A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "~Betrothed Remains~"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
85 total reviews
Comment from barkingdog
I don't see anything wrong with Chadil doing what he promised. Her body in this sphere may be inanimate(dead), but he married her universal essence using the body only as an earthy symbol for earthy witnesses. Your last two stanzas seem to say this to me.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
I don't see anything wrong with Chadil doing what he promised. Her body in this sphere may be inanimate(dead), but he married her universal essence using the body only as an earthy symbol for earthy witnesses. Your last two stanzas seem to say this to me.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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I think it is romantic, in a slightly morbid sense. As long as the marriage was never consummated. Hah, but I won't go there, LOL...yet
Thanks for the fabulous review, BD!
Comment from Alan K Pease
Death takes its toll at a cost of rotten flesh, dreams cut from the soul,which will wander throughout out the mystery of the grave. Hard to see someone marrying a corpse for the last memories of her will be the pallor of her skin rotten or not.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
Death takes its toll at a cost of rotten flesh, dreams cut from the soul,which will wander throughout out the mystery of the grave. Hard to see someone marrying a corpse for the last memories of her will be the pallor of her skin rotten or not.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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Yes, it is a bit creepy, Alan, but in a morbidly romantic way. As long as they never consummated the marriage, heh heh...
Thanks for the excellent feedback and review, my friend!
Comment from elchupakabra
Yet another perfect rendition of the pictapoem series. It really is difficult to find any flaws in your work, the images, music and words are seamless and create a fantastic overall allusion. Your classic rhyming quatrains flow really well and employ great alliterations here as well. Excellent work, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
Yet another perfect rendition of the pictapoem series. It really is difficult to find any flaws in your work, the images, music and words are seamless and create a fantastic overall allusion. Your classic rhyming quatrains flow really well and employ great alliterations here as well. Excellent work, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2013
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And thank you for your continued support of the PICTAPOEM ® series, elchupakabra. I t had truly meant the world to me, my friend.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Dean,
What a delightfully creepy write this is. You're right ... truth is stranger than fiction. I think it rather creepy to wed a corpse, but to each his own. :)
Masterfully written and presented, with good scary images and technique for the reader.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
Dean,
What a delightfully creepy write this is. You're right ... truth is stranger than fiction. I think it rather creepy to wed a corpse, but to each his own. :)
Masterfully written and presented, with good scary images and technique for the reader.
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much, Connie. I am so glad you enjoyed it, and I'm very grateful for your fabulous review.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Dean,
I immediately recognized that creaking door from the M.J. song. Well, I'm pondering if I would ever consider marrying a corps. I suppose it has it merits.
My partner would never contradict me or make a mess around the house with his stuff. Hmm...does rotting flesh count as a mess?
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
Hi Dean,
I immediately recognized that creaking door from the M.J. song. Well, I'm pondering if I would ever consider marrying a corps. I suppose it has it merits.
My partner would never contradict me or make a mess around the house with his stuff. Hmm...does rotting flesh count as a mess?
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Rotting flesh...a mess? Geesh, I certainly hope not. If it is, I'd better get busy and clean up around here, heh-heh!
Thanks for the wonderful review, Lou. Review...Lou. Hey, that rhymes! Do you do, Lou, voodoo like you do so well? Hah hah!
Thanks again, my friend...
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You're cracking me up!
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Comment from emrpoems
if I had a six it would be yours. I feel like I am reading Shakespeare or some other renowned poet. Congrats on this write. Visuals are also impressive.Rhyming quatrains. Perfect and imperfect rhymes used
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
if I had a six it would be yours. I feel like I am reading Shakespeare or some other renowned poet. Congrats on this write. Visuals are also impressive.Rhyming quatrains. Perfect and imperfect rhymes used
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much, emrpoems. The fact that you enjoyed reading it, and that it entertained you, is a six enough for me, my friend.
Thanks for such a wonderful review!
