Act of Endurance
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Comment from KyColonel Randal
It is amazing the stories we observe just by being observant. This is an interesting poem which would make a good story. Never be afraid to use the same inspiration for more than one piece of writing. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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It is amazing the stories we observe just by being observant. This is an interesting poem which would make a good story. Never be afraid to use the same inspiration for more than one piece of writing. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Nice suggestion about using this same concept in another version of write, never thought about it. Thanking you for your kind reviews and welcomed remarks with generous rate.
Comment from Joyce Long
I'm afraid I missed something. There is a cat and a dog, but I got the feeling that the love was for the writer and not for each other. But, the last stanza seems to give a different story. Kind captivity, I thought was just sleeping in a cage at night. But, then you called the dog imprisoned. I was reminded of my sister with a cat and a dog. Sorry, I confused.
Joyce 01-24-16
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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I'm afraid I missed something. There is a cat and a dog, but I got the feeling that the love was for the writer and not for each other. But, the last stanza seems to give a different story. Kind captivity, I thought was just sleeping in a cage at night. But, then you called the dog imprisoned. I was reminded of my sister with a cat and a dog. Sorry, I confused.
Joyce 01-24-16
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2016
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Maybe a little more work could clear up this write. Happy outside the confusion some intents of this work touched. Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring thoughts.
Comment from JanPerry
First of all I didn't like pur-fect. If you want to accentuate purr, you could say purr-fect. At least we get the purr sound coming in.
"a metal bell crisp ring". It seems the adjectives are in the incorrect order here.
The crisp ring of a metal bell? Maybe. "myself night chilled by cold?" again the adjectives are in the wrong order. Good English must be maintained, even if you are trying to be creative. Creativity still has to make sense in this world.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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First of all I didn't like pur-fect. If you want to accentuate purr, you could say purr-fect. At least we get the purr sound coming in.
"a metal bell crisp ring". It seems the adjectives are in the incorrect order here.
The crisp ring of a metal bell? Maybe. "myself night chilled by cold?" again the adjectives are in the wrong order. Good English must be maintained, even if you are trying to be creative. Creativity still has to make sense in this world.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2016
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I agree with your statements and thank you for your guidance upon this write. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from bard owl
What an utterly sad poem of restricted love between different species. Your poem is quite different than anything I have read in a long time. I often feel sorry for creatures stuck in the house, watching out the window as life passes by. And it is so true that cats like to tease dogs. We have both cats and dogs.
Thank you for a unique read.
Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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What an utterly sad poem of restricted love between different species. Your poem is quite different than anything I have read in a long time. I often feel sorry for creatures stuck in the house, watching out the window as life passes by. And it is so true that cats like to tease dogs. We have both cats and dogs.
Thank you for a unique read.
Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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Glad you found delight in this work. Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring thoughts.
Comment from I am Cat
I had to sort of smile as I went down the page...
knowing that this little minx outside the fence was
playing hard to get and most likely just being
a little b*tch to this poor guy... :(
lol
sounds JUST like a cat! :(
(that's why I only own dogs)
Seriously .LOL
well played, I enjoyed the word play
that led me down the page...
and i was hooked...
line and sinker.
;)
well done
Cat (who likes dogs) ;)
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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I had to sort of smile as I went down the page...
knowing that this little minx outside the fence was
playing hard to get and most likely just being
a little b*tch to this poor guy... :(
lol
sounds JUST like a cat! :(
(that's why I only own dogs)
Seriously .LOL
well played, I enjoyed the word play
that led me down the page...
and i was hooked...
line and sinker.
;)
well done
Cat (who likes dogs) ;)
Comment Written 30-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015
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A greater love story than I have seen among man true concerns for each other making me wonder who evolved. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from Chellybelle
This such a good read, and believable too. I can really feel for the dog, being the dog person that I am. This story you told was a smooth ride. Thanks for that.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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This such a good read, and believable too. I can really feel for the dog, being the dog person that I am. This story you told was a smooth ride. Thanks for that.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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The dog and cat had a thing like a job. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I do love how you show it through the eyes of the dog. The description of that cat striding towards him is wonderful. I love the way you tell this story. Great job.
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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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I do love how you show it through the eyes of the dog. The description of that cat striding towards him is wonderful. I love the way you tell this story. Great job.
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Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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Thanks to those as yourself guiding patience a few less pits. Appreciate your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.