Sometimes Roses, Sometimes Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Morning Glory"A collection of sonnets
78 total reviews
Comment from DSMalott
Well formed and stated Sonnet. Rhyming structure consistence and not at all forced; words and sounds paired nicely. The description of the plants beauty AND danger is well expressed and cleverly climaxed with the final lines.
Good job.
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Well formed and stated Sonnet. Rhyming structure consistence and not at all forced; words and sounds paired nicely. The description of the plants beauty AND danger is well expressed and cleverly climaxed with the final lines.
Good job.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
This really changed from a lovely flower to a night of sin in a hurry. Like that a lot kept me reading and absorbing your words Great job
TK
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This really changed from a lovely flower to a night of sin in a hurry. Like that a lot kept me reading and absorbing your words Great job
TK
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from Chikara
A tale of seduction care of a single flower, though not by a woman.
You set a stage of infatuation and end with a twist finish, carried by smooth flow and words; a dawn into evening, where temptation may prove to strong.
A quality piece.
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A tale of seduction care of a single flower, though not by a woman.
You set a stage of infatuation and end with a twist finish, carried by smooth flow and words; a dawn into evening, where temptation may prove to strong.
A quality piece.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from Mark Schardine
I really enjoyed this sonnet with its message of tempting pleasure that harms and can finally kill. By the time we understand the danger, it is too late.
Thank you for the helpful author's note. You make a very good use of this chance to explain the morning glory.
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I really enjoyed this sonnet with its message of tempting pleasure that harms and can finally kill. By the time we understand the danger, it is too late.
Thank you for the helpful author's note. You make a very good use of this chance to explain the morning glory.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hello there~!
This is such a beautiful poem... and yet... and yet, it is so.. I don't find the words to describe it... It's beautiful in a different way. I love the way you described the flower.. THe last few lines puzzled me but t he notes cleared them up.. Wow! Though I liked morning glories, I never knew that they had such lethal qualities.. but then again, most beautiful things are..
Great Job!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
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Hello there~!
This is such a beautiful poem... and yet... and yet, it is so.. I don't find the words to describe it... It's beautiful in a different way. I love the way you described the flower.. THe last few lines puzzled me but t he notes cleared them up.. Wow! Though I liked morning glories, I never knew that they had such lethal qualities.. but then again, most beautiful things are..
Great Job!
JazakAllah Khair~!
(God Bless~!)
(^_^)-<~~KAUSAR~~>-(^_^)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from fdgsr
Fleeting beauty and passion of the embrace. Embrace life and you need not awaken in a morning of sinful regret and fading emotions. The sonnet is so much a statement of the ordinary life of cycles. Morning and night, summer and winter, youth and old age, past and future. Time is our master and we are the slave. We obey whether we will it or not. To manage time is all we do. Mankind believes that he shapes it, owns it, and determines its value. NOT!
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Fleeting beauty and passion of the embrace. Embrace life and you need not awaken in a morning of sinful regret and fading emotions. The sonnet is so much a statement of the ordinary life of cycles. Morning and night, summer and winter, youth and old age, past and future. Time is our master and we are the slave. We obey whether we will it or not. To manage time is all we do. Mankind believes that he shapes it, owns it, and determines its value. NOT!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from Spiritual Echo
My favourite line is...I cannot tell your nightmare from my dream.
I could rite a book about that single line of inspiration.
Your sonnet flows, scattering strong imagery and allowing the reader to create her own metaphor through your words.
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My favourite line is...I cannot tell your nightmare from my dream.
I could rite a book about that single line of inspiration.
Your sonnet flows, scattering strong imagery and allowing the reader to create her own metaphor through your words.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a lovely entry and follows the rules of form well. You pick a wonderful flower to pay tribute to since it is like life encompassing both goodness and the risk of evil in one package. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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This is a lovely entry and follows the rules of form well. You pick a wonderful flower to pay tribute to since it is like life encompassing both goodness and the risk of evil in one package. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A beautifully written poem - the words,
and both rhythm and rhyme flowing perfectly.
I love the whole presentation - good luck
with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
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A beautifully written poem - the words,
and both rhythm and rhyme flowing perfectly.
I love the whole presentation - good luck
with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from skye
What a layered poem. It reads as a flower poem, but underlying is the message of humanity. You chose the morning glory, which is a gorgeous bloom and one that lends itself to the subtleties of your words.
Excellent sonnet style.
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What a layered poem. It reads as a flower poem, but underlying is the message of humanity. You chose the morning glory, which is a gorgeous bloom and one that lends itself to the subtleties of your words.
Excellent sonnet style.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
