Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 63 "part two, Chapter 19"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Kelleigh
I am just joining, so I will certainly go back and read the first part, but I thought that this part was brilliant...it is hard to get medical terms right especially if you watch any medical TV shows (they get them wrong all the time). What a scary situation! I think that you handled it all very well! My only question would be in the last line, who is the "she" who followed the gurney? Was it the Dr. that they just spoke to? Slightly confusing because of the throng of Drs. and nurses who are surrounding the moving gurney. Otherwise, Excellent!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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I am just joining, so I will certainly go back and read the first part, but I thought that this part was brilliant...it is hard to get medical terms right especially if you watch any medical TV shows (they get them wrong all the time). What a scary situation! I think that you handled it all very well! My only question would be in the last line, who is the "she" who followed the gurney? Was it the Dr. that they just spoke to? Slightly confusing because of the throng of Drs. and nurses who are surrounding the moving gurney. Otherwise, Excellent!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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I will recheck that area. Thank you for the kind review,
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
I think Bobby got what was coming to him, now let's hope the other 'boys' backing him up, get what they deserve.
Good story, nice cliff hanger ending.
Patrick
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hi Barbara,
I think Bobby got what was coming to him, now let's hope the other 'boys' backing him up, get what they deserve.
Good story, nice cliff hanger ending.
Patrick
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from Starlit Ink
This is powerful and nicely written, and makes one think of the injustice of domestic violence and it's impact. The dialogue was imaginative and thought-provoking.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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This is powerful and nicely written, and makes one think of the injustice of domestic violence and it's impact. The dialogue was imaginative and thought-provoking.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Leen1
Although I just joined you with this Chapter I am well aware of an abusive relationship because we all know someone who has gone through one. Your writing captures the perfect picture of how much a woman endures when living her life with abuse. I thank you for bringing the seriousness of abuse to the forefront reminding everyone through your written word that abusive relationships however not spoken of most certainly does exist. Great story concept which is appreciatively received.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Although I just joined you with this Chapter I am well aware of an abusive relationship because we all know someone who has gone through one. Your writing captures the perfect picture of how much a woman endures when living her life with abuse. I thank you for bringing the seriousness of abuse to the forefront reminding everyone through your written word that abusive relationships however not spoken of most certainly does exist. Great story concept which is appreciatively received.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Imsharrison
Another beautifully written chapter covering a very real and painful subject.
You touch on this subject well. It is a very believable story. It doesn't over dramatise, yet it brings into sharp focus the realities of abuse. You have got the balance perfect in my view.
Good writing.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Another beautifully written chapter covering a very real and painful subject.
You touch on this subject well. It is a very believable story. It doesn't over dramatise, yet it brings into sharp focus the realities of abuse. You have got the balance perfect in my view.
Good writing.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words,
Comment from tinams
This is a story filled with emotion and drama. Your use of vivid imagery evokes explanations and descriptions. Very well written :) Tina
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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This is a story filled with emotion and drama. Your use of vivid imagery evokes explanations and descriptions. Very well written :) Tina
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
Heaps of tension in this chapter. At least Anna is alive and that dreaded monster dead. I hope Anna comes away okay. This trauma could change many things in her life. Well written. luv jada
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Heaps of tension in this chapter. At least Anna is alive and that dreaded monster dead. I hope Anna comes away okay. This trauma could change many things in her life. Well written. luv jada
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
The scene was clear and action described
perfectly... the whole so well presented..
I'm so glad he is dead... now, hopefully,
Anna's op will be successful and she
can live a life without fear.
All in all, most enjoyable and deserving of a six,
Barbara.
Margaret
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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The scene was clear and action described
perfectly... the whole so well presented..
I'm so glad he is dead... now, hopefully,
Anna's op will be successful and she
can live a life without fear.
All in all, most enjoyable and deserving of a six,
Barbara.
Margaret
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hello, Barbara. Wow, what a compelling story. Great action, plenty of tension, and a story that combines excellent dialogue with a well written narrative. I saw this pop up on the list and wondered why I did not get a notice in my message box. I just noticed that I had never signed up as a fan. I will take care of that right away. I love your writing and want to be informed when they become available. Have a great day of writing...Tim
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Hello, Barbara. Wow, what a compelling story. Great action, plenty of tension, and a story that combines excellent dialogue with a well written narrative. I saw this pop up on the list and wondered why I did not get a notice in my message box. I just noticed that I had never signed up as a fan. I will take care of that right away. I love your writing and want to be informed when they become available. Have a great day of writing...Tim
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I hope I don't disappoint you.
Comment from Writingfundimension
I found this chapter horrifying in its implications, barbara. To have the extent of the physical damage done to Anna be spelled out really brought home the deadly intentions of Bobby. As in all of these types of cases, the hardest thing for Anna to overcome will be the repercussions of her deadly encounter. Very well done, barbara.
Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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I found this chapter horrifying in its implications, barbara. To have the extent of the physical damage done to Anna be spelled out really brought home the deadly intentions of Bobby. As in all of these types of cases, the hardest thing for Anna to overcome will be the repercussions of her deadly encounter. Very well done, barbara.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 23-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome, barbara.