Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Nothing wrong with this poem. Made me look for the bee. The thing must have flew in my room last night too. LOL . Good one Sankey. I saw nothing wrong. I have gotten the hang to the down-under jive.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016

hehe you are funny bro. Thanks for coming along and your lovely review.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Cute and who am I to say anything about the difference in area phonetics. lol
I always said I speak two languages, English and bad English. This was very cute.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks Barb need to get back to your stuff again. Glad my writer's block is over.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

great photo accompanying your fun verse and great authors notes explaining your rhyme scheme to those Americans who have a weird way to pronunciate. thanks for sharing

dip

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks Doc. have we met before? Not sure. Work on it, as I get time.

reply by DR DIP on 22-Apr-2016

from cronulla in sydney

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016

Ok haven't been to Cronulla probably for 50 something years. Good to have another Aussie on board.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

The last time I remember a dream was decades ago. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks Bro Good old Jax Franklin gave me a truck load of stuff to fix I will get on that and let folks know when it is done.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is so true, I hate to wake in the middle of the night with something bothering me. The bees in my bonnet is a phrase my hubby and I had to use on our respective mothers as at one point the were trying to tell s how to live our lives. We had to tell them, they would be welcome in our home as long as they got the bees out of their bonnets and quit trying tell how to live out lives. Patricia

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

AMEN Sis thanks for coming by. Yes Louise's folks took 3 years to accept our marriage, I know what you mean!

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Geoff

= Nice to see you pop up writing again.
= Fun poem with hilarious artwork.

=SPAG=
<> A Friend said==is a dialogue tag, so need to correct punctuation.
<> Upper case after tag.
=YOURS= A friend said "sleep's overrated!"
=SUGGEST= A friend said, "Sleep's overrated!"

<> Since =dated= is not a speaking part, I suggest using italics without the quotation marks, so it doesn't throw the reader off.
= Perhaps we could say even "dated"

<> To me, this reads like one complete sentence.
How long has it been
Since a dream was your scene
And your sheep counting effort was sated[.](?)

=::= A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside Down! =::=
Jacqueline M Franklin (*_*)

=::= Feel free to visit my profile on Amazon.com =::=
amazon.com/author/jacquelinefranklin

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks mate gotta give this a six for reviewing he he. You are the most detailed of all will work on your suggestions.

reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 22-Apr-2016

= Always easier to spot someone else's boo boos.
= After reading my own for a gazillionth time, I just stop seeing them. (*<*)

Comment from Kazzawin

Excellent

Lovely lilting Limerick about insomnia.......now there's a thought!

Funny and entertaining. Love the take on sleep being overrated and dated.

Made me chuckle. By the way, where I come from in the UK morn and dawn rhyme too!

Cracking little read : )

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks friend I knew there was some "Old Dart" folks out there too hehe. Thanks for the lovely review. Not sure we have met before hope to look for your stuff.

reply by Kazzawin on 22-Apr-2016

Hi,
thanks for your reply....write a bit of poetry and short stories, please check them out if you feel inclined. I always appreciate others opinions : )

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

Very funny indeed. I enjoyed your liberal use and abuse of the english language. Hey!, if we poets cannot have liberties with the language then whats this world comming to?

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

AMEN Friend you got that right. Trouble is we do have our perfectionists in FS we have to watch out for hehe. Appreciate the lovely review. I didn't specify humour as I was not sure. I do most of my stuff in Limerick style. ha.

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

I relate to the subject. Sleep is all important to me. If I don't get it I'm a big grouch. The bee in the bonnet saying is here as well and so are some others, I.e. burr in his saddle, knot in his boxers, twist on her panties, and bat on her belfry

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks mate had a feeling you would relate. I just have to cover all bases especially with differences in accents and all.

reply by seaglass on 23-Apr-2016

Sayings and slang can be very different. I once met an Aussie and I was telling her about having a leg cramp. We call it a Charley-horse. She had never heard that phrase before. I read a book written over there that referred to chickens and choocks. That was new to me.

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016

Chickens and Chooks was that a term for something other than fowls or?

reply by seaglass on 23-Apr-2016

In the book I read by this author, it referred to hens.

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016

Yeah we do use the term chickens chooks. Hens are female of course and Roosters are the males. I think you know most of this anyhow. Thanks

reply by seaglass on 23-Apr-2016

I love to compare terms...here when we want more coffee, we ask for a 'refill" I think you say 'top up'? We have 'parking lots' while I believe you have "car parks."

reply by the author on 23-Apr-2016

most of those terms are interchangeable. Thanks for the insight.

Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

A humorous trek of poetic
words from down under that
is sure to bring a smile to
all who sometimes have, as
you say, a bee in their bonnet.
Well done

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks very much. Not sure we have met before will look for your stuff as I get time. Been in writer's block for awhile! Bleah!