When Blood Collides
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Comment from chasennov
See author notes. A chapter in the book When Blood Collides. A Demonic Ride.' Well, there you go! What a scary thing to do. I am afraid, I do never participate on those man-made contraptions. My engineering background does not allow me to trust anything man-made. Very well done.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016
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See author notes. A chapter in the book When Blood Collides. A Demonic Ride.' Well, there you go! What a scary thing to do. I am afraid, I do never participate on those man-made contraptions. My engineering background does not allow me to trust anything man-made. Very well done.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016
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Ha,ha. That's funny. It is scary that mishaps have occurred and people injured or killed.
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I concur.
Comment from Donya Quijote
I like roller coasters and those simulated rides, some are better than others.
Nits: wheel him through and through the entrance.... drop one through
While I (am or was) navigating ...
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016
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I like roller coasters and those simulated rides, some are better than others.
Nits: wheel him through and through the entrance.... drop one through
While I (am or was) navigating ...
Comment Written 25-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016
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Thanks for catching the nits. I like roller coasters if they're mini-sized. LOL
Comment from Bryana
This was well written about your scary
ride, I personally don't like them.
M y son had a very true comment. He was
a young man and one day he said..."I don't
understand why people take those scary
rides or go to a scary movie just to have
the hell scare out of them." He was right.
A little early but have a nice weekend.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
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This was well written about your scary
ride, I personally don't like them.
M y son had a very true comment. He was
a young man and one day he said..."I don't
understand why people take those scary
rides or go to a scary movie just to have
the hell scare out of them." He was right.
A little early but have a nice weekend.
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Comment Written 25-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2016
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I think Stephen King wrote a book or essay about why people loved to be scared. Hey, it gets our adrenalin going. :-)
Comment from Jay Squires
Great chapter with the simulated ride. Been there done that. Good hook for the next chapter.
Just one very odd sentence below:
All this while l navigating steep slopes and even falling out of the cart. [There's something wrong with this sentence: "While I NAVIGATED ? steep slopes and even FELL ? out of the cart.]
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016
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Great chapter with the simulated ride. Been there done that. Good hook for the next chapter.
Just one very odd sentence below:
All this while l navigating steep slopes and even falling out of the cart. [There's something wrong with this sentence: "While I NAVIGATED ? steep slopes and even FELL ? out of the cart.]
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Comment Written 25-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2016
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Thanks, Jay. I fixed my errors. Since I hadn't been to a theme park in over thirty years, I had no idea what a simulated ride is .Wish Jeff had told me!