My grandchild's like...
A butterfly.87 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
Clearly you love your grand boy, and a fine lad he appears to be. Hug him as much as he will allow, because the day will before you are ready and he will want to high five you or just acknowledge you with a shrug of he head and or shoulders, whichever way will be the cool way at that time. I speak from the experience of dealing with my sixteen year old too cool for school grandson. Oh he is still in school, but an old man such as I am couldn't possibly know how it is in the world today. This is a heads up, get ready for it.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Clearly you love your grand boy, and a fine lad he appears to be. Hug him as much as he will allow, because the day will before you are ready and he will want to high five you or just acknowledge you with a shrug of he head and or shoulders, whichever way will be the cool way at that time. I speak from the experience of dealing with my sixteen year old too cool for school grandson. Oh he is still in school, but an old man such as I am couldn't possibly know how it is in the world today. This is a heads up, get ready for it.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you, for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, and the advice, blessings, Roy.
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Your grandson may break the mold, but it is very difficult. We are in a battle with forces that want to steal the hearts and minds of our young. Since this is a grandchild you must have experienced some of this as a parent. Believe me it is much worse today. Good luck.
Comment from Charlene0513
To royowen,
We all can relate to the little toddler's that just love to pull at your heart strings.
His spirit pure as an angel's sigh, very sentimental metaphor given.
or the soul-like pleas of a baby's cry.
Good use of perfect rhyming on your 2nd stanza.
Charlene
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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To royowen,
We all can relate to the little toddler's that just love to pull at your heart strings.
His spirit pure as an angel's sigh, very sentimental metaphor given.
or the soul-like pleas of a baby's cry.
Good use of perfect rhyming on your 2nd stanza.
Charlene
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you Charlene, for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
Comment from zanya
Yes a portrait of sheer joy and love and life in this poem portrayed through the appropriate image of a butterfly - a striking image 'His spirit pure as an angel's sigh' and a great pic
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Yes a portrait of sheer joy and love and life in this poem portrayed through the appropriate image of a butterfly - a striking image 'His spirit pure as an angel's sigh' and a great pic
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you, for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
Comment from choice
This poem is excellently written. It has a flawless flow and the rhyming pattern works beautifully. The imagery is very powerful.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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This poem is excellently written. It has a flawless flow and the rhyming pattern works beautifully. The imagery is very powerful.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you for this outstanding review, comments and lovely stars, blessing, Roy.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a lovely poem Roy and a perfect simile likening your grandson to a butterfly. Good mono-rhyme throughout and beautifully descriptive. Very good aabb rhyme and good use of metaphor in stanza 2. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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This is a lovely poem Roy and a perfect simile likening your grandson to a butterfly. Good mono-rhyme throughout and beautifully descriptive. Very good aabb rhyme and good use of metaphor in stanza 2. Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you Dorothy, for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
Comment from flamingstar
Gosh, I'm glad my son is raised. I wouldn't know how to do it now - do you get rid of the TV, the computer, the newspapers? Never leave the house? The potential for contamination is everywhere. Gorgeous poem. Love the "flitting vapour" and the meerkat heads! (Love meerkats in general).
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Gosh, I'm glad my son is raised. I wouldn't know how to do it now - do you get rid of the TV, the computer, the newspapers? Never leave the house? The potential for contamination is everywhere. Gorgeous poem. Love the "flitting vapour" and the meerkat heads! (Love meerkats in general).
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you I love the meerkats too, and thank you, for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Helena Frances
Beautiful--both the picture and the verse!
You have captured the wonder, amazement, and gratitude that grandchildren bring!
I am enjoying in my grandchildren what I was too busy to appreciate while raising my children---a wonderful second chance:)
Great job.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Beautiful--both the picture and the verse!
You have captured the wonder, amazement, and gratitude that grandchildren bring!
I am enjoying in my grandchildren what I was too busy to appreciate while raising my children---a wonderful second chance:)
Great job.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Yes Helena, it's an easier time with the grandchildren than with one's own! Thank you for you kind, generous and encouraging reviews, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a nice grouping of rhyming couplets that definitely follow the butterfly usage and present a plethora of similes to describe Grandma's love for a child's child.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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This is a nice grouping of rhyming couplets that definitely follow the butterfly usage and present a plethora of similes to describe Grandma's love for a child's child.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you Bill, for these great comments and lovely review, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Thamp
A beautiful piece Roy. Although the poem is beautifully constructed as always by you, that is not why I gave the six stars. They are for the content of the poem and your notes. We forget how tender we were and our children are - we become hard. Thank you for the tears you have released from my heart - the hate in the news is a reflection of... well, you know. Thank you Roy, you are a good man.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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A beautiful piece Roy. Although the poem is beautifully constructed as always by you, that is not why I gave the six stars. They are for the content of the poem and your notes. We forget how tender we were and our children are - we become hard. Thank you for the tears you have released from my heart - the hate in the news is a reflection of... well, you know. Thank you Roy, you are a good man.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the most upbeat, encouraging review and and marvellous support and lovely stars, blessings, Roy,
Comment from judiverse
Excellent rhyme and flow in this. Best of luck in the contest, and this is a creative take on butterfly, to compare your grandson to a butterfly. The words "flitting vapour" floating by carry this out very well. Great sound with the words zip and zap. You also describe him as having graceful movements. This is a very delightful poem devoted to your grandson. Lovely photo. judi
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Excellent rhyme and flow in this. Best of luck in the contest, and this is a creative take on butterfly, to compare your grandson to a butterfly. The words "flitting vapour" floating by carry this out very well. Great sound with the words zip and zap. You also describe him as having graceful movements. This is a very delightful poem devoted to your grandson. Lovely photo. judi
Comment Written 22-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thanks Judi for the lovely affirmation and great review and comments, blessings, Roy.
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You're very welcome. judi