Act Of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Comforter"Dawn Of Chaos
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Comment from Gloria ....
This is a wonderfully unique poetic style, TPAC. The grammatically incorrect I works like a charm in delivering the message of joy and complications of life.
Very, very neat. Thank you so much for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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This is a wonderfully unique poetic style, TPAC. The grammatically incorrect I works like a charm in delivering the message of joy and complications of life.
Very, very neat. Thank you so much for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2015
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Hopefully once pits are cleared a smoother presentation. Happy you saw beyond this fog. Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring thoughts.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Good. I found this poem hard to understand and difficult to read. Don't be upset it is probably more me than you. This must have been a hard piece to write and I admire your effort.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Good. I found this poem hard to understand and difficult to read. Don't be upset it is probably more me than you. This must have been a hard piece to write and I admire your effort.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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No problem alot of crossing conflictions illustrating uncertainties: then a decision. I probably missed the mark. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments about this write.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"I to be a bird high" seems to be missing a word. Well written poem that clearly depicts that all animals have special qualities that need to be seen, and not taken for granted. Just like, good can be found in most people. Uses terms like "I am for others righteous liberties" to better illustrate this theme.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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"I to be a bird high" seems to be missing a word. Well written poem that clearly depicts that all animals have special qualities that need to be seen, and not taken for granted. Just like, good can be found in most people. Uses terms like "I am for others righteous liberties" to better illustrate this theme.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Pits. I'm still picking them. Thanking you for generous rate and I will look into the smoothness of this write flow.
Comment from chryssy
The sentence I a lone worm flip wiggling in trying strides doesn't sound right when I read it. There is a couple more lines that throw me off like that to. It could be I'm just not used to reading like that. I am thinking maybe it is just the flip wiggling that throws me off. But a wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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The sentence I a lone worm flip wiggling in trying strides doesn't sound right when I read it. There is a couple more lines that throw me off like that to. It could be I'm just not used to reading like that. I am thinking maybe it is just the flip wiggling that throws me off. But a wonderful poem.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Glad you thought this work was wonderful. I loved the intent of the composition. Too generous in rate but I do welcome your thoughts
Comment from nancyrabbrose
It appears that you went to a lot of work to write that poem. The theme seems to be that we are all one. It contains hope, as well as empathy and understanding of others' attempts and trials.
Good work. You used your words wisely and with great economy.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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It appears that you went to a lot of work to write that poem. The theme seems to be that we are all one. It contains hope, as well as empathy and understanding of others' attempts and trials.
Good work. You used your words wisely and with great economy.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thanking you for inspiring encouragements about this work. I will hold your thoughts to heart.
Comment from Joyce Long
"I want to be something special" is very thought provoking. We all want to be something special. But, few of us are welling to look for something special in us. This little poem certainly opens the door to a multitude of possibilities. Some of the things, I wouldn't want to be. While others I couldn't expect to be.
"My true bell ringing forth from birth to wisdom" shows that we have a lifetime to reach our goal of being something special. Wisdom comes at different times and in different ways.
This poem is full of possibilities of a better life.
Well done.
Joyce 9-29-15
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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"I want to be something special" is very thought provoking. We all want to be something special. But, few of us are welling to look for something special in us. This little poem certainly opens the door to a multitude of possibilities. Some of the things, I wouldn't want to be. While others I couldn't expect to be.
"My true bell ringing forth from birth to wisdom" shows that we have a lifetime to reach our goal of being something special. Wisdom comes at different times and in different ways.
This poem is full of possibilities of a better life.
Well done.
Joyce 9-29-15
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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What a positive outlook with captivating statements about this work appeal. Thanking you for generous rate and pleasing comments.
Comment from Patricia Dsouza
You write amazingly well and bring out charm through it all. The picture merges well too. I love the choice of picture. Love the picture I pray your poem is recognized soon.
My favorite lines are:
I and them, being one, in reasoning.
United, joined to combat our enemies.
Against a host without regrets for us.
A leader in a world that aims starves.
My fingers playing notes of freedom.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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You write amazingly well and bring out charm through it all. The picture merges well too. I love the choice of picture. Love the picture I pray your poem is recognized soon.
My favorite lines are:
I and them, being one, in reasoning.
United, joined to combat our enemies.
Against a host without regrets for us.
A leader in a world that aims starves.
My fingers playing notes of freedom.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2015
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Touched truth within since the duties of being fall to all. Thanking you for generous rate and kind statements of encouraged hopes for this work.
Comment from country ranch writer
United one can save the world but separated it is every person for them self. You say I will be the beacon to show the way
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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United one can save the world but separated it is every person for them self. You say I will be the beacon to show the way
Comment Written 20-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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We all must be its what GOD expects. Most my works are rough ride, but a ride. Glad you had the chance to come. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
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Comment from petalangela
In these words you have recognised the need to be all that you can be. The first step has been taken the next one will not be difficult. I know you will make it because the words have in depth understanding of the requirement to be a humane human
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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In these words you have recognised the need to be all that you can be. The first step has been taken the next one will not be difficult. I know you will make it because the words have in depth understanding of the requirement to be a humane human
Comment Written 19-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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None I'm a bum, but feelings about others lower -potty waste. But this also is my opinion and you bang a pretty good drum too. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Wow, TPAC, you hit just about every topic mankind encounters, from what he wishes he could be, to what he really is. You have presented many choices, and end your symphony of words with the enlightenment of man. Great journey,
Rhonda
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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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Wow, TPAC, you hit just about every topic mankind encounters, from what he wishes he could be, to what he really is. You have presented many choices, and end your symphony of words with the enlightenment of man. Great journey,
Rhonda
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2015
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I tried and at least the intent was received even though there might be grammar errors or mishaps. Thanks for the cheering smile. And generous rate.
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I love poems that take you on a journey!