Miss Higgledy Piggledy
36 total reviews
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Congradulations on writing a nifty rhyming poem with rich imagery. Your poem is charming with great rhymes, very good rhythm and excellent
alliteration. Your third & forth stanzas are the best: "Miss Higgeldy Piggledy, peaked into his room and saw he was sweeping it out with a broom, everything shining, his windows gleamed bright, not even a speck of dust was there in sight. Suddenly Smarty Pants reached out with his hand then frowning, then smiling, he went over to stand by his clean window so that he could see some shiny bright coins, one, two and three!" I love your delightful story poem. IÂ wish you good luck in the Children's Rhyming Poem writing contest with your poem. I'd recommend your charming poem to other reviewers. Please have a lovely day.
Missy.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2012
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Poet,
Congradulations on writing a nifty rhyming poem with rich imagery. Your poem is charming with great rhymes, very good rhythm and excellent
alliteration. Your third & forth stanzas are the best: "Miss Higgeldy Piggledy, peaked into his room and saw he was sweeping it out with a broom, everything shining, his windows gleamed bright, not even a speck of dust was there in sight. Suddenly Smarty Pants reached out with his hand then frowning, then smiling, he went over to stand by his clean window so that he could see some shiny bright coins, one, two and three!" I love your delightful story poem. IÂ wish you good luck in the Children's Rhyming Poem writing contest with your poem. I'd recommend your charming poem to other reviewers. Please have a lovely day.
Missy.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2012
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Thank you for this lovely review, Missy, I am so pleased you enjoyed it!
Comment from ajdevore
Yes he was and they are both adorable as is this nice contest entry and the picture. I can think of lots of places you could publish this from children's magazines to parenting mags. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2012
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Yes he was and they are both adorable as is this nice contest entry and the picture. I can think of lots of places you could publish this from children's magazines to parenting mags. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much for this really lovely review! So very kind!
Comment from mommerry
This was a cute, well-written submission. I only hope Miss P-W did find some pennies as a reward eventually. I can offer nothing to improve your work.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2012
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This was a cute, well-written submission. I only hope Miss P-W did find some pennies as a reward eventually. I can offer nothing to improve your work.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2012
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Thank you so very much, mommerry for this really lovely review!
Comment from Janet Foor
Sweet poem and a story that just might work. Very nice rhythm and rhyme to your children's poem. Miss Higgledy Piggledy was a delightful read.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2012
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Sweet poem and a story that just might work. Very nice rhythm and rhyme to your children's poem. Miss Higgledy Piggledy was a delightful read.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much for this lovely review!!
Comment from Patti R.
'peeked' not peaked!
What a wonderful story in a poem. I can imagine this turned into a big colorful picture book. Young children would enjoy this very much. I would only suggest you work on the meter a little. The poem reads a little higgeldy piggledy itself! Syllable counts and rhythm could use some work, but overall an excellent poem!
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2012
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'peeked' not peaked!
What a wonderful story in a poem. I can imagine this turned into a big colorful picture book. Young children would enjoy this very much. I would only suggest you work on the meter a little. The poem reads a little higgeldy piggledy itself! Syllable counts and rhythm could use some work, but overall an excellent poem!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Patti, for you lovely review! This spelling error has now been changed, thank you!
Comment from adewpearl
strong use of rhyming couplets
love her name :-)
good steady cadence when read aloud, an important factor in children's poetry
vivid descriptive detail
I love how you teach a lesson in an entertaining, non-preachy way
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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strong use of rhyming couplets
love her name :-)
good steady cadence when read aloud, an important factor in children's poetry
vivid descriptive detail
I love how you teach a lesson in an entertaining, non-preachy way
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you for this lovely review, Brooke!
Comment from mauial
Clever children's poem you wrote here. It read real easy and the rhyming was great. But I think nowadays pennies wouldn't be much of a motivating factor to get a room cleaned. More likely dollars :)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Clever children's poem you wrote here. It read real easy and the rhyming was great. But I think nowadays pennies wouldn't be much of a motivating factor to get a room cleaned. More likely dollars :)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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I know, in our case it's pounds! Still even we can dream pennies would be enough! Thank you for reading and reviewing this Mauial, I appreciate it!
Comment from wiljacro
HI! I love your tale of these two siblings. The fact that, for a change, it is the young girl, who is the untidy one, also appeals. I think that if this was to be recited at a children's party, the boys would roar with laughter,and the girls protest that their rooms were always kept tidy. A real smiley poem that brightened my afternoon. Good luck in the contest. wiljacro.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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HI! I love your tale of these two siblings. The fact that, for a change, it is the young girl, who is the untidy one, also appeals. I think that if this was to be recited at a children's party, the boys would roar with laughter,and the girls protest that their rooms were always kept tidy. A real smiley poem that brightened my afternoon. Good luck in the contest. wiljacro.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you for this really nice review, I'm so pleased it gave you a smile!
Comment from TDLRasmar
A very nice poem. I personally would have like to seen a more consistent meter. It is just my personal preference but, I like kids poems that could very easily be sung as a song.
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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A very nice poem. I personally would have like to seen a more consistent meter. It is just my personal preference but, I like kids poems that could very easily be sung as a song.
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Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you for taking the time to review this.
Comment from LilHippie
How precious! How beautifully written. And a great lesson lies within the lovely poem. He taught her to keep her room clean. Just spreading that positive energy. Very adorable. Lovely rhyming. The photo you chose is adorable and perfect for "room cleaning." This is an adorable children's poem. Good luck.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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How precious! How beautifully written. And a great lesson lies within the lovely poem. He taught her to keep her room clean. Just spreading that positive energy. Very adorable. Lovely rhyming. The photo you chose is adorable and perfect for "room cleaning." This is an adorable children's poem. Good luck.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much, LilHippie for this lovely review!
