When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Jeff's Gaffe"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from IndianaIrish
What a snippy, awful think to say to you and all his family. Your video is great...looks like a restaurant where you could spend hours just looking around. I wonder if you had a response?? LOL great descriptive chapter, Shari.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
(")Never again," Nichole laughed.
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reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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What a snippy, awful think to say to you and all his family. Your video is great...looks like a restaurant where you could spend hours just looking around. I wonder if you had a response?? LOL great descriptive chapter, Shari.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
(")Never again," Nichole laughed.
still free-lance for a pay check(paycheck)
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Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Thanks for noting the spags, Karyn. Next post, you'll find out the answer. Hope to get it on tomorrow.
Comment from Debbie Noland
Well, he has ape arms and a buffalo head and acts like an ass. That is quite a critter there you are getting for a son-in-law. Your story continues to enthrall as you cautiously feel your way toward this wedding. I look forward to every installment.
Technique-wise, I like your short paragraphs. They move us quickly from thought to thought and from setting to setting, giving your narrative the effect of a well-made movie.
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Well, he has ape arms and a buffalo head and acts like an ass. That is quite a critter there you are getting for a son-in-law. Your story continues to enthrall as you cautiously feel your way toward this wedding. I look forward to every installment.
Technique-wise, I like your short paragraphs. They move us quickly from thought to thought and from setting to setting, giving your narrative the effect of a well-made movie.
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Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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LOL It does sound like I put together a monster. Appreciate your comments on my technique. White space is always more user-friendly.
