It Consumes My Breath
Dealing with Anger Issues.33 total reviews
Comment from debskatz
Hi Dklrdmcches,
I've read (or tried to read) several of your poems before, but I have to admit, I was clueless. At least with this one, I think I understood most of it. Certainly anger can be a consuming beast if not taken care of.
Found what I think is one little spag:
last call to "exist" the vicinity, - did you mean "exit?"
Thanks for sharing with us!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Hi Dklrdmcches,
I've read (or tried to read) several of your poems before, but I have to admit, I was clueless. At least with this one, I think I understood most of it. Certainly anger can be a consuming beast if not taken care of.
Found what I think is one little spag:
last call to "exist" the vicinity, - did you mean "exit?"
Thanks for sharing with us!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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I thank you for sticking around and giving this one a chance. I do kind of write with that cryptic style, but this one is actually much different and strait forward. I thank you for stopping by once again...dark lord
Comment from keimosobie
Don't give in. Very heart felt and soleful. This poem had a smooth flow and good use of colors. The pic was amazing too. Thanks. Tim
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Don't give in. Very heart felt and soleful. This poem had a smooth flow and good use of colors. The pic was amazing too. Thanks. Tim
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you my friend, appreciate it...dark lord
Comment from Eternal Muse
A great anger poem. Love often inspires anger, as love is an adrenalin land (smile) and is very illogical. You've described the emotion very well, excellent picture and visuals.
Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Love, Y.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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A great anger poem. Love often inspires anger, as love is an adrenalin land (smile) and is very illogical. You've described the emotion very well, excellent picture and visuals.
Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Love, Y.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind words...dark lord
Comment from Amy Comstock
Well, this is not my favorite subject matter..however, you are very descriptive in your words and I feel what you are saying. You did a great job of conveying the anger..and the picture you chose backs up your words.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Well, this is not my favorite subject matter..however, you are very descriptive in your words and I feel what you are saying. You did a great job of conveying the anger..and the picture you chose backs up your words.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you for taking time to read my work, I appreciate it...dark lord
Comment from Tengeresz
Hi
So here it is. I sense real talent in you're writing but it needs polish. You are a bit wordy, you repeat similar themes to much. Red aloud what you wrote. Have someone else read it to you aloud. Keep at it.
Temgeresz
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Hi
So here it is. I sense real talent in you're writing but it needs polish. You are a bit wordy, you repeat similar themes to much. Red aloud what you wrote. Have someone else read it to you aloud. Keep at it.
Temgeresz
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you very much for your honesty, I appreciate it...dark lord
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Dark Lord,
I don't know if you are speaking about yourself or not but no matter as this is an all consuming poem. Your carefully chosen words are stark, explicit and stunning. You chose the perfect picture to depict anger. The protagonist fights the demon with all his might but in the end he has to give into it. Here are the six stars I don't have ******. Well done....chey
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Hi Dark Lord,
I don't know if you are speaking about yourself or not but no matter as this is an all consuming poem. Your carefully chosen words are stark, explicit and stunning. You chose the perfect picture to depict anger. The protagonist fights the demon with all his might but in the end he has to give into it. Here are the six stars I don't have ******. Well done....chey
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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This piece was about the anger I let consume me yesterday. I wrote about it to release the tension that I allowed to build up. Thank you for the support....dark lord
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I'm slow to anger but when I allow my temper to take over it's not a pretty sight!
Comment from c_lucas
A plea to love and be loved. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery.
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A plea to love and be loved. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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An interesting take on this piece, I enjoyed your thoughtful, insightful view...dark lord
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You're welcome, DL. Charlie
Comment from festosgb
Wow what a powerful poem! If I had a six to give, you'd have it. That is one of the best things I've read on this site. Really flowing style, Powerful, emotive and really, really good depiction of anger. A really enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Wow what a powerful poem! If I had a six to give, you'd have it. That is one of the best things I've read on this site. Really flowing style, Powerful, emotive and really, really good depiction of anger. A really enjoyable read.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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WOW, Thank you so much for the glowing review, I do appreciate you stopping by and reading this piece...dark lord
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a terrifying poem! Your writing is full anger, dark thoughts, and sends out fear to the person you want to control. This is very descriptive writing, drawing the reader in, as if you are wanting to get a traumatic response. It is really electrifying, a brilliant piece of work. I wouldn't like to meet you on a dark night! (or are you really a pussy cat?) A great read, a pleasure to review. xsx
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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This is a terrifying poem! Your writing is full anger, dark thoughts, and sends out fear to the person you want to control. This is very descriptive writing, drawing the reader in, as if you are wanting to get a traumatic response. It is really electrifying, a brilliant piece of work. I wouldn't like to meet you on a dark night! (or are you really a pussy cat?) A great read, a pleasure to review. xsx
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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WOW! Never thought of my work as brilliant, but I will take your word for it...dark lord
Comment from jaded831
Talk about a dark poem, your poem was a great read. Poetry is a way of freeing the soul and truly you let your feelings flow. You crafted your poem well and I hope you found some freedom.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Talk about a dark poem, your poem was a great read. Poetry is a way of freeing the soul and truly you let your feelings flow. You crafted your poem well and I hope you found some freedom.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
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Thank you so very much for the great review, I appreciate it...dark lord
