When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 73 "Unexplained Motives "A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Louise Michelle
Oh, man, this chapter left so many unanswered questions which I thought you were going to address. Oh, well, I guess I'll have to wait.
Your reasoning was too much, Shari. I'm sure you wrote the bit about your hair and earrings with tongue-in-cheek. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
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Oh, man, this chapter left so many unanswered questions which I thought you were going to address. Oh, well, I guess I'll have to wait.
Your reasoning was too much, Shari. I'm sure you wrote the bit about your hair and earrings with tongue-in-cheek. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
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I don't know. Barb was all for the natural look. When I pierced my ears, you would thought I had murdered someone! Only white trash does that. Not her words, but her thinking based on our upbringing. I suspect she'd really disapprove of the shade of red I'm into now-- think neon. :-)
Comment from Dean Kuch
"...especially since we had really buried the past the month after I lastsay (saw) her alive."--------"...saw her alive."
I doubt that you wanted to hear all of your younger sister's negative viewpoints concerning your mother, Shari. However, I'm also quite sure you felt obligated to at least give her the opportunity to explain why she felt the way she did towards her own mom, especially given the circumstances.
Yes, this was indeed a very short chapter. But one can tell from having followed this story that something is looming just over the horizon. Be it good, or bad, we will simply have to keep following along to find out.
Good "hook", and good writing, as usual.
Dean~~>
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
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"...especially since we had really buried the past the month after I last
I doubt that you wanted to hear all of your younger sister's negative viewpoints concerning your mother, Shari. However, I'm also quite sure you felt obligated to at least give her the opportunity to explain why she felt the way she did towards her own mom, especially given the circumstances.
Yes, this was indeed a very short chapter. But one can tell from having followed this story that something is looming just over the horizon. Be it good, or bad, we will simply have to keep following along to find out.
Good "hook", and good writing, as usual.
Dean~~>
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
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Thanks, Deano. Can't believe I overlooked that typo. I knew what bothered my sister because Mom and I discussed it, so I was only too happy to straighten her out if possible.
Comment from Realist101
Hi Shari! This works as a bridge to connect us to each chapter. Trouble is I need to get caught up. SO sorry...I've just been lost lately. Just in a bad place. As you know all too well...but oh! ONE nit. "I last sa(w)" in the last line of third para. Please forgive me for not keeping up? x.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
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Hi Shari! This works as a bridge to connect us to each chapter. Trouble is I need to get caught up. SO sorry...I've just been lost lately. Just in a bad place. As you know all too well...but oh! ONE nit. "I last sa(w)" in the last line of third para. Please forgive me for not keeping up? x.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2016
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No need to apologize, Sue. I find it hard to write and keep up with others too. I know you're in a bad place.
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I understand Shari! I know your circumstance too. I'm here if you need me. x
Comment from Domino 2
You know me and prose, Shari, but I thought I'd pop by.
'especially since we had really buried the past the month after I last say her alive' - doesn't make sense to me grammatically. Do you mean, 'buried the [hatchet]'? AND, '[SAW] her alive'?
Great progress in the three-way relationship, though perhaps a bit late.
Excellent ending of relief.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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You know me and prose, Shari, but I thought I'd pop by.
'especially since we had really buried the past the month after I last say her alive' - doesn't make sense to me grammatically. Do you mean, 'buried the [hatchet]'? AND, '[SAW] her alive'?
Great progress in the three-way relationship, though perhaps a bit late.
Excellent ending of relief.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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LOL
So many caught my typo. Of course, spelling check wouldn't catch it.
Hey, I made it short just for you.
Shari XX
Comment from Jay Squires
That is a striking photo of your sister. An interesting chapter, I can't believe they rejected your eulogy. It was enough you weren't allowed to attend.
especially since we had really buried the past the month after I last say her alive. [...last SAW ? her alive.]
You led us very adroitly right up to the door of the next chapter. I'll be looking forward to reading it.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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That is a striking photo of your sister. An interesting chapter, I can't believe they rejected your eulogy. It was enough you weren't allowed to attend.
especially since we had really buried the past the month after I last say her alive. [...last SAW ? her alive.]
You led us very adroitly right up to the door of the next chapter. I'll be looking forward to reading it.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Barbara was striking. She had those luminescent eyes for one thing and the hair is all hers, no dye or tint either.
Can you believe that stupid typo!
Thanks for staying with this, Jay. So hard to find time to write more than one a week! Too much on my plate.
Comment from I am Cat
Well, I"m reading from both ends it seems... LOL ;)
That's ok, I don't mind. ;)
I can figure it out. It reminds me to go back and do it. lol
I'm confused, but it helps me edit better:
we had really buried the past the month after I last sa(w) her alive.
see?
:)
As always, your writing just makes me want to read more! LOL
And so I will, but not until I sleep . ;) I had to catch it when I saw it come into my box though. Hugs to you
Cat
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2016
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Well, I"m reading from both ends it seems... LOL ;)
That's ok, I don't mind. ;)
I can figure it out. It reminds me to go back and do it. lol
I'm confused, but it helps me edit better:
we had really buried the past the month after I last sa(w) her alive.
see?
