Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Some times what is perceived by somebody as recklessness is indeed courage. In some situations you simply have to take the risk. Well written story, as all of yours are, that contains plenty of high action and interest. Entertaining read.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thanks so much, Brett. Glad to have you aboard and reading this. You are a gentleman.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I had it figured out Doctrex would be around there for a long time. I can't see him getting out. Maybe you have a plan that you haven't shared with me. LOL I enjoyed reading this post.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

THanks, Barbara. I also hope Doctrex will be hanging tough. I'm glad you will be too and staying aboard.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Both Doctrex and Gilnot are strong characters - their conversation bouncing back and forward. Doctrex is shocked that Gilnot has had Zarbs executed.

You've still not revealed how Gilnot ended up in a wheelchair.

Gilnot has indicated Doctrex won't be there long - I hope he's not planning to have him executed too.


a few thousand loyalist soldiers were in readiness.(") - inverted commas


A great chapter, Jay.


Margaret

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Could have sworn I answered this. I know I took care of the quote mark. Thank you so much, Margaret.

Comment from lancellot

Exceptional

Very good. Without saying so, the reader can assume that the good master both insane and paranoid of losing power. That explains why his men live in constant fear. Perfect

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Good observation, Lance. I'm glad I was able to bring that off. It wasn't an easy chapter to write. It makes me feel special to get a 6 star from you for it.

Comment from justafan

Exceptional

WOW...a game of wits between two strong characters! I have to wonder if all is as it seems. You are such an amazing writer, Jay. I love how you strive to get your readers vested in the characters. Have me hooked :)

Always justafan,
Missy

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

I'm so gratified to have you hooked to this book. And to get a 6 star on top of everything else. I'm staggered. Or was that the wine? Hey, thanks, my dear friend.

reply by justafan on 28-Sep-2015

Not just the wine, but I'll have another if you please :)

reply by Anonymous Member on 28-Sep-2015

Not just the wine, but I'll have another if you please :)

reply by Anonymous Member on 28-Sep-2015

Not just the wine, but I'll have another if you please :)

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

This is the best chapter, by far, of those I've read, Jay. It was well-crafted, exciting, greatly illustrated with your pen so that the reader can see every movement the character's made, and very believable -- the characters COME TO LIFE HERE!

FABULOUS JOB -- kudos!!!

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

Thank you dear Robyn. When I receive a compliment from you, whom I so admire, I feel so gratified. Bless you, Robyn.

reply by robyn corum on 28-Sep-2015

hang on a sec. gotta roll my pants legs up... brb

reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

You can't roll up your pant legs high enough. I got an abundance here. Just keep your mouth and eyes closed.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Doctrex is learning a different side of his enemy. This is very well written with a smooth flor of words, making for a good read. There is very good imagery.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

You wanna see different, hang in there for about 5 more installments. You'll see different! Thanks, Charlie for your kind words.

reply by c_lucas on 28-Sep-2015

Will do, Jay. Charlie

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

A very effective portrait of the antagonist, and I assume the cause of his physical problems is significant enough to save for later revealing. The saying about sandpapering a lion's anus in a phone booth(hey, what's a phone booth?) comes to mind. Excellent chapter.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

I love your crits, Red. Thanks for reading. Yep, you're too much, in or outside a phone booth--you old Lion's butt, you!

Comment from madhatter1977

Excellent

Hi, Jay, I'm back on the site and although I haven't kept up-to-date with all of your story, I found the chapter very interesting, especially the detail of the hand gestures! Politicians beware!! The author notes have helped me understand the plot and I hope to keep up with the story. Best wishes, Pete :)

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

THanks, Pete. I know I thanked you earlier, probably for the other post. Hope you continue one with this post. You are a welcomed traveler. Let me know and I'll reserve your seat.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Jay

_ Doctrex will be rescued or he'll break out....right??
_ NOTHING can happen to my Doctrex---if so, I will hunt you down, Jay Squires! (*<*)
_ Good dialogue among enemies.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2015

THanks, Jax. One of those weird situations when I know I've answered this, but it comes back for perhaps a better response? Thanks, Jax. Glad you enjoyed this. I have the end in my sights, but it just keeps on extending itself in the middle.

reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 28-Sep-2015

- You can only end it IF you bring Doctrex back to fight another day. (*<*)
- That's my work and I'm sticking to it!
- I meant to let you know, but got sidetracked. You gave me a pump. Thank you, very kind man. (*>*)