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Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "I Will"poems inspired by Psalm 23
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Comment from happykat4
Beautifully done. The poem structure fulfills the styling of rondel poetry however, the words written deliver a strong message. We are to let His message shine through us which glorifies God. Never be ashamed. I believe this could be also become a hymn set to music. Bless you.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Beautifully done. The poem structure fulfills the styling of rondel poetry however, the words written deliver a strong message. We are to let His message shine through us which glorifies God. Never be ashamed. I believe this could be also become a hymn set to music. Bless you.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thank you for the wonderful extra star! I appreciate the kind comments about the writing and your insights on the message. Thank you for suggesting it could be a hymn. I don't write music, but maybe I can find someone who can. Happy 2016. Have a wonderful year.
Comment from johngie
Lovely. I hope you share this with your church. I really enjoyed the message you send out in your words. Thank you for letting us read this. Keep up the fine writing.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Lovely. I hope you share this with your church. I really enjoyed the message you send out in your words. Thank you for letting us read this. Keep up the fine writing.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Thank you for the very encouraging review. I am pleased you enjoyed the message and think it is good enough to share with those at my church. Your comments made my day. Thank you.
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine Rondel poem
written exactly to form
with perfect rhymes
and strong repeat lines
The message of letting ones light shine
of having confidence
and sharing the gift with others
comes through like a shining light
Excellent picture and presentation
Very well done
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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This is a fine Rondel poem
written exactly to form
with perfect rhymes
and strong repeat lines
The message of letting ones light shine
of having confidence
and sharing the gift with others
comes through like a shining light
Excellent picture and presentation
Very well done
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thank you for your comments about the form and presentation. I especially like your encouraging comments about the message and having confidence to share the gifts we receive. Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Happy 2016. Debi
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good to see a posting by you.
-Lovely image and thank you for the very helpful author notes.
-Format is excellent.
-I like the topic and the message: Always let the light shine.
-Good poem with excellent conclusion:
"Sing His praise, let joy ensue.
For my part in His design--
I will let my light so shine."
-Hope you have a very good 2016.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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-Good to see a posting by you.
-Lovely image and thank you for the very helpful author notes.
-Format is excellent.
-I like the topic and the message: Always let the light shine.
-Good poem with excellent conclusion:
"Sing His praise, let joy ensue.
For my part in His design--
I will let my light so shine."
-Hope you have a very good 2016.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thank you for the good wishes. I am pleased your like the image created and the author notes, as well as the formatting. Thank you for pointing out the part you liked best so I know what works.
Hopefully, more of Piper later this week. I just need time to post the chapters I have written.
You have a wonderful 2016 and I hope your light shines brightly all year. Debi
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You are very welcome for the good wishes and the review, and I appreciate your comments, in turn. Here's to 2016 and your light shining brightly, too.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I have always wanted to be a light unto the lord. It is important to set a good example so others will know about Gods Love. This is a very nicely done Rondel
Debi. You followed the rules and sent a wonderful message in so doing. xxx Nancy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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I have always wanted to be a light unto the lord. It is important to set a good example so others will know about Gods Love. This is a very nicely done Rondel
Debi. You followed the rules and sent a wonderful message in so doing. xxx Nancy
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thank you for the kind comments about the writing, Nancy. I appreciate your insights on the topic as well. May your light shine in 2016.
Comment from royowen
A wonderfully quoted scripture here dear friend, the depth of understanding and wisdom expounded in this lovely little gem of a poem, it is always so quotable, how often do we apply it, escaping from the activity in this world. to allow the light of Christ so shine. Well done, sweetly composed and expressed, in abba abab abbaa rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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A wonderfully quoted scripture here dear friend, the depth of understanding and wisdom expounded in this lovely little gem of a poem, it is always so quotable, how often do we apply it, escaping from the activity in this world. to allow the light of Christ so shine. Well done, sweetly composed and expressed, in abba abab abbaa rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thank you for such a kind comments about the writing, Roy. I appreciate you sharing your insights on the topic as well. May your light shine in 2016. Congratulations with your first place at poet of the year. Debi
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You too Debi,
Comment from Pantygynt
The rondel form here has been skilfully used to expand upon the biblica quotation from St. Matthew 5:14-16. I am particularly pleased to find you using the King James version. This was the version I was brought up under and to my mind no subsequent version has ever approached the beauty and power of its language. I have heard it said that it is full of inaccuracies like, "thou shalt not suffer a witch to live!" But since the whole thing is an exquisite piece of mythology who cares? Not me.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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The rondel form here has been skilfully used to expand upon the biblica quotation from St. Matthew 5:14-16. I am particularly pleased to find you using the King James version. This was the version I was brought up under and to my mind no subsequent version has ever approached the beauty and power of its language. I have heard it said that it is full of inaccuracies like, "thou shalt not suffer a witch to live!" But since the whole thing is an exquisite piece of mythology who cares? Not me.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. I appreciate your comments. I do like the King James version for its language as well. I think every interpretation will have inaccuracies. Some things just do not translate form one language to another or from one time to another. Thank you for the kind comments about the execution of the rondel form. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from Marykelly
You have successfully adhered to the format of a rondel and that takes discipline with words. The rhyme scheme is true to the rondel and the rhythm also works. Most significant though is the beautifully expressed message of being light.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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You have successfully adhered to the format of a rondel and that takes discipline with words. The rhyme scheme is true to the rondel and the rhythm also works. Most significant though is the beautifully expressed message of being light.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Hi Marykelly,
Thank you for the analysis of the writing and the theme. I am please you liked it. Thank you so much.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Debi,
Your Rondel poem conveys a strong message of
faith and really is a perfect reflection of the
scripture that you make reference to in your
author notes.
It seems to be a challenging form and you
excelled at it. I enjoyed your rhymes and
overall theme and beautiful presentation.
Thank you for sharing your light and talent
with us,
Linda
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Debi,
Your Rondel poem conveys a strong message of
faith and really is a perfect reflection of the
scripture that you make reference to in your
author notes.
It seems to be a challenging form and you
excelled at it. I enjoyed your rhymes and
overall theme and beautiful presentation.
Thank you for sharing your light and talent
with us,
Linda
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Hi Linda,
Thank you for the analysis and encouraging remarks about the topic and the writing. I did find the form a bit daunting. Happy 2016.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Your light truly is shining in your rondel poem. The use of Matthew 5:14-16 was a wise choice. Your words are profound. No corrections. Just inspiration.
Thank you for your poem.
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Your light truly is shining in your rondel poem. The use of Matthew 5:14-16 was a wise choice. Your words are profound. No corrections. Just inspiration.
Thank you for your poem.
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Comment Written 03-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2016
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by and comment on my writing. Happy 2016.