saffron sunset rays
poem 5/7/550 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your 5-7-5 contest poem. Good job on the syllable count, and the use of alliteration. The picture is awesome. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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I enjoyed your 5-7-5 contest poem. Good job on the syllable count, and the use of alliteration. The picture is awesome. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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And thank you for reading and the critique Zanya
Comment from judester
This is great. Saffron rays describe these sunsets perfectly.Just one of the colors on that palette.Emblazon describes the event vividly. Bravo, judester
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This is great. Saffron rays describe these sunsets perfectly.Just one of the colors on that palette.Emblazon describes the event vividly. Bravo, judester
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
Comment from Kaydoe
So well written 5-7-5 poem. Each word chosen leaves one with a strong image and then when they're put together, one has a picture of a gorgeous sunset. The picture adds to it, but one could imagine the sunset without the picture, the verses are so nice.
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So well written 5-7-5 poem. Each word chosen leaves one with a strong image and then when they're put together, one has a picture of a gorgeous sunset. The picture adds to it, but one could imagine the sunset without the picture, the verses are so nice.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The first two line of this poem flow and connect well. The last line puts the poem together. The artwork is awesome and compliments the words
and theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Excellent Poem! The first two line of this poem flow and connect well. The last line puts the poem together. The artwork is awesome and compliments the words
and theme of this poem.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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And thanks for this encouraging review Zanya
Comment from nancyjam
This is a lovely entry in the 5-7-5 contest.
beautiful descriptive imagery gives the
reader a clear picture of the scene.
Good use of alliteration with "saffron/sunset" and "pristine palette.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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This is a lovely entry in the 5-7-5 contest.
beautiful descriptive imagery gives the
reader a clear picture of the scene.
Good use of alliteration with "saffron/sunset" and "pristine palette.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Great review thanks for reading and the critique Zanya
Comment from beizanten
Beautiful picture. Thanks I look up and learn a new word : saffron-an orange-yellow. It is describe sunset well. Interesting poem.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Beautiful picture. Thanks I look up and learn a new word : saffron-an orange-yellow. It is describe sunset well. Interesting poem.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thanks for reading and isn't this what it is all about -we learn something new every day on this site !! zanya
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very nice, Zanya. Your 5-7-5 is rife with alliteration. It reads more like haiku than 5-7-5 poetry to me, but it's still a very lovely and well expressed sentiment. It shows your true appreciation for the simple beauty found in nature.
Best of luck to you!
~Dean
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Very nice, Zanya. Your 5-7-5 is rife with alliteration. It reads more like haiku than 5-7-5 poetry to me, but it's still a very lovely and well expressed sentiment. It shows your true appreciation for the simple beauty found in nature.
Best of luck to you!
~Dean
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Yes isn't Nature a treasure trove ! Great comment 'rife with alliteration ' thanks for reading and the critique Zanya
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It's always a pleasure, Zanya.
~Dean :)
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It's always a pleasure, Zanya.
~Dean :)
Comment from Nika2016
Very pretty poem that speaks of the beauty of sunsets in the eyes of the beholder...elegant, yet whimsical....There is nothing needed to add or take away from the experience of the poem.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Very pretty poem that speaks of the beauty of sunsets in the eyes of the beholder...elegant, yet whimsical....There is nothing needed to add or take away from the experience of the poem.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Delighted with this critique thank you for reading Zanya
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a beautiful 5/7/5. Lines l and 2 interconnect well and line 3 makes a good satori. Lovely descriptive work with a good picture. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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This is a beautiful 5/7/5. Lines l and 2 interconnect well and line 3 makes a good satori. Lovely descriptive work with a good picture. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thanks for reading and the encouraging critique Zanya
Comment from rjuselius
Nice alliteration throughout! The poem itself is really a haiku in my humble opinion but just as well works as its self.
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Nice alliteration throughout! The poem itself is really a haiku in my humble opinion but just as well works as its self.
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thank you ffor reading and the critique Zanya