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60 word dash story

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Comment from daeneam
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Hehehe I like your 60-word dash. It intrigued me. I thought it is something more brutal. Have you experienced it yourself? I did.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Thank you for your kind review and comments for my micro story, Daeneam. My brother did a little something like this because he wanted the quarter from the tooth fairy. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
Comment from sibhus
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Great story, and an excellent job of completing a tale within the limit of only sixty words. I thought the last line was perfect. The yeth really emphasized the fact that Jake had pulled his tooth. A well written entry for the contest, and good luck.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Thanks so much, Sib, for your great review and comments for my micro story. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and thanks for your good luck wish in the contest. I'm eapecially glad you liked the last line :-)
    Thanks!
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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Ouch! I wish mine would come out as easy.
An hour and a half in the chair, with FOUR
lots of injections, which were not working -
and all that pain and still it wouldn't budge.
Now I'll have to go through it again - just
that one rogue tooth.

You said so much in your 60 words - good luck with the contest.


Margaret

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Wow, Margret, it sounds like you're going through quite an ordeal. I hope the second time goes better for you. Thank you for your very kind review and comments for my micro story. I'm so glad you liked it, and thanks for your good luck,wish in the contest.
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

This was an amusing little anecdote. Told well within the 60 word limit, although, If it were me, I'd be in too much pain to feel the elation! lol

Good luck in the contest
GMG

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Thank you for reading my micro flash fiction story, GMG, and for your kind review and comments. My brother did something like this once because he got tired of waiting for the tooth fairy quarter. Thanks for your good luck wish, and glad you enjoyed.
Comment from fimarie78
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very cleverly done. I was all prepared for someone to hang themselves. Knowing if I read on, I may cry. So, it was only a tooth. Love the lisp on the yes. Good luck in the contest. Fiona

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Thank you, fimarie, for your kind review and for taking the time to read and share your comments for my micro flash fiction story. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for your good luck wish for the contest.
Comment from Tatarka2
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I loved the surprise in this one. At first, I thought he might be suicidal. Then, it turned into a delightful story about a child. Very well done - a complete and surprising story in 6-0 words.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Thank you for this great review for my micro flash fiction story, Tatarka. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your comments. I'm glad you enjoyed.
Comment from TAB_that's me
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I like this one - it is so very cute. Well written - I see no spag and nothing to change. Good luck in the contest.

Teresa

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Thank you for your review for this micro flash fiction story. I'm glad you enjoyed and thanks for the good luck, Teresa.
reply by TAB_that's me on 16-Mar-2015
    I voted for it:)
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Thank you so much!
Comment from humpwhistle
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Ah! A real story in sixty words! And a fun little
tweak at the end. Well done.
I've never tried that method of tooth extraction myself.
But I remember tongue-worrying a loose tooth for days
until I got up the nerve to give it a yank.

Best of luck at the polls.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    I've never done this as well, but my brother did because he wanted the tooth fairy money. Appreciate your review and comments, hw. Thanks for reading.
Comment from adewpearl
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great pairing of photo and story
I like the way you build up the fearful sense that this is going to lead to a tragic suicide and then the humorous revelation that all he actually was anticipating was the pulling of his tooth :-) - good use of misdirection Brooke

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts regarding this micro fiction, Brooke. I'm glad you enjoyed.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
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Yes! A complete story with conflict, crisis, resolution, character and dialog. You've done a good job here. I like it. :) Nancy

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
    Thank you for your kind review and comments for this micro fiction story, Nancy. I'm delighted,you enjoyed it.