:)
As always, your writing just makes me want to read more! LOL
And so I will, but not until I sleep . ;) I had to catch it when I saw it come into my box though. Hugs to you
Cat
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2016
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Go catch up on your sleep. I just want to keep even with my reviews! :-)
Comment from Eigle Rull
She is a beautiful lady.
I usually copy and past errors here (if I find any). However, my mouse is not allowing it tonight. So, you wrote: , especially since we had really buried the past a month after I last say (saw) her alive.
This was a nice chapter with feelings and emotions pouring out. It set the stage for what is to come. I've enjoyed reading this entire post from beginning to this point. Thank you for sharing it. Best wishes to you, my friend.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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She is a beautiful lady.
I usually copy and past errors here (if I find any). However, my mouse is not allowing it tonight. So, you wrote: , especially since we had really buried the past a month after I last say (saw) her alive.
This was a nice chapter with feelings and emotions pouring out. It set the stage for what is to come. I've enjoyed reading this entire post from beginning to this point. Thank you for sharing it. Best wishes to you, my friend.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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I'm so glad you commented on her picture. She was a beauty.
Fixed the typo. Thanks, Eigle.
Comment from mfowler
I read this with heavy heart as I hate family situations when people's closest relatives are excised from critical moments in their lives over misgivings, true or false, from the distant part. Your story is redolent with a sense of regret and hurt from the way your obviously successful sister went about things. I can't believe you were excluded from the funeral and that students attended but not the sister. To have your eulogy supplanted by one pre-prepared seems incredible. On a personal note, I am about to attend a ten year memorial for my sister who died of cancer. When you mentioned the effects of steroids feelings about the distortion of her body and mind flipped into my mind. I hope you find this writing therapeutic. It's very well written, but gee it's gotta hurt.
One spag:
after I last say her alive... saw her
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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I read this with heavy heart as I hate family situations when people's closest relatives are excised from critical moments in their lives over misgivings, true or false, from the distant part. Your story is redolent with a sense of regret and hurt from the way your obviously successful sister went about things. I can't believe you were excluded from the funeral and that students attended but not the sister. To have your eulogy supplanted by one pre-prepared seems incredible. On a personal note, I am about to attend a ten year memorial for my sister who died of cancer. When you mentioned the effects of steroids feelings about the distortion of her body and mind flipped into my mind. I hope you find this writing therapeutic. It's very well written, but gee it's gotta hurt.
One spag:
after I last say her alive... saw her
Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Typo corrected, m. I posted this picture for the comparison of the next one taken a couple weeks before her death. The steroids put a lot of weight on her face. A ten year memorial. Wow. I've never heard of anyone doing that. Cancer's tough to beat. Were you close?
Barb had long ago distanced herself from the family, so I guess I should have expected it.
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We were very close. Just the two of us and close in age. The memorial will be more like a late wake rather than anything too formal. We did the same a year after she died and made this pact back then. I've got a 5,000 km round trip to drive before this is done. Nice chatting.
Comment from Curly Girly
Barb looked lovely.
Yes, this is probably true:
Yet, in her etiquette book, it would be the politically correct thing, no matter what.
Ouch! I can imagine this would be the case:
Although I heard two of my penned lines, it hurt that my eulogy was rejected, especially since we had really buried the past the month after I last SAW her alive.
One has to remember that Barb was already dead. Perhaps she would have liked to include more of your eulogy.
My Mother i/l also said that she didn't want a funeral, blah, blah. She got one.
Nicole
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Barb looked lovely.
Yes, this is probably true:
Yet, in her etiquette book, it would be the politically correct thing, no matter what.
Ouch! I can imagine this would be the case:
Although I heard two of my penned lines, it hurt that my eulogy was rejected, especially since we had really buried the past the month after I last SAW her alive.
One has to remember that Barb was already dead. Perhaps she would have liked to include more of your eulogy.
My Mother i/l also said that she didn't want a funeral, blah, blah. She got one.
Nicole
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Well, at least she knew I cared enough to write one. I can't believe my typo-- the spelling check would not catch that.
Are you working to publish your book?
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Yes, I'm still editing. I've only just started using Grammarly--I wish I had got on to it ages ago!
Nicole
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Better late than never. :-)
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
And a good bridge it is.
I know you must have felt devastated that Barbara did not want you at
her memorial. And Shari, personally that seems inexcusable to make you
stay away. Also, for your personal and heartfelt eulogy to be edited is bad enough, but to be cut to two lines is beyond belief. Sorry you had to endure that.
Well written, I admire that you don't mind telling all.
Carolyn
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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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And a good bridge it is.
I know you must have felt devastated that Barbara did not want you at
her memorial. And Shari, personally that seems inexcusable to make you
stay away. Also, for your personal and heartfelt eulogy to be edited is bad enough, but to be cut to two lines is beyond belief. Sorry you had to endure that.
Well written, I admire that you don't mind telling all.
Carolyn
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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It's all water over the bridge now. Anyway, I believe that things happen for a reason. Maybe going to the service would have been an unpleasant experience.
