Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

A compellingly dramatic story within the contest's strict word limits
great use of illustrative examples to add to the emotional intensity and to deliver a strong, meaningful message
Brooke

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015

Thank you very much for the review. Your comments are much appreciates.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Good

Even the story is interesting enough, I think it could have been written with more descriptive wording (yes, even in 60 words) to make it more interesting.
Teresa

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 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015

You are probably correct. But at the end of your life. contemplating it, I don't think most of us would really be very eloquent! Simple man, simple life, simple words. Gone.

Thank you for taking the time to read and I do appreciate an honest response to the piece. Thank you

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Seriously, this could be the true story of MY life, and I hope it's fiction on your part.

I don't believe suicide is a sin, as one must be completely distraught to commit such an act, and deserving of sympathy, IMO, though I realise it can sometimes be considered selfish when loved ones are left behind the bear the pain.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015

It is certainly fiction Ray. And on a personal level I agree with you about suicide but it is referred to as a mortal sin, if you believe in that sort of thing. Thanks for the review and comments. Much appreciated.

reply by Domino 2 on 06-Jan-2015

Thanks for your gracious reply. Ray

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi the author,

You have certainly listed a number of bad choices there, and identified the fact that all of life is about the choices we make, or don't.

Patrick

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015

Thanks for reading. it must have been quite a chore! It would be nicer to explore more but word constraints! Thanks for the review. Much appreciated.

reply by Patrick G Cox on 06-Jan-2015

LOL, I was concerned the review would exceed the story in length!

reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015

I did a monostich poem (one line) a while back. the reviews were ridiculous! LOL

Comment from lalajovanoski

Excellent

this was a truly intriguing read!!

I very much enjoyed this fine, well composed, inspiring piece,

Well done!
Very captivating!!

Thanks for sharing!!

this is an interesting piece - I had to read it twice to really figure it out. It is full of vivid concrete imagery


This was a very intriguing read!!! Very captivating

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015

You appear to have given this same review at least seven or eight times today to different people. This is the second time you have actually given it to me. It is not helpful and is a bit of a cheat.

Comment from ENIGMATICKAY

Excellent

Great entry for this contest. Within the 60 word limit.

Direct and to the point. Tells the whole story ending with the final bad choice.

Good luck.

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 Comment Written 06-Jan-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015

Welcome to the site. It is great here! thanks for the review and your comments