Blue Child
A child that wasn't33 total reviews
Comment from danpald
The reality of a dream comes to life
The love that builds remains in thrust
How often our dreams is for a love to be
Part of the life we share in a dream
The poem is one that gives life and hope
To the memory of one wanted or lost
Either form does make its way
Into our dreams for another day
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2011
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The reality of a dream comes to life
The love that builds remains in thrust
How often our dreams is for a love to be
Part of the life we share in a dream
The poem is one that gives life and hope
To the memory of one wanted or lost
Either form does make its way
Into our dreams for another day
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 02-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2011
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What a great treat! This is insightful and so generous of you. This is so special!
Comment from Shirley B
What a lovely poem. The words you chose were so heart tugging. I felt the want in the mood of your fine imagery. This is an excellent poem. You took this prompt into a whole different level. Great job. If I had a six, you would have it. I love your honesty. Shirley
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2011
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What a lovely poem. The words you chose were so heart tugging. I felt the want in the mood of your fine imagery. This is an excellent poem. You took this prompt into a whole different level. Great job. If I had a six, you would have it. I love your honesty. Shirley
Comment Written 02-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2011
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Thank you Shirley for "feeling" my words.
Comment from animatqua
This is very poignant. It brings out the inner feelings a woman feels after a miscarriage, or when a couple finally accepts they will not be able to have a child. Well done on that.
You might want to look at the last section, though. To that point the poem flowed gracefully and brought the reader along with it. This last section is awkward, and does not say, I think, what you want it to say.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2011
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This is very poignant. It brings out the inner feelings a woman feels after a miscarriage, or when a couple finally accepts they will not be able to have a child. Well done on that.
You might want to look at the last section, though. To that point the poem flowed gracefully and brought the reader along with it. This last section is awkward, and does not say, I think, what you want it to say.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the great review and for connecting with my words.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is beautiful, a wonderful picture you have created here for the child that was planned but didn't come into existence on earth. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2011
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this is beautiful, a wonderful picture you have created here for the child that was planned but didn't come into existence on earth. i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 01-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the great review to this work.
Comment from edc70.bze
Very beautiful poem, sad, hopeful and touching. Very well structured, nice flow of words into each stanza. It brings emotions and makes the reader identify with the sadness even when one has not lived through the sorrow. Nice work, no adjustments needed.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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Very beautiful poem, sad, hopeful and touching. Very well structured, nice flow of words into each stanza. It brings emotions and makes the reader identify with the sadness even when one has not lived through the sorrow. Nice work, no adjustments needed.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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Thank you so much for this very sensitive and emotive review. Bless you.
Comment from Fishcake
I found this thought provoking and it made me reflect on a million "might have beens" in my life. Loved the phrasing, very poignant. It has certainly made me reflect on what could have been but did not happen. Powerful.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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I found this thought provoking and it made me reflect on a million "might have beens" in my life. Loved the phrasing, very poignant. It has certainly made me reflect on what could have been but did not happen. Powerful.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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I feel honored that my work here brought to you reflections on a million might have beens. What a great phrase!
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I am going to check more of your writing out.
Comment from Espresso momma
I like that. Honoring the child you 'never' had. what a differance a word makes. You did this so smoothly and perfect. I thank you for the read.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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I like that. Honoring the child you 'never' had. what a differance a word makes. You did this so smoothly and perfect. I thank you for the read.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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Thank you Roberta for your great and emotive review.
Comment from Joan E.
I relished Belgano's Miro-like artwork that you chose to accompany your courageous poem. Your "selfish stars" says it all. You certainly captured the essence of the contest's prompt--best wishes in the voting booth with this evocative entry. -Joan
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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I relished Belgano's Miro-like artwork that you chose to accompany your courageous poem. Your "selfish stars" says it all. You certainly captured the essence of the contest's prompt--best wishes in the voting booth with this evocative entry. -Joan
Comment Written 01-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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Thank you Joan for reading my work and for catching that "selfish star."
Comment from jmdg1954
Nicely written poem for this contest entry. The words to me showed the emotion you've kept in your heart for hiwever many years. Never let that feeling leave your mind or heart.
My best wishes to you,
John
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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Nicely written poem for this contest entry. The words to me showed the emotion you've kept in your heart for hiwever many years. Never let that feeling leave your mind or heart.
My best wishes to you,
John
Comment Written 01-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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Thank you John for reading my story and for your heart felt comments.
Comment from jerrymckeon
The last stanza the word "because" appears twice within a word of each other - I'm not sure what you might mean with you say "I don't Miss him." Even the graphic used is a little confusing. Cheers! Jerry
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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The last stanza the word "because" appears twice within a word of each other - I'm not sure what you might mean with you say "I don't Miss him." Even the graphic used is a little confusing. Cheers! Jerry
Comment Written 01-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2011
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Thank you for reading this work and your well taken comments. Working on it.
