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A family's love is tested.
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Jay Squires
That is always a blow when a family member has cancer and is given a death sentence by the doctor.
. I saved my dollars to buy big items llike a drawing kit. [misspell "like"]
(which my parents really couldn't really afford) [Really should probably ditch one of the "really's"]
particularly for Mom and Dad's affections. [ Shouldn't it be "Mom's and Dad's affections."? I think so.]
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
Yea! I can count on you for a good proof read. Would you believe spell check missed "Mom's" but I think you're right anyway.
Shari xx
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Curly Girly
This was well written. No spags spotted. When you were young, you were very close. It is sad how time can change people. Popularity tends to come at a cost. It appears that Barb became quite self-absorbed, and the jealousy thing ruined a good sisterly relationship needlessly.
Nicole
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
Your analysis is spot on, Nicole. Thanks a bunch.
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