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Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Paths"poems inspired by Psalm 23
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Comment from Clover77
Very beautiful poem, well written and very, well, Christian. :} I loved your wording within this quatern. Good luck on your next poetry.
~Julia
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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Very beautiful poem, well written and very, well, Christian. :} I loved your wording within this quatern. Good luck on your next poetry.
~Julia
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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Thank for the positive review and the well wishes, Julia. I wish you all the best and thank you for the encouragement. Debi
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Well written quatern with the repeats in each paragraph. You paint a story with famous heroes of faith. From Joseph, David and Ester, people were brave and trusted in Jesus, Adonai, their Lord God. So many people today don't know the heroes or stories. What are they teaching the kids? As parents we need to bring up the children in the way they should go. We see shootings and bombings. We also see the youth going on mission trips to build homeless homes and feed the poor. We have choices and words to use. Very creative Bible witnessing to the nations!
God bless! <>< flylikeaneagle soli deo gloria!
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Well written quatern with the repeats in each paragraph. You paint a story with famous heroes of faith. From Joseph, David and Ester, people were brave and trusted in Jesus, Adonai, their Lord God. So many people today don't know the heroes or stories. What are they teaching the kids? As parents we need to bring up the children in the way they should go. We see shootings and bombings. We also see the youth going on mission trips to build homeless homes and feed the poor. We have choices and words to use. Very creative Bible witnessing to the nations!
God bless! <>< flylikeaneagle soli deo gloria!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much for the wonderful six stars! You will leave me smiling all evening. I appreciate the kind comments about the writing. Thank you for sharing your insights about the theme. I agree there is much bad, but also much good being done in the world today. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Comment from Ginnygray
Truly enjoyed the way the paths of faith are so diverse. From Joseph to David to Esther, all of these examples of diverse paths and how God uses his people in different ways to serve His kingdom! I enjoyed the 16 line quatern.
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Truly enjoyed the way the paths of faith are so diverse. From Joseph to David to Esther, all of these examples of diverse paths and how God uses his people in different ways to serve His kingdom! I enjoyed the 16 line quatern.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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I am happy to hear you enjoyed this poem and its subject. Thank you for the encouraging review. Debi
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Debi,
At first glance I thought this was a pantoum. Silly me! I caught on that I was wrong and had a re-read through.
Great iambic tetrameter lines and great abab rhyme scheme. You fooled me with Israel, but when I tried that lime a second time it worked fine.
Good repeating line. It works really well throughout. Smooth actually :)
Good story to share in a poem. I remember this bible story well so understand it perfectly.
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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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Hi Debi,
At first glance I thought this was a pantoum. Silly me! I caught on that I was wrong and had a re-read through.
Great iambic tetrameter lines and great abab rhyme scheme. You fooled me with Israel, but when I tried that lime a second time it worked fine.
Good repeating line. It works really well throughout. Smooth actually :)
Good story to share in a poem. I remember this bible story well so understand it perfectly.
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Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the great review, Joy. I wondered about the meter in a couple of spots, but since the form doesn't require iambic I went with it. Since I know how good you are at iambic, it means a lot to know I pulled it off. I wanted to go with "unique" instead of "diverse" but I couldn't get the rhymes to work and make the story to make sense. Well, as Brooke always says, be prepared to give up your favorite lines to make it work. Thank you for the encouraging comments. I appreciate it. Debi
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, w.j. debi, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful quatern poem about the path of faith and listing some of our bible heroes. I enjoyed reading it.
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this is an excellent write, w.j. debi, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful quatern poem about the path of faith and listing some of our bible heroes. I enjoyed reading it.
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Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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I am pleased you enjoy this poem and thank you for the encouraging comments. Debi