Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "You Really Do See Stars"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
41 total reviews
Comment from Terror2s
Your ending was great. Your story drew me in right from the beginning. Nice job of describing the small house and letting the reader know how cramped it felt. T2
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Your ending was great. Your story drew me in right from the beginning. Nice job of describing the small house and letting the reader know how cramped it felt. T2
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I'm glad you liked the ending.
Beth
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
Beth, I can identify with much of your dilemmas, anxiety, and budget problems of this chaptr.
I think yournarration of events, telling your story in sequence and appropriate dialog makes a good memoir. Some feedback I got in writing my own was to use some faction techniques. I've done that with several chapters. But most seem to like my regular story telling.
Your chapter is also educational in good business. Even telling of mistakes is helpful. Thanks.
Don
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Beth, I can identify with much of your dilemmas, anxiety, and budget problems of this chaptr.
I think yournarration of events, telling your story in sequence and appropriate dialog makes a good memoir. Some feedback I got in writing my own was to use some faction techniques. I've done that with several chapters. But most seem to like my regular story telling.
Your chapter is also educational in good business. Even telling of mistakes is helpful. Thanks.
Don
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you Don, I appreciate the review and the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Wow, you certainly had your challenges. Drat those renters, people are unpredictable some times aren't they. I am hoping Don is ok and no concussion. Small edit:
headfirst toward -to +the foyer door... I enjoyed this chapter. :-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Wow, you certainly had your challenges. Drat those renters, people are unpredictable some times aren't they. I am hoping Don is ok and no concussion. Small edit:
headfirst toward -to +the foyer door... I enjoyed this chapter. :-) Carolyn
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much Carolyn. I appreciate the review and the comments. There was no concussion or if there was he recovered with no after effects. Thanks for noting the spag.
Beth
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi, beth - thanks for this peek into your life during the traumatic phase of buying and selling a house.
Your story is well-constructed and clear with touches of humour to enliven it.
Steve
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Hi, beth - thanks for this peek into your life during the traumatic phase of buying and selling a house.
Your story is well-constructed and clear with touches of humour to enliven it.
Steve
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you Steve, I appreciate the review and nice comments. I'm glad you noticed the touches of humour.
Beth
Comment from EMB
I'm not surprised that the first bid that came in was the highest. That's probably how they make their money, being the first to throw down a bid, hoping that they find people who aren't shopping around.
I enjoyed "peaking over your shoulder" as you made plans for your house. :)
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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I'm not surprised that the first bid that came in was the highest. That's probably how they make their money, being the first to throw down a bid, hoping that they find people who aren't shopping around.
I enjoyed "peaking over your shoulder" as you made plans for your house. :)
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Thank you, Edward. I have friends who are willing to take the first price quoted. Every time we've gotten bids there is always a big price difference for the same job. It pays to shop around. I'm so glad you enjoyed this.
Beth
Comment from Samuel Dickens
That last line made me laugh, and yeah, he's right! (Been there, done that) Those renters that backed out--boy, I'd have wanted to strangle them. I moved too many times to count while in the Navy, so yes, I felt your pain.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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That last line made me laugh, and yeah, he's right! (Been there, done that) Those renters that backed out--boy, I'd have wanted to strangle them. I moved too many times to count while in the Navy, so yes, I felt your pain.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you Samuel. I appreciate the review and comments. I'm glad you're still reading my story.
Beth
Comment from Sefiros
I understand this piece. Parents spent years building up money for a new house and they just got overbid. I did like how things started out nice but soon spun out of control. You lived an interesting life, the kind people want to read about. Congrats.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I understand this piece. Parents spent years building up money for a new house and they just got overbid. I did like how things started out nice but soon spun out of control. You lived an interesting life, the kind people want to read about. Congrats.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the review. I don't consider my life that interesting to others but if you think it is something people like to read that is music to my ears.
I really appreciate your comments.
Beth
Comment from cinderbella
That last line is just a classic! I loved it. You have once again proven your tremendous gift for storytelling. The writing flows, and the short paragraphs keep it moving along more quickly.
I remember moving out of a house in the same kind of a rush. I called the lady who was moving in, and offered to pay her for cleaning, I would take it off her rent. She jumped at the chance. lol
I'm looking forward to more of your story. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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That last line is just a classic! I loved it. You have once again proven your tremendous gift for storytelling. The writing flows, and the short paragraphs keep it moving along more quickly.
I remember moving out of a house in the same kind of a rush. I called the lady who was moving in, and offered to pay her for cleaning, I would take it off her rent. She jumped at the chance. lol
I'm looking forward to more of your story. :) Sandra
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you Sandra. I appreciate the great review. I think the taking money off the rent if someone is willing to do their own cleaning is a topnotch idea. I'm appreciate you reading my story.
Beth
Comment from humpwhistle
Moving has to be one of the onerous tasks we're
ever called on to perform. If I ever have to move again,
all I'm taking is suitcase.
Good chapter. But I think something's amiss with your author's note.
Peace, Lee
Still I (was)concerned that there might be a concussion.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Moving has to be one of the onerous tasks we're
ever called on to perform. If I ever have to move again,
all I'm taking is suitcase.
Good chapter. But I think something's amiss with your author's note.
Peace, Lee
Still I (was)concerned that there might be a concussion.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you Lee. Moving has always been a nightmare for me because I don't know how to get rid of anything that has a ounce of value. I accumulate so much junk. I admire anyone who could leave it all behind and just bring what fits in a suitcase. Thanks for catching the spags.
Beth
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, beth, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where moving was a quick and not so painless aggravation. i enjoyed reading this one...
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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this is very well written, beth, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where moving was a quick and not so painless aggravation. i enjoyed reading this one...
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting on this. I appreciated what you wrote, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Beth
