem. Love must have something to do with it or they would never be born. Nice picture Tabb. BOO has to go, I am coo coo. I got six bottles of Gerber baby food. take that! BOO!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Hum... love poem contest? What can more lovable than twin babies, unless? They are puppies, guppies or kittens. Better watch out for them. 6 years old, oh no! Now they can get around and grab things. BOO may coo, this don't make me baby blue. Watch out for that poop poop. yep, charming poem. Love must have something to do with it or they would never be born. Nice picture Tabb. BOO has to go, I am coo coo. I got six bottles of Gerber baby food. take that! BOO!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Just don't go scary the babies - any of them and not my grandkids either - except the oldest ones (10 and 12) - they would love it:) Thanks my friend.
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10 -- AND 12 YEARS OLD, They are my favorite. get right on it! here comes BOO!
Comment from write hand blue
A Grandparents love for his/her twin grandchildren is obvious as we read. With a good description of life's cycle as one generation replaces the next.
A well written poem capturing moments in time...
~Mel~
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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A Grandparents love for his/her twin grandchildren is obvious as we read. With a good description of life's cycle as one generation replaces the next.
A well written poem capturing moments in time...
~Mel~
Comment Written 19-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Thank you Mel:)
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Teresa. Beautiful work, mate. Such a cute picture deserves a gentle little piece like this one. I have a two year old grandson and he's the funniest little bloke I've ever known, such a joy.
A great contest entry and I wish you luck.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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G'day Teresa. Beautiful work, mate. Such a cute picture deserves a gentle little piece like this one. I have a two year old grandson and he's the funniest little bloke I've ever known, such a joy.
A great contest entry and I wish you luck.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 19-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Thank you Fez:)
Comment from Mary Wakeford
A sweet dedication to the days we all loved but were so dog tired by the time we got them to bed, it is a wonder they weren't all only children, as in one and done!
I love the reminiscing of familiar but far off references, my youngest now being nearly 23. I have no idea where the time went. Nice sentiment and read.
My only suggestion would be a different word for the but in"
but forever in my heart...I got caught up on that one line with regard to flow.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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A sweet dedication to the days we all loved but were so dog tired by the time we got them to bed, it is a wonder they weren't all only children, as in one and done!
I love the reminiscing of familiar but far off references, my youngest now being nearly 23. I have no idea where the time went. Nice sentiment and read.
My only suggestion would be a different word for the but in"
but forever in my heart...I got caught up on that one line with regard to flow.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Thank you Mary - I'll have a look at that part:)
Comment from joannakruk
What a superb piece that expresses the never-ending cycle of life. Time is unstoppable, change the only constant. With time we take on developing personas, from children we become parents, to become grandparents. Life perpetually evolves and your gorgeous poem represents that inevitable growth.
Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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What a superb piece that expresses the never-ending cycle of life. Time is unstoppable, change the only constant. With time we take on developing personas, from children we become parents, to become grandparents. Life perpetually evolves and your gorgeous poem represents that inevitable growth.
Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Thank you Joanna:)
Comment from c_lucas
Grandparents are notorious for the bias they show their grandchildren. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Grandparents are notorious for the bias they show their grandchildren. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Thank you Charlie:)
Comment from MelB
Hi Teresa, I can see why you're in love with them. They're adorable! I bet you have a great deal of fun with them and at 6 years old, they must be very active and busy!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Hi Teresa, I can see why you're in love with them. They're adorable! I bet you have a great deal of fun with them and at 6 years old, they must be very active and busy!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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They are definitely active and busy little boys:) Thanks so much.