Comment from emjaihammond
CREEPY! You always seem to come up with something both original and amazing. This is no different. The creativity you show belongs in Hollywood, you really are talented. I always enjoy seeing what you put together.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
CREEPY! You always seem to come up with something both original and amazing. This is no different. The creativity you show belongs in Hollywood, you really are talented. I always enjoy seeing what you put together.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Well, thank you so much for such a wonderful compliment, emjaihammond. I truly appreciate that!
I'm very glad you enjoyed the poem...
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Dean
As usual magnificent presentation .... makes me a bit drooly for some ""ripe lustful flesh" .... though I'm picky, I like mine fresh. Well obviously you have aroused my taste buds, and then all other senses peak as the performance continues.
Hmmmmm ... can't remember marrying a corpse, though I wish my first husband was one .... and no, I would marry him even then .... I know better now!
I enjoyed your notes ... you should have made a short tale of it and embarked on a prose career as well.,,,, oooops, I see you have done that already. Lo-ha ... I've obviously been spending too much time in my coffin lately.
Perfect execution of your interesting tale, both rhyme and meter. Wonderful, creepy imagery and excellent use of allit. consonance and assonance - "Cool cobwebbed crypt", "anchored/ancients", "harken/higher" - to mention a few.
If she wasn't any good in bed, you'd think she'd at least keep the crypt tidy ..... all those cobwebs ... my my. Well of course this deserves a six ... then if you got all you deserved there would be none left for anyone else. I think FS should double our six quota. Well, I smell fresh blood and the sun has gone down over here .... Hugs and love bites - Lovi xoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
Hi Dean
As usual magnificent presentation .... makes me a bit drooly for some ""ripe lustful flesh" .... though I'm picky, I like mine fresh. Well obviously you have aroused my taste buds, and then all other senses peak as the performance continues.
Hmmmmm ... can't remember marrying a corpse, though I wish my first husband was one .... and no, I would marry him even then .... I know better now!
I enjoyed your notes ... you should have made a short tale of it and embarked on a prose career as well.,,,, oooops, I see you have done that already. Lo-ha ... I've obviously been spending too much time in my coffin lately.
Perfect execution of your interesting tale, both rhyme and meter. Wonderful, creepy imagery and excellent use of allit. consonance and assonance - "Cool cobwebbed crypt", "anchored/ancients", "harken/higher" - to mention a few.
If she wasn't any good in bed, you'd think she'd at least keep the crypt tidy ..... all those cobwebs ... my my. Well of course this deserves a six ... then if you got all you deserved there would be none left for anyone else. I think FS should double our six quota. Well, I smell fresh blood and the sun has gone down over here .... Hugs and love bites - Lovi xoxoxoxo
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Hah ha, well, well, Lovinia. Your cleverly penned review was worth far more to me than a mountain of meaningless six star ratings. I could tell you associated with it, and that means a great deal to me. I appreciate the fact that you wanted to award it one. I run out of "sixers" 'round bout Friday night, without fail, every week. I too have petitioned Tom to up the quota. They have once already, he told me.
Thanks for the wonderful review. Sleep tight, and pleasant screams...
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I feel sad for the young men, for if he is genuine he has a very bad conscience about waiting so long to marry the girl. I see it as a sweet gesture that creeps me out a bit. Giddy (love the coffin)
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
I feel sad for the young men, for if he is genuine he has a very bad conscience about waiting so long to marry the girl. I see it as a sweet gesture that creeps me out a bit. Giddy (love the coffin)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much Giddy. And, sure, it is sad, and he was trying to do the honorable thing, no doubt about it.
Thanks for the insights and the wonderful review.
Comment from Gracie619
This was incredibly intense and moving. However, I did find myself wanting to turn on lights to read it. Amazing artwork to accompany the piece. I'll read it again in the light of day.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
This was incredibly intense and moving. However, I did find myself wanting to turn on lights to read it. Amazing artwork to accompany the piece. I'll read it again in the light of day.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2013
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Hey, I'm glad you liked the artwork, Gracie619. I appreciate your kind review, too!