That Step
Sonnet - Faith Contest Entry74 total reviews
Comment from EleanorP
Really well chosen metaphor for faith, particularly well developed in verse three. I love the line "a stride so bold that courage seems too weak a name". Good rhyming too, well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Really well chosen metaphor for faith, particularly well developed in verse three. I love the line "a stride so bold that courage seems too weak a name". Good rhyming too, well done.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the kind words, Eleanor.
Steve
Comment from skye
I LOVE this poem of faith and these lines are the shining beacon, showing why. The example of the craftsmen, the image of the foot on a thin wire, paint the perfect example of what faith really is.
Excellent.
But lo, the slender thread of faith shines bright
entwined with love and patience, trust and hope.
A thousand craftsmen toiling through the night
could never manufacture such a rope.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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I LOVE this poem of faith and these lines are the shining beacon, showing why. The example of the craftsmen, the image of the foot on a thin wire, paint the perfect example of what faith really is.
Excellent.
But lo, the slender thread of faith shines bright
entwined with love and patience, trust and hope.
A thousand craftsmen toiling through the night
could never manufacture such a rope.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Skye, thanks for the lovely review.
Steve
Comment from sibhus
A wonderful poem that express such endearing thoughts on faith. Something to really ponder on. To ask yourself if your faith is really as strong as it should be, and to we have the ability to take that ultimate leap. Great poem and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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A wonderful poem that express such endearing thoughts on faith. Something to really ponder on. To ask yourself if your faith is really as strong as it should be, and to we have the ability to take that ultimate leap. Great poem and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the generous review.
Steve
Comment from rspoet
Your sonnet is so well written.
The meter perfect, rhyme as well, the turn in the third stanza, the ending couplet
But lo, it has a tensile strength divine, that makes it so much more than technically correct.
Love on so many levels, or so it seems
Exceptional
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Your sonnet is so well written.
The meter perfect, rhyme as well, the turn in the third stanza, the ending couplet
But lo, it has a tensile strength divine, that makes it so much more than technically correct.
Love on so many levels, or so it seems
Exceptional
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the thoughtful reading and review of my poem and the six shiny stars.
Steve
Comment from funmom03
I like it to mee it means courage to take the step towards love and marriage am I correct . Very good poetry keep writing poetry like this you do an amazing job
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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I like it to mee it means courage to take the step towards love and marriage am I correct . Very good poetry keep writing poetry like this you do an amazing job
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you.
Yes, I had that thought in my head, but also any situation requiring a 'leap of faith.'
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
If I was the bride I wouldn't come within a thousand miles of the church. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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If I was the bride I wouldn't come within a thousand miles of the church. This is very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Yeah, dancing snakes and flocking seagulls are enough to put anyone off!
Thanks, Charlie.
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
Comment from thee-name
Excellent poem. I enjoyed reading your rhyming writing.
What does it take but faith in love so pure?
With you to guide me, ev'ry step is sure.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Excellent poem. I enjoyed reading your rhyming writing.
What does it take but faith in love so pure?
With you to guide me, ev'ry step is sure.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you.
Steve
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thank you!
Comment from Hareem.S
This is absolutely beautiful. I love the theme of taking a bold step and having faith in the heart which takes over all the fears. You have made excellent use of expressions and words. Enjoyed it much.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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This is absolutely beautiful. I love the theme of taking a bold step and having faith in the heart which takes over all the fears. You have made excellent use of expressions and words. Enjoyed it much.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Hareem, thanks so much for the review and the six shiny stars.
Steve
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
You have , as they say, nailed it! What a beautiful answer to the call for a faith poem.
Favorites:
Screeching gulls of doubt
slender thread entwined with . . .
I enjoyed the internal rhymes: flocking, mocking and take, make The use of enjambment kept such a nice flow. I felt as if I were looking down from the wire, crossing with you. Winner, winner ( unfortunately, that is as far as I'm able to influence the outcome).
It was a joy to read.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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You have , as they say, nailed it! What a beautiful answer to the call for a faith poem.
Favorites:
Screeching gulls of doubt
slender thread entwined with . . .
I enjoyed the internal rhymes: flocking, mocking and take, make The use of enjambment kept such a nice flow. I felt as if I were looking down from the wire, crossing with you. Winner, winner ( unfortunately, that is as far as I'm able to influence the outcome).
It was a joy to read.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Wendy. It was a bit of a last-minute decision to enter, so I was quite pleased with how this turned out. I have written about doubtgulls before (more gruesomely, I recall) - I don't know what gulls have ever done to me to be subjected to such negativity!
Good enough for a podium finish I hope, but has it done enough to take that final step? I don't know.
Steve
Comment from humpwhistle
I'm a little surprised, Steve. But maybe not.
Sometimes I let this site color my notions about such words as faith. Faith needn't be theological. See how I'm working this out?
I rarely comment about visual images, but this one is right on. Especially when coupled with the line about the craftsmen's rope.
Well all is said and done, life is a leap? of faith.
Or is faith the net? Christ, life sooooo complicated.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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I'm a little surprised, Steve. But maybe not.
Sometimes I let this site color my notions about such words as faith. Faith needn't be theological. See how I'm working this out?
I rarely comment about visual images, but this one is right on. Especially when coupled with the line about the craftsmen's rope.
Well all is said and done, life is a leap? of faith.
Or is faith the net? Christ, life sooooo complicated.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Lee, thanks for reviewing and for the six stars.
I have already outed myself as a non-believer, but the contest was at pains to point out that any kind of faith would do. I'm also inclined to think that there might very well be a believer or two on the committee, hence the open-endedness...
Steve